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Author: Hanyouyomi
Fiction Rated: M - English - Angst/Sci-Fi - Published: 08-13-09 - Updated: 08-13-09 - id:2708765

Indestructible

Page 1,(Full Page):

A humanoid creature with black metallic skin is shown sitting on a cliff side that oversees a barren wasteland. The humanoid has two horns on the sides of his head that are pointed in the direction behind him. The creature also has red eyes, and he has small spikes along his chin, and jaw. And he's shown with his arms folded, and staring into space, as the narration bubble reads: "I am Nate Bryant, also known as The Aggressor due to the aggression I express in battle. I became a fighter for hire because of my super-human strength, and manner of changing into the creature you're currently looking at. I was an aggressive, self-centered, arrogant jerk, who figured himself invincible because of how his skin hardens through aggravation, until I ran into a warrior who proved I could be beaten."

Page 2, Panel 1(Quarter Panel):

The Aggressor's eye is shown as the narration bubble reads: "Because of him, I became afraid of defeat, but wound up being taught a valuable lesson, and became a hero upon facing that ultimate defeat."

Page 2, Panel 2:

The scenario flashes back to a bed room with an African American boy that 5'7 lying on his bed,(This being Nate in his human form) as the narration reads: "You see I was a punk kid. A really an arrogant brat, who pretty much was a loner because I hated the prejudice, and pointless hatred that seemed to have swallowed humanity whole. I often expressed this through arrogance since I figured that I was the only mortal on earth who didn't hold anything against another person, unless I knew, or was acquainted them. Everyone around me appeared to not like a person, or group of people based on what their eyes could tell them, but not me because I learned that your friend's enemy has the potential of also being your greatest ally.

Page 2, Panel 3(Final panel):

The image is shown with Nate Bryant typing something on a 2004 Macintosh computer, as the narration reads: Due to my sense of isolation, I would often seek to spend alot of time to myself, as I wrote stories, or drew comics on my computer or by hand. It even felt at times like I had isolated myself from the family that I said that I loved. But I very seldom expressed affection or happiness.

Page 3, Panel 1:

The scenario is taken back to the present, as The Aggressor is standing on the cliff edge, and still staring into space, as the narration reads: The only things I ever really expressed were anger, aggression, and selfishness. I pretty much thought that I saw a prideful, arrogant person. Boy that held up real well...

Page 3, Panel 2:

The scenario then switches back to a flashback scene, where Nate's face is shown with an expression of shock and anxiety, as the narration reads: My sacred lie of how bad of a person I was didn't only fall to pieces in my resolve to show my family how much I cared...

Page 3, Panel 3:

The flash back scenario is shown with a car wreck of six cars crashed into each other, as semi truck speeds towards a beige 2007 pontiac, as a boy that looks mildly similar to Nate, and is two inches taller than Nate,(This being leaps through the roof with him, as the intercept the huge semi truck, as the narration reads: It also showed in how much I was willing to protect them as well.

Page 3, Panel 4:

The scenario is shown Nate's body tearing through his white t-shirt, and black sweat pants, as his muscles increase in size, and his skin turns jet black, and starts to look metallic, as the narration Caption reads: It was in that exact moment that I discovered my powers, and transformation.

Page 5, Splash Page:

The scenario shows the a Aggressor, and a brown skin hulking creature with long white hair standing next to as with a jab of his right fist, and the Aggressor's left they halt the semi truck, while crushing the front of the truck.

Page 7, Panel 1:

Nate and his brother are shown looking at their hands, as the narration caption reads: It was a bit confusing because of the mixed feelings I had about what I had become, and I'm sure my brother Dave felt the same way when he took note of his "Demonic Appearance." Because of how we wanted to protect our parents, we transformed into creatures with tremendous strength, and power.

Page 7, panels 2 and 3(Quarter Panels):

The images of Dave in his transformed state grappling a caucasian fighter in and arm bar, and The Aggressor taking on three men with pistols, and wearing Ski masks, as he jabs one in the face, as the narration caption in panel 2 reads: "So while my brother set out to achieve his dream of being one of the world's greatest MMA(Mixed Martial Arts) Fighters in the world..." And The Narration Caption reads: "I set out and became a "Super Hero."

Page 7, Panel 4:

The Aggressor is shown jabbing one of the robbers in the jaw, as drops of blood, and two teeth are shown flying a few inches from the robber's face as The Narration Caption reads: Except for me, I applied the methods of "Brutal Justice, as I crippled criminals for life because of my hatred towards despiteful, ignorant, and bias humans.

Page 8, Panel 1:

The Aggressor is then shown charging towards the second robber with an enraged expression on his face, as the robber is shown pointing a pistol at the Aggressor, and firing at him as five bullets are shown ricochet off of his chest, as the Narration Caption reads: I then came to notice that in this monstrous form of mine, I became impervious to bullets the angrier I became.

Page 8, Panel 2:

The Aggressor is then shown with his left hand raised, as the robber is shown a few inches above him with blood flowing from his mouth, as the narration caption reads: I even noticed an increase in strength through aggravation as well.

Page 8, Panel 3,(Last panel):

The Aggressor is shown standing in the center of the scene, as the three robbers lay on the ground around him bleeding, and unconscious, as the Narration Caption reads: But despite all of my anger, all of my hate, and aggression I kept my morals from my childhood, and never took a life, because of how I thought life of all life was precious even when it came to war. Which is the reason why I got a call from the president.

Page 9 (Splash page):

The Aggressor is shown in dessert area throwing forth his left fist, as he's in the midst of a horde of U.S. army soldiers dressed in camouflage military suits, as they wield rifles, and machine gun, and are going up against iraqi soldiers, while The Narration Caption Reads: The President sent me to Iraq to aid his troops fight a war that I thought was a waste of time after Sadam Hussein was executed. But what do I know? With every American and their ancestors being for this war, it's practically the best course of action, and being a "Hero" I was called to aid our brother in arms.

Page 11, Panel 1:

The Aggressor is shown with arms spread out as he's hold one iraqi soldier in each hand, while the Narration Caption reads: And speaking of brothers, I received word that Damon The Demon, my own flesh and blood will be joining me soon.

Page 11, Panel 2:

The Aggressor is show slamming the iraqi soldier in his left into the ground, as the Narration Caption reads: Which is good, because it'd be nice to have someone familiar, and whom I care about in my presence amidst all of these puppets. Not that I don't care for them...

Page 11, Panel 3:

The Aggressor is shown throwing forth his right hand while his left hand is reared back, as he's surrounded again by American and Iraqi soldier locked in close range combat, while the Narration Caption: Not that I don't care for the "Brave Men and Women" of the U.S. Army. I actually feel sorry, and angry for them.

Page 11, Panel 4(Final Panel):

The scene shows three African American Men, four caucasian men, and three hispanic men, as they are tussling, and shooting iraqi soldiers, as they are retaliating in the same manner, and three iraqi, and U.S. Soldiers are shown to be shot while the Narration Caption reds: For these individuals are fathers, sons, daughters, husbands, wives, and distant relative who in my opinion were stolen from families who valued them more than gold or any fine metal.

Page 12, Panel 1:

The Aggressor, two white soldiers, and a black soldier are looking up at the sky, as the first white soldier points, and exclaims: "Incoming!" And The Narration Caption Reads: So I figured that while I was out here, I'd do my best to protect these men and women my country holds dear...

Page 12, Panel 2(Quarter Panel):

The Aggressor's right hand is shown holding a grenade, as speed lines indicate that he caught it, as the Narration Caption Reads: Even from grenades.

Page 12, Panel 3(Second Quarter Panel):

The Aggressor is shown crushing the grenade, as he's shown to be consumed by a bright flash of light, as The Narration Caption Reads: "Yeah you could say I was throwing away my life for nothing..."

Page 12, Panel 4:

A cloud of smoke is shown, as the soldiers behind the Aggressor are seen in a "duck-and-cover" position, while The Narration Caption Reads: "But At That Point In Time I didn't Really Care..."

Page 12, Panel 5:

The Smoke is shown subsiding, as The Aggressor is shown standing with an enraged look on his face, and his skin is "Jet-Black," While The Narration Caption Reads: "Because I'm INDESTRUCTIBLE!"

Page 13, Panel 1:

A slanted angle of The Aggressor is shown, as he charges towards two Car-Bombs, and six Iraqi Soldiers, as the Narration Caption Reads: "And With My Rage, As My Main Drive, I Was Invincible!"

Page 13, Panel 2:

The Aggressor is shown swinging his left arm, as the car-bombs explode, and the Iraqi soldiers, are scattered, as the Narration Caption Read: And as a side note, After I got this power, The Incredible Hulk Became My Hero. Because he was virtually invulnerable, and the madder he became..."

Page 13, Panel 3:

The Aggressor is shown slamming his left fist into the ground, as Two Car-Bombs, Two Tanks Explode, and six men are knocked into the air by the concussive force, as The Narration Caption Reads: "THE STRONGER HE BECAME!"

Page 14, Panel 1(Quarter Panel):

The Aggressor's face is shown wearing and exhausted expression, as The Narration Caption Read: But there was one thing still bothering me...

Page 14, Panel 2(Second Quarter Panel):

The back of The Aggressor is shown, as he looks at the debris of car-bombs, and tanks piled up with burned corpses of Iraqi Soldiers, as The Narration Caption Reads: "I looked out onto The Destruction that I had caused, and thought about how all I was doing was protecting a frail way of life that could be made stronger through peace, and not war. I saw that I was being used as A Weapon Of Mass Destruction For Personal Gain."

Page 14, Panel 3(Third Quarter Panel):

The Aggressor's face is shown with an enraged expression on it, as The Narration Caption Reads: And That Made Me Very Angry...

Page 14, Panel 4(Fourth Quarter Panel):

The Aggressor is shown smashing a military hummer, as The Narration Caption Reads: And it was that anger that reminded me of my own hatred for America, which caused me to turn on my "so-called comrades." And The Aggressor exclaims: "YOU MINDLESS DOLLS!"

Page 14, Panel 5:

The Aggressor is shown tossing the smashed hummer, as a gathering of soldiers, as they are scattered, ad The Aggressor roars: "Can't You See That You're Being Used As Pawns For An Unworthy Cause!"

Page 15, Panel 1:

The Aggressor is shown swinging his fists, as seven bodies of Soldiers are scattered about, and The Aggressor exclaims: "That You Mean Less Than Dog $%## To The Powers, And Ideals You've Sworn To Protect?!"

Page 15, Panel 2:

The Aggressor is shown with his head turned to his right, as three caucasian soldiers are shooting at his back with Machine-guns, and he mutters: "But If You're Willing To Die For Nothing..."

Page 15, Panel 3:

The Aggressor is shown slamming his right hand against one of the three soldiers, as the other two are flung into the air, and The Aggressor Exclaims: "I'LL BE GLAD TO KILL YOU MYSELF!"

Page 16, Panel 1:

The Scene Shows The Aggressor With An Expression Of Shock, As He's Being Struck In The Forehead by a Soldier Dressed In A Camleflouge Military Uniform, as The Soldier exclaims: "Monster, you will do no Such Thing!"

And The Aggressor's Narration Caption Reads: "And This Is Where My Trouble Begin... With This Guy."

Page 16, Panel 2:

The Aggressor Is Shown To Have Staggered Back, As He Has His Hands Placed On His Forehead, as The Aggressor Mutters: "OW, What The Hell? That Actually Hurt!" And The Aggressor's Narration Caption Reads: "Now I Know What You Might Be Thinking; "How Can A Normal Human Hurt The Aggressor? He's Indestructible! But I Know For A Fact That Many Of You Think, I'm Just A Pussy $$ Nigga Who's Nuttin' But Talk." But This Person Isn't Human."

Page 16, Panel 3:

The Solider Is Standing With his legs spread out, his left hand put forth in front of him, and his right hand reared back, as he proclaims: "I know all of your weak spots beast!"

Page 16, Panel 4:

The front of the Aggressor is shown, as he has his hands and head lowered, while he mutters: "Oh Really...?"

Page 17, Page 1:

The Aggressor his shown charging towards the soldier as he has his left his reared back, and exclaims" Then I Hope You Don't Mind Proving It!"

Page 17, Panel 2:

The Aggressor his shown to throw a left hook, as the solider leaps over him, as the Aggressor's Narration Caption Reads: "This may seem mildly absurd, but from what I understand only a skilled martial artist, or gymnast can dodge me the same way this guy can."

Page 17, Panel 3:

The Aggressor is shown to be kicked in his lower back, by the soldier's right leg, as The Aggressor's Narration Caption Reads: "And he seems to be nailing me in soft spots I never knew that I had."

Page 18, Panel 1:

The Aggressor's face is shown with an aggravated expression, as his Narration Caption Reads: "But that's about to change."

Page 18, Panel 2:

The Aggressor is shown throwing a left jab, as the soldier is shown jumping back to evade it, as The Aggressor's Narration Caption Reads: "And that's how it was, I was so blinded by rage that I couldn't focus."

Page 18, Panel 3:

Aggressor is shown throwing a a right upper-cut as the Soldier dodges it by moving back, as The Aggressor's Narration Caption Reads: "So no matter how impervious my body became to any sort of attack. My true weakness was my lack of focus when aggravated.

Panel 18, Panel 4:

The Aggressor is shown to be flipped over the soldier's shoulder, as the the soldier takes hold of his right arm, and The Aggressor's Narration Caption Reads: "and that's something this individual obviously knew already..."

Page 18, Panel 5:

The Soldier is shown with his left foot on the Aggressor's chest, as The Aggressor lays on his back, and his Narration Caption Reads: "For that is how he defeated me."

Page 19, Panel 1:

The Soldier is shown to still have his left foot on the Aggressor's chest, as The Aggressor ask" Who Or What Are You?"

And The Soldier replies, as a bright aura surrounds his body: "I am a guardian angel."

Page 19, Panel 2:

The Aggressor is shown sitting up, and rubbing his head, as a caucasian figure with long brown hair that comes down to his shoulders, brown eyes, is wearing white knightly armor, and has bird-like wing protruding from his back stands next to him.

The Aggressor: "A Guardian Angel huh? Don't tell me that you disguised yourself as a soldier to prevent me from taking their lives."

The Guardian Angel: "Why shouldn't I?"

Page 19, Panel 3:

The Aggressor is shown with his attention focused on the angel, as he kneels on one knee, and has his left fist slammed against the ground.

The Aggressor: "Because these fools aren't worth protecting. I look at this! Look around you! Chaos born out of protecting a frail ideal that is currently undergoing a drastic change. And you deem it fitting that they should live?"

The Guardian Angel: "And what gives you a mortal the right to pass judgement, and slay them for protecting their ideal?

Page 19, Panel 4:

The Aggressor is shown standing two inches in front of The Guardian angel as he snaps: "The simple fact that these people are blind to the truth of that which they fight for!"

To which The Guardian Angel replies: "Then you have become what they are!"

page 20, Panel 1:

The Aggressor is shown still standing before the angel, as he ask: "What are you talking about?"

To which The Guardian Angel replies: "Was your reason for detesting this war the mere fact that you saw them passing judgement on an enemy they had no understanding of?

And The Aggressor Replies: "Yes."

Page 20, Panel 2:

The The Guardian Angel is shown folding his arms, as he stands before the Aggressor, who has a bewildered, but mildly irritated look on his face, as The Guardian Angel states: "Then in you passing your judgement, and slaying your comrades, you've emulated the traits of that which you hate."

To Which The Aggressor replies: "No f--king way..."

Page 20, Panel 3:

The Aggressor is shown to have his back turned to the Guardian Angel, as he sighs:"You're right though, I have become that which I despise."

To Which The Guardian Angel replies: "And it is because of this that you will one day suffer as these men have."

Page 20, Panel 4:

The Aggressor is shown looking over his shoulder, as the Guardian Angel ascends.

The Aggressor: "What?"

The Guardian Angel: "One day you face an opponent strong enough to defeat you, and he will make you pay for the lives you stole."

Page 21, Panel 1:

The Aggressor is shown looking as a gleam of light in the sky, as His Narration Caption Reads: "and that's how my journey of fear, and redemption began. With the ominous words of an angel."

Page 21, Panel 2:

The Aggressor is shown to have reverted back to being Nate, as he's packing his bags, and Dave appears behind him in a t-shirt, and jeans.

Nate: "Wassup Brother?"

Dave: "I heard whatcha did."

Nate: "You mean, when I slaughtered those innocent yet misguided muslims?"

Page 21, Panel 3:

Nate has his attention turned to Dave, as he has the bag strapped to his back.

Nate: "Or when I turned against my comrades, and slew them?"

Dave: "Both. Though it doesn't surprise me, because you would at times talk about how much you hated humanity. I kind of figured you'd feel god about it."

Page 21, Panel 4:

Nate is shown walking past Dave with his bag of belongings strapped to his back.

Nate: "Well I'm sorry to disappoint you, but I'm not the slightest bit pleased by my actions. I've become no better than those idiots who deemed this farce of a war necessary."

Dave: "So where are you going?"

Nate: "I'm going to get stronger. I battled with an angel who told me I'd be beaten by someone who will seek revenge for my actions so I might as well be prepared when the time comes."

Page 22, Panel 1:

Nate is shown shown standing before ten soldiers, as they have their rifles held at the ready.

Nate: "What's all of This This?"

Middle Soldier: "You're charged with murdering your comrades, and you're coming with us. If you resist capture we'll open fire."

Page 22, Panel 2:

Nate is shown with his upper torso enlarged, as it tears through his shirt, and his skin gains a metallic complexion.

Nate: "Oh really?"

Page 22, Panel 3:

The Aggressor stands before the soldiers, as they have their rifles aimed at him.

Nate: "Oh Come Now, You Know Full Well That Bullets Don't Effect, So Don't Waste Ammunition. And Step Aside, I'm Blowing This Joint!"

Page 23, Panel 1:

The Aggressor is shown walking past the soldiers holding his bag, as five stand on both sides of him.

Nate: "Thank You."

Page 23, Panel 2:

Dave is shown following The Aggressor, as they reach the exit of The Military Camp.

Dave: "Nate, I'll come with you!"

Nate: "You have a career in Cage Fighting to pursue. I don't want you missing out at the opportunity of being World Champion just so you can help me solve

my problem."

Page 23 Panel 3:

Dave's upper torso is shown, as he has his arms folded, and a smirking frown on his face.

Dave: "Somethings never change. Even now you won't allow anyone to help you."

Page 23, Panel 4:

The Aggressor shown looking back with a smirk on his face, as he replies: "In case you forgot I prefer it that way. Let's me know what I can handle. Beside you don't know how careful I am."

Page 24, Full Page:

The Aggressor is shown walking off into the sun-lit horizon, as he mutters: "I'll be just fine."


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