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A/N: Hey ppl I no mi speling hasn't been that gr8 an ppl hav been flaymin mi 4 it so i got mi freind chloe (she's an honors student) 2 umm...wat do u call it...oh ya proofreed mi poems so they wil have proper speling n gramar n w/e. also i stoped usin numbers insted of leters even tho it lookd rly kewl. chloe lyks mi poems a lot btw n called them "meeningful n hartbreaking."
Anywai i hope this wil mak mi peoms better.
jessie
Now that you've gone away
I look into the blank white space
Where you used to be
And try hopefully
Hopelessly
As my
wrists are opened
and the razor is stained an unforgiving red
To fill that void
With a pool
A lake
Of glistening crimson
And as surely as I know this pain will never end
I know that you will never come back
No matter how much blood I shed
No matter how many tears
On this dark, cold winter's night
Everything is just an agonizing canvas
Of brutal red
And soulless white
A/N: wow i think ive improoved alot! I hope u do 2! I even made a rime in that last stansa! Thx chloe i luv u soooooo much u hav no idea how much u hav helpd mi. i culd nev erdo this gramar stuff on mi own. If u reeders hav ani sugesstishuns plz let mi no!
Luv, jessie
(i 4got to ask chloe 2 proofreed the autor's notez but i dont think its rly importtint.)