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The world is crumbling away around me. No one really knows what it’s like to turn round and nearly step out to nothingness, just a crumbling cliff with an avalanche of pebbles falling like rain into the abyss of the dark. The dark. The dark.
That was a rubbish first sentence wasn’t it? It was too long, too descriptive, trying too hard. That’s my problem usually, I try to hard. It takes me a while to get a phrase just right and I spill it all out like vomit on my new white dress. It has to be a white dress, because it’s a new idea with a new first sentence. It’s pure. Well, it was until I spewed all over it.
Okay, again.
This is going to be good.
Come on.
The world is crumbling away around me. It’s hard to tell if anyone else can feel like I do. The world is crumbling away.
I already said that didn’t I?
Damn.
OK.
Stop me if I go wrong again.
Um….
Ok.
Standing right here, right now, the world is dissolving around my feet. I look down and
That was better I think. But what happens when I look down? I hate the first part of a story.
Ok
I look down and see an abyss.
WHY AN ABYSS? WHAT IS WITH ME AND THE ABYSSES?
I look down and see a vortex.
YES!! A VORTEX. I NEED A VORTEX.
I look down and see a vortex. A swirling mass of crumbling rock and endless darkness.
What is a vortex? Does anyone actually know? It can just be a vortex.
This is how to be a bad writer isn’t it.
I will look it up.
Ooh, I found twattle. Have to use that.
Ok, it’s a whirlpool of fluid forming a cavity in the centre.
Well I can’t have that. There can’t be any fluid.
Maybe a black hole.
That’s vulgar isn’t it?
I just found vulgar too.
Its not vulgar.
Its just obvious.
I could say a swirling mass of objects, but I seem to be saying swirling a lot. Its all very swirly.
This is what it is like to be a bad writer.
I give up.
Standing right here, right now, the world is dissolving around my feet. I DON’T look down.
Yes! I don’t, good, then there doesn’t have to be anything. Good good good good good.
I don’t look down, I am too scared that I will stare into the vortex
Abyss
Vortex
Abyss
I give up.
I don’t look down, I am too scared I will fall into the void like the ground around me.
A void. Perfect. Gorund around ground around ground around. It sounds silly.
I don’t look down, I am too scared I will fall into the void like parts
NO PARTS.
I am too scared I will fall into the void. I can feel my feet slipping off the edge. This is the end of the universe.
TOO CLICHÉ WHAT WAS I THINKING THIS IS NOT A STORY.
I should give up.
I should?
I should
I should
I will
Maybe I’ll be a gardener.
This is the end of me.
THE END OF ME.
Perfect.
Get ready world, here comes the end of me.