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Author: Mrs. Ducky
Fiction Rated: M - English - Tragedy/Romance - Reviews: 1 - Published: 01-19-06 - Updated: 01-19-06 - id:2093897

One time there was a girl who everyone knew. She was friends with everyone but still she was lonely. Inside she felt no one cared about the true her, until she me this guy. She thought he was cool and cute but thought no matter what she couldn’t get him. He started going out with one of her friends but she continued to talk to him. She felt there was a connection between the two of them. As time went on she still felt lonely but when she talked to him nothing mattered. Even though the boy had now started going out with a different friend of hers she still continued to talk to him. They became closer and closer as time went on. Sometimes he would talk to her about his problems or ask for advice on her friends and sometimes she would ask him for advice on guys. Little did she know he was giving her the wrong advice. His evil plan was to make her jealous with her friends and eventually get her himself. Soon enough they were together. The rush was great to the young girl. Him being her first real boyfriend it was a little uncomfortable. She called him every night as she was asked and said, “I love you” back even if she wasn’t sure if she meant it. A week after thanksgiving the young girl broke up with the boy because she felt like she couldn’t breath. As if she were being smothered with a pillow in this relationship. A week later the boy and girl were back together.

It was after Christmas that she finally said, “I love you” and meant it. It was smooth sailing from there. But…as soon as the new year started the loneliness was taking its toll on the young girl. The girl took up poetry and started writing about the two feeling that were most dependant in her life, depression and love, and only showed them to one of her friends. In February shortly after she started writing poetry the boy’s best friend committed suicide. She could understand his grief, though nothing like this had happened to her, and she helped him through it. As she did the girl began to fall deeper and deeper into depression. Her parents emotionally abusing her at home and stress was killing her at school. She had to please everyone and if she didn’t she made herself a complete failure. In April, the girl found out from a friend the boy had bought the girl a ring! The girl had thought first that it was a promise ring but a friend of hers had said that she thought it was an engagement ring. When the girl confronted the boy about what his friend had told her he asked her to marry him. Though the girl was finishing the 8th grade and the boy the 10th she felt ready to except the responsibilities and said yes. As their relationship grew the girl grew more and more depressed. When she talked to him still nothing mattered. He made everything in her life spectacular.

Until one day when the girl talked to the boy’s twin sister. Days he had been gone before she heard anything from him. She found out he had walked over 1000 miles to see her. (If u read the intro you’d know he lives 2000 miles away.)

He had been hit by a care and almost died. The girl cried all day then cried her self to sleep. That morning at one he called her.

“What the hell is your problem?” She asked as she tried to wake up.

“I wanted to give you your ring” he replied in a sick like soft voice.

“But you got hurt…you shouldn’t have,” she said in a concerned like still groggy voice.

Their conversation went on for a few minutes before he had to go. She then went back to sleep knowing her was ok. A few weeks later the girls band camp and school started. Soon after his school started and conversation stopped. When they could they would talk on weekends. And soon the girl felt as if they were growing apart. She told him how she felt and he assured her they would be together for the rest of their lives and that it’s the same as the year before. She told him he was right and that she was just being a baby and the subject was dropped.

Soon after, about a month or so, the girl had suicidal thoughts. Even thought people told her she would be missed she continued to plan it. Once she had even cut…well twice. One day she was going to after a field show (marching band show) but he called and saved her yet again.

But one weekend after the last competition, before championships, before thanksgiving she felt low, lower than low, she knew she was going to do it. Ring…Ring…Ring… She tried to call him to stop her self but all she got was the machine. She tried her friend but nothing. She was going to do it and no one could stop her. She called him again and when he answered she told him she loved him and that she was sorry then hung up. When the boy, now a junior, tried calling her back he got her answering machine.

“Hey if your calling you don’t know I’ve just hung myself. I love you all! Especially you my pooh bear and I’m sorry its come to this.”

The boy started crying and didn’t believe it. He couldn’t. He drove the 2000 miles to her house and her parents took him to the hospital where she was. They didn’t know about the engagement but they took him knowing she cared deeply about him.

He looked at her, tears in his eyes. Tubes were down her throat. He looked at the machines measuring pulse and breathing. “Why,” he whispered. She opened her eyes and looked up at him. He was looking at the wall so she grabbed his hand as tears rolled into her hair. He looked down at her as his own tears fall he wipes hers away. The doctor comes in to check on her and takes the breathing tube out.

“Why,” he whispered to her again. She looked at her parents but didn’t say anything and he knew exactly what was wrong.

When she was aloud to come home she packed her things and snuck out of her house at two in the morning-nothing ahead of them but 2000 miles of freedom, back to his home. To follow her dreams of being with him…forever…



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