
Fireflies surround us, in our thoughts, pervading our minds... deep in the farmers' fields. As someone who's new to poetry... I would love some feedback for these humble creations that come to me at 11 PM... REVAMPED! XD
Rated: Fiction K - English - Romance/Poetry - Words: 219 - Reviews: 7 - Published: 10-24-09 - Status: Complete - id: 2734233
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Fireflies surround us,
in our thoughts, pervading our minds,
nestling in between the lines.
~ Points of light here and there,
embracing cool autumn air.
~ You stood and held me
beneath the stars,
The night that's never
Terribly far
From the forefront of my mind.
Deep in the farmers' fields,
The long grass swayed
With the sound of your voice,
Singing, so sweetly,
the fireflies stopped to hear;
I had no fear;
No fear of that warm, gentle, unearthly tone,
So beautiful it could've only been in
A gilded tome
recalling tales of archangels true
I felt as though I were born anew.
~The thoughts bewildering in their prose
flitted through mind, soul, and those
who denied it it's right to come out, be free,
were lynched, truly, so you see.
~I felt as though you were drowning me.
Fireflies.
[This was updated/edited/revamped with the help of lovely Aneko24 (who is amazing, check out her story The Watcher's Princess (Which, because I want you to read it so much, you can read by clicking the link... because I'm cool like that. XD Also. Isn't it weird how I DON'T know her gender but kinda guessed because of how she writes? Woah. Dude. XD)
Behold! .com/s/2733087/1/The_Watchers_Princess
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