This is a poem I wrote and it's about my older brother, whom I've always wished I was closer with. For once in my life, I actually made every line rhymed. Please review! I'm very proud of this poem because I included a lot of symbolism. Constructive criticism is appreciated!

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I Actually Wrote An Emotional, Symbolic, Rhymed Poem

Of all the things we burned

And all the lessons learned

I still can't comprehend

Why you won't repent

Days wasted in youthful ignorance

Barricading ourselves in blissful fences

Through pizza, games, and gore

I know I'm just a bore

You treat me with apathy

Whereas I give you sympathy

I know it must be tough

Because of what you are, life must be rough

You take your rage out on me

A way to let it be free

I get pissed and call you horrible names

Always giving you the blame

I wish we were closer

But it will not be said the mighty Sir

You never show affection

To you I'm an infection

I don't mind too much

So go out with her to lunch

But can you, for just once

Before I go away for months

Do you care about me at all?

Because between us there's a wall

A barrier you put up long ago

So you could go with the flow

You know the loneliness I felt

The pain inside I held

She says you love me

But I can't believe what I can't see

So before you become a man

And go out to the world to meet never-ending fans

Please, tell me one thing

Why inflict pain on me, knowing it will sting?

Before you leave in the Fall

Do you care about me at all?