|What it Means
Author: O.G PM
Jean-Claude DuPonte is a perfect gentleman. He's wealthy, chivalrous, and well-mannered. But, there is much more to this young man than meets the eye. Discover what it means to be Jean-Claude DuPonte in a world of prejudice and bigotry.Rated: Fiction T - English - Romance/Hurt/Comfort - Chapters: 32 - Words: 86,788 - Reviews: 22 - Favs: 6 - Follows: 1 - Updated: 05-01-10 - Published: 11-08-09 - Status: Complete - id: 2739164
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Author's Note: So… Yeah… I haven't posted anything in a long time. But, I intend to start posting a revised/edited version of this soon. It's been a combination of real life and, to be perfectly honest, laziness. I have revisions done for the first few chapters, but I haven't gotten around to typing them up yet. I'm going to start working on that now… But, as I was looking through it again, I realized just how many plot holes and loose ends I've got to work on.
And that's where you, my lovely readers, come in. I have ideas on how I can alter the story for a second draft, and I'd like a bit of feed-back from you guys. And I know you're out there!
Anyway! Here are a few ideas I've been toying with to fill some of the holes and make the story a bit better. Comments on these ideas (and the revised version I promise I'll be working on posting) would be very much appreciated.
Number One: The full moon
Yeah, as of right now the full moon doesn't do much to Jean-Claude at all. And I'm not sure how much I like that idea anymore. So I wrote a short bit about what a forced transformation would be like for him, and here's the conclusion I came to:
Werewolves are forced to transform on the full moon. But, they don't lose their mind and become murdering, savage monsters. Instead, the wolf takes over their body, and their human persona is forced to become an observer, who can watch and reflect on the actions of the wolf, but not influence them. And then the wolf acts on the werewolf's deepest desires and emotions. Basically, the wolf expresses and acts on all the needs and emotions a werewolf might choose to ignore as a human, without reservation.
Personally, I was thinking more vampires. I know I wrote about how much influence they have over werewolves and such, but I don't think I showed it enough. Frankly, I was thinking, and decided I really didn't like making Jean-Claude end up working because of an investment gone bad. Instead, I was thinking of vampires and the government prompting his need to work. And using the vampires to make the proposal at the end a little bit more plausible and less rushed. Really, that part happened the way it did because I just wanted to come up with an ending and I couldn't think of another way to do it.
And obviously there were a few inconsistencies regarding how much humans know about vampires and werewolves, and such in the first draft. So there are a few things that are going to be reworked in order to fix that,
Anyway, I just posted this to let you guys know where things stand, and hopefully to get some of you guys to check out the second draft.
Thanks for reading, and thanks for giving me motivation to continue working on this instead of letting it collect dust in my hard drive.