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Author: Emotionless Crystal
Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Reviews: 8 - Published: 10-19-06 - Updated: 10-19-06 - Complete - id:2263612

I'm the girl
Who no one can see
I'm the girl
No one wants to be

I'm the girl
Who cried and cried
I'm the girl
Who's broken inside

I'm the girl
With so many loose ends
I'm the girl
Who fouled up again

I'm the girl
In a broken world
I'm the girl
Whose head is in a whirl

If I'm that girl
In fragments and pieces
If I'm that girl
With so many wrinkles and creases

Tell me why
Because I can't comprehend
Tell me why
You love me again


Another attempt I wrote while I was waiting for my exam to finish. I tried to keep to the four stanza thing. Do you think this is too long? Too short? Does it rhyme properly? Does it strike any heartstrings? Is it okay? Is it horrible? Please, do give me feedback. It's open for interpretation, could be a best friend, family etc. etc.

P.S. I will update 'The Ultimate Guide to Mallory Reynolds' and 'Girls vs. Boys' tomorrow or the day after tomorrow because my exam would have finished.



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