i wrote this extended metaphor for high school. its not too bad. could be better but thats life.

Diamonds in the Sky

My dreams are like the stars
Burning brightly in the sky
Big balls of hope
Sparkling far away
They’re hard to reach
Yet easy to embrace
Sometimes I can’t see them
But I know the stars still shimmer
Many burn in the sky
But I feel mine is brightest
Through I may last for years
My dreams last forever
Twinkle, twinkle, my sweet dreams
Like diamonds in moonbeams
Behold the glorious glitter
One for every dream
The stars will fill a heart with hope
And cover it with dreams
Twinkle, twinkle in my heart
Like a dazzling work of art
When I look at the stars
I see dragons, castles, and swords
Sweets, bread, cake, and books
I long to reach out
And touch what I see
But dreams are hard to achieve
My dreams are diamonds in the sky

wow as i look back, there are some lines i'm not too sure i like. well, tell me what you guys think.