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Author: Tehuti 88
Fiction Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Drama - Reviews: 2 - Published: 04-08-05 - Updated: 06-12-05 - id:1880489
AUTHOR'S NOTE:

This is a fantasy novel I wrote in the space of two months, back in 1998. It was the very first time I actually sat down and plotted a novel out from start to finish, and what's more, did RESEARCH up the wazoo. I had been interested in Egyptian mythology already for quite a while, but I really wanted to get what facts I could straight. So aside from me taking obvious liberties with the actual physical landscape of Egypt, all the other "incorrect" things you'll see in here I actually made incorrect on purpose. All I remember of the research process is how tedious it was to keep notes in different sections entitled "Food," "Furniture," "Clothing," "Religion," etc....and how our computer monitor died in the process. :( That was what prompted me to finally STOP researching and just START WRITING.

I actually wrote my "novel" Horus around 1988-9; that version was mostly inspired by pop songs then current (the "soundtrack" included Paula Abdul, Bobby Brown, and Mike The Mechanics...I still stand by Mike The Mechanics!!), and was just...hideously...AWFUL. But I still liked it. Fortunately I grew up and figured it could use a massive rewrite. That version, Version 2, is the one you see before you. Now that another long period of time has elapsed, I see the need for ANOTHER rewrite. Firstly, the whole subplot involving the humans is just tacky and forced; it really needs help. Secondly, as someone else stated (and I unfortunately have to agree with), the final battle scene is a real letdown, considering all the tension leading up to it. My writing style has changed considerably since writing this, but at this point in time I do not have it in me to redo it just yet. So it goes. :/

A prequel for this novel, which covers the conflict between Set and Osiris of Egyptian mythology, was fully plotted out and well in progress; this novel, Osiris, is currently on hiatus as I have not had time to work on it. Two loosely planned sequels are Kingdom Of The Hawk (about Set's battle against the evil sea god) and The Rebel Prince (an out-of-continuity tale about Set's takeover of Egypt, and Anubis's exile to the desert with his rebel followers). It's unlikely I'll have the time or inclination to work on any of those any time soon; however, I do have numerous short stories and novellas also dealing with Egyptian mythology (my take on it, that is), which I should be uploading to the site in the future. I have not worked on any new Kemet stories in a very long time :( but I could again sometime, should I get the chance and inspiration.

I also have a few adult items featuring the characters from these stories; those cannot be posted here, so let me know if you'd like to see them. These include another serial of mine, the Ameni Chronicles, featuring the Apsiu race which appears in this novel. (These writings are definitely NOT for minors.)

If you are someone who once enjoyed this story, please add it to your favorites again. Please be aware however that although it is completed, I am not currently working on it; my time is spent mainly between my Manitou Island and "Ameni Chronicles" writings. I MUCH appreciate polite criticism but do not expect me to set to work editing this novel any time soon.

STORY SUMMARY: Years ago, the god Set murdered Horus's father and seized the throne of Kemet. Now Horus is grown...and it's time to take back his birthright.

A fantasy based on the Egyptian myth.

GENRES: Fantasy, drama, mythology, adventure

This story is rated PG-13 (T) for:

Fantasy violence
Mild adult language

DISCLAIMER: Please take note that while this novel IS based on Egyptian mythology, artistic liberties have been taken, and the Kemet presented here is entirely of my own creation. (The gods did not ride kudus; there was no such thing as the Apsiu; etc.) Might I suggest that, if you wish to learn more about Egyptian mythology, you seek out a good educational website first, and come back here only when you wish to be entertained. :)

PLEASE COMMENT IF YOU READ. I cannot demand that anyone comment on EVERY chapter, but if someone comments once, and never returns, all I can assume is that they stopped reading, since most people do that after a few chapters. Considering how much time it took me to write all this, surely a little comment every few chapters or so cannot be asking too much, if you're enjoying the story...? COURTEOUS, CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM is also welcome if you have any suggestions--please let me know not only what I've done wrong, but what I've done right (if anything), as well! (As nice as they are, "Good story. Please update soon" comments aren't too helpful. Such comments are so vague, I can't even tell if the person giving them even read anything. :/ )

(I'm sorry but unless you are very good with grammar, spelling, etc., and write about themes similar to mine, then please do not ask me to read your story in return. I have limited online time and am very picky about what I read. If I like something of yours though, perhaps we can become review buddies.)

Should I stop updating this at any point, it is for one of two reasons: 1. something (e. g. a site glitch) is again keeping me from doing so; or 2. reviews/comments are few and far between, so I saw no point in wasting my time posting it anymore if no one is reading. In either case, I'll still be writing; just e-mail me to find out where.


PROLOGUE

"I show you the land in turmoil. What should not be has come to pass."
--Egyptian account of civil strife, 1st Intermediate Period

IN LATE EVENING the sun cast the western cliffs into shadow as it set, the shadow growing long and staining the wide flat sands as if the land were bleeding. Away from the cliffs, still occasionally struck by light, five shadows moved slowly northward.

They were far from the river, away from the floodplain; the sand kicked up by the hooves of their mounts glittered redly in the waning light. Once in a while they would disappear beneath the darkness cast by an outcrop of rock, only to reappear on the other side, seemingly from nowhere. It was good there were no villages or towns nearby; any inhabitants would have been surprised or even terrified by the looks of the traveling group. For while they had the looks of humans, two of them men, two of them women, their faces were not human; the two men had faces as of dogs, one a wolf and the other a dark-furred jackal; and the women had the features of cats, a lioness and a lynx, their eyes glowing yellow-green as they glanced over their shoulders at the desert behind them. And the animals they rode were not donkeys, they were antelope--wild kudus, their horns spiraling upward in a vain attempt to scratch the sky. The fifth shadow was a wolf trotting alongside them, a gleaming white ostrich feather upon its head. Together they looked like a gang of desert demons searching for a tomb to crawl in or a hapless villager to snatch. Though the way they glanced around them showed they were anxious of being caught themselves.

The sun disappeared behind the western cliffs. The group's eyes adjusted to the darkness. The wolf strayed to the side to sniff the ground. The women and the jackal-headed man continued watching the desert around them, each of them armed and ready to fight should they have to. Only the wolf-headed man refrained from nervous watching, though he kept his ears pricked, one hand on the hilt of his sword. The hooves of the kudus crunched across pebbly gravel. Somewhere, a nightbird cried out.

The wolf-headed man abruptly brought his kudu to a halt, jerking his head to the side and scanning the desert. The other four froze; five pairs of eyes scoured the stone, the sand, the cliffs; the lynx-headed woman slowly brought up her bow and reached for an arrow. The jackal-headed man held up his hand and shook his head, a movement so slight as to be almost imperceptible. The lynx-headed woman paused before nodding. She lowered the bow.

Far to the south, toward the river, a jackal yipped.

The jackal-headed man's lips curled away from his teeth. He reached to his side to grasp a carved ivory boomerang. The lynx woman readied her bow; the lioness woman lifted a heavy ax. The wolf growled, the fur on his hackles rising.

The wolf-headed man's kudu pawed the earth nervously; its rider stilled it and held up a hand to the others.

"Wait," he whispered between clenched teeth.

They did. The desert was too quiet; what few sounds did come set their teeth on edge. Fear of the unknown was bad enough; now that they knew what followed them, they were even more afraid.

The nightbird called again, closer this time.

"Just a bird," the wolf-headed man said aloud, waving them to move forward. His eyes told the others to prepare themselves. They nodded and followed, pretending to lose interest in the noises. The kudus trudged onward.

They were allowed for a short while to continue traveling before a horde of hideous, long-snouted creatures descended on them, riding animals even more hideous, screeching and howling and waving their weapons at the air. The wolf-headed man waited until the last possible minute to turn around and attack, howling as well. The other four turned as one and launched themselves at the horde, the lioness woman swinging her ax, the lynx woman letting loose an arrow. The wolf-headed man charged at a straggler, drawing his huge bronze sword and raising it over his head.

Instantly all was confusion. The attackers, about six or so blunt-eared, bat-winged creatures in heavy armor, hadn't expected much of a fight. But the travelers were going to give them one. The lioness woman continued swinging her ax from side to side as she rode through the melee, letting out a battle cry; the ax's half-moon blade connected with one of the creatures right in the middle. He grunted and fell from his mount, which immediately pulled away. The jackal-headed man tossed his boomerang; it struck another of the creatures in the head, knocking him out. The boomerang hummed; a blue sheen enveloped it and it came swinging back to its master, who aimed and threw it again.

One of the creatures, bigger than the others and with bright red ear lappets hanging down the sides of his face, snarled and went at the wolf, which was snapping at the legs of one of the mounts. Before his sword could strike the wolf it was knocked aside by another. He looked up just in time to feel the pommel smash into the side of his head. The wolf-headed man shoved him to the ground and went to the aid of the lioness woman, who was struggling with another creature over possession of her ax. A deep slash to the arm settled the matter in the lioness woman's favor; she and the wolf-headed man attacked the creature together. He pulled hard on his mount's reins, losing balance and falling when the mount reared up. He scrabbled to his feet and staggered off, bawling like a wounded calf.

The wolf-headed man tried to follow, only to find himself blocked by the mount, which was frantically looking for a place to run. He glanced to left and right before realizing he'd never catch up. He craned his neck and cupped a hand to his mouth.

"Maftet!" he shouted; the lynx woman turned in his direction. "Finish him! He can't return to the palace!"

The lynx woman nodded. Their plans couldn't be jeopardized. If news of their location got out, everything could fail.

She fitted an arrow and, drawing back the bowstring, let it fly. The fleeing creature stopped in his tracks, his spine arching as the arrow embedded itself between his shoulderblades. A second later his muscles relaxed and he slumped forward.

There were two more creatures left. One, seeing his leader lying on the ground, a sword-gash in his head, screamed and dug his heels into his mount, twirling his club in the air. The wolf jumped and knocked him off, sinking his teeth into the creature's leg. The creature tried to swing at him; the wolf ducked and the boomerang thudded against the creature's throat with a sickening crunch. The creature's eyes went wide; he choked and clawed at his throat ineffectively. The wolf, hovering nearby, moved in and quickly finished him off with one bite, rather than watch him suffocate. Then he joined the others.

The last creature had been busy trying to revive his companion, the first one struck by the boomerang. When the wolf-headed man turned toward him he quailed and dragged his comrade to his feet, throwing him across the back of one of the mounts and leaping atop another. He kicked the mount in the flanks; it squealed and galloped off, the other following.

"Stop him!" the wolf-headed man shouted.

The jackal-headed man hurled his boomerang. It struck the creature's wing, tearing a ragged hole through the membrane. The creature screamed with pain but only goaded the mount harder. The lynx woman fired more arrows, but the rider was by now out of range, and disappearing quickly across the cooling sand.

The travelers watched him go, saying nothing. There was no preventing it now; the palace would learn of their whereabouts, and more of the creatures would soon be joining them. It was inevitable.

There was only one thing to do, and that was what they'd been trying to do already.

They had to reach the Delta.

The jackal-headed man pulled his kudu up close. "I'm sorry," he said. "I should have aimed higher."

"You did what you could." The wolf-headed man turned away to inspect the creature he'd felled. The others dismounted and they stood looking down at him.

"This is one of his captains," the wolf-headed man said, indicating the creature's red ear lappets. The others shuffled their feet uneasily. "He'll be sending out others soon."

"We were lucky this time," the wolf said. He sniffed the air and a breeze ruffled the feather he wore. "Next time, they'll be better prepared."

The wolf-headed man nodded. "We have to make better time. For all we know some of the Kana have already reached the Delta. They could be waiting for us."

"What if they've found him?" the lioness woman asked.

He shrugged. The truth was, he'd been worrying about that himself. "Then I don't know what." He turned away from the Kana captain and got back on his kudu. He glanced over his shoulder at the wolf.

"Khenti." The wolf looked up at him. "Go on ahead of us. I know the Apsiu; they won't notice you're missing if we meet up with them again. Go on to the Delta and find him. Remind him of who he is. Bring him back to us so he can do what he's meant to."

The wolf nodded and loped off silently. The other four watched until he was nothing more than a tiny dot darker than the rest of the shadows; when the land had swallowed him up the women and the jackal-headed man buried the bodies as quickly and quietly as they could, while the wolf-headed man kept watch, his sword still drawn. By the time they'd finished shooing off the remaining mounts, and were on their way northward again, the last of the light had drained from the sky, leaving it black and speckled with stars. They didn't stop to make camp. They'd lost too much time already.

They had to find him. Soon, or else their land was doomed.

Continued...



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