Author: Aspiring Author PM
To the Tune Of: OKLAHOMA!. Randomly inspired, but also because it's Israel's Independance Day in a few weeks. ! PLEASE tell me what you think! This isn't a generic plea for reviews, this is a genuine call for help! Thank you! !Rated: Fiction K - English - Words: 277 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 03-19-07 - Status: Complete - id: 2335944
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Inspiration: The first two lines of the chorus.
(The) Land of Israel (The) Land of Israel Chorus:
Where the sun shines bright on land and sea,
And the rocks and trees, the old cities,
Filled with people singing joyfully!
Worth protecting every night and day,
With our love and life, through joy and strife,
We choose you no matter what they say!
We know we belong to the land,
And the land we belong to is grand,
And when we say
"Kol od ba'levav" yay!
We're only saying
You're doing fine Land of Israel,
Land of Israel, okay
I-S-R-A-E-L Land of Israel... Yay!
(The) Land of Israel Chorus:
NOTE: "Kol od ba'levav" is the start of Israel's national anthem.
END NOTE: Okay guys, I'm really serious about this. What sort of comments and suggestions do you have? I need other opinions on this, especially in the way of technical line construct - you don't have to know about Israel or anything to have a valid opinion.
Please tell me what you think! This isn't a generic plea for reviews; this is a genuine call for help! Thank you!