Author: Hilmary-Oceans PM
Each poem is written by more than one person, line by line. They never turn out the way we exactly thought they would. But they turn out to be a whole lot more interesting either way. Please read and review!Rated: Fiction M - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 2 - Words: 641 - Reviews: 1 - Favs: 1 - Updated: 07-17-07 - Published: 07-13-07 - id: 2389783
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Four girls chose to write how they felt in a single poem during one mathematics class. Each line is from a different heart, telling a different story of love. Each girl has their own interpretation on the subject – and their own heartfelt spasms of pain towards it. The one in italics is from a girl who loves a guy who won't reciprocate. The one underlined is from a girl who wishes to find a love as great as her past love. The one in bold is from a girl who is denying a guy since her cousin loves him instead. The one in normal font is from a girl who recently broke off from a guy she was dating.
Baby, you felt so right
Those beautiful moments, those painful nights
They pierce me inside; thoughts of you
And in the end, you still don't have a clue
Are you going to walk away?
Even though I know the truth, I just cannot say
Why do you do this to me? Why won't you stay?
Nothing you can do anymore – can make me okay.
Cause I have no more strength left
Oh, of my soul I've been bereft
Can't sleep, can't breathe, you're killing me inside
So in the chambers of my heart, my emotions hide
What goes on inside is a mystery no doubt
I'm so confused; I wish your feelings you'd just shout
Instead of putting on this façade; that everything's alright
The spark in your eyes, its shines so bright
Underneath this smile, a web I weave
It started the day I saw you leave
You left me shattered in this secretive rain
And all my tears trickling down the drain …
I can't do this it's too damn painful))
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