Author: Snakefang PM
When someone who has lasting regrets dies, they become a Ghost. Ghost feed off the living in order to survive. And as long as there have been Ghosts, there have been the people dedicated to fight them. These people are called...Grims...Action-AdventureRated: Fiction T - English - Adventure/Romance - Chapters: 9 - Words: 34,699 - Reviews: 18 - Favs: 3 - Follows: 1 - Updated: 03-28-10 - Published: 11-28-09 - id: 2746102
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The corner of the building exploded, causing pieces of concrete and glass to fly everywhere. The boom rang throughout the otherwise quite night. A man flew out of the hole in the building, slamming into the one across the street.
"GYAaaaaghll…!" The man cried, a foam-like substance coming from his mouth. The man's skin was pasty white and his eyes were dull and unfocused. The man slid down the side of the building until he fell onto the ground.
"Gaaaaahh…." The man gurgled as he lifted his head. Suddenly he caught sight of a shape falling toward him. It was a boy, around seventeen, with spiky black hair and red eyes.
"You're through, you damn Ghost," Kade growled. He brought his arms up and swung his sword as he fell. The man barely had time to scream before the large black blade sliced through him.
There was no blood. Cut was clean and simple, slicing the ghost in half. The body suddenly burst into flames. An eerie green light suddenly shot from the flames, merging together until a good sized ball of light was hovering above the ashes.
"Angie! Now!" Kade shouted.
"Right!" A girl his age, a little shorter than him, and with long blond hair answered. She raised her arm, the charm bracelet on her wrist jingling.
"Evanidus!" She chanted. The green stones on her bracelet began glowing. Suddenly the green ball was sucked toward Angie. A loud screeching could be heard coming from the globe. Without warning, it suddenly shot towards Angie, growing smaller with each passing inch, until it crashed into the jewels on her bracelet, disappearing as it was absorbed into the rock.
As Angie lowered her hand the glow from the jewels faded. Kade sighed and rested his sword on his shoulder. And the night became quite once again…
It is a common legend…
If a Soul dies…and it has lasting regrets or ties to the living world…
It will be unable to pass on…
They become tortured souls, visible only to those who have witnessed death firsthand. Their pain and suffering drives them to point of breaking. They become twisted, corrupt.
We call these creatures…Ghosts…
In order for a Ghost to survive, it must feed off those of the living. They devour humans to sustain themselves.
So naturally…Mankind would not simply stand by and watch itself be eaten.
As long as there have been Ghosts…there has been an organization dedicated to destroying them.
A secret group, known only to themselves, work in the shadows of civilization.
Humans who have gained the power to fight with the twisted souls the Ghosts have become.
They are called,
The sun was sinning brightly in the morning sky. The ripples of the ocean reflected the light as the waves rolled gently onto the shore. The beach was filled with random people. Most just lying on the sand, enjoying the sun, while others played in the water. On the road next to the breach, a young man with black spiky hair walked, a backpack slung over his shoulder.
My name's Kade Sky. I'm a seventeen year old high school student. I was born and raised here in Mariblue city, California. I live alone in an apartment a few blocks from school.
Kade looked over at the people playing at the beach as he walked. He smiled slightly before looking back ahead.
The reason why I live alone is because…Well…because my family's… dead. They were murdered when I was just a kid…Ghosts killed them…
Kade shifted his backpack to his other shoulder, rubbing the other one slightly. Cars whizzed by the sidewalk. The streets were busy this morning.
Ghosts are evil souls that stay on earth after they die instead of passing on. When my family was killed, Anderzot kinda took care of me.
Anderzot's a group of people that fight the Ghosts. They've been around for as long as Ghosts have.
A large white building came into view. Glancing at his watch Kade broke into a run.
There are some humans have enough power to fight the Ghosts. They're called Grims . When my family was killed, I wanted to fight Ghosts too. So I became a Grim…eh, sorta…
Anyway… that's not where my life got interesting, when I joined Anderzot. No…My life was turned upside down just a few weeks ago. It started out just like any other morning…eh, sorta…
A loud ringing came from the building.
"Ah crap!" Kade exclaimed as he ran harder. He ran past the gates and toward the doors. Jumping up the steps he reached the entrance, just as the doors were pulled shut.
"Ah come on!" He shouted, banging his fists on the door, "Let me in!"
"Mr. Sky," A voice from the other side of the door greeted, "How nice of you to finally to show up," Kade glared at the face behind the door's window. It was of a middle aged man with neatly combed brown hair. Square glassed lined his face, which looked a little irritated.
"Sanders! Let me in!" Kade shouted.
"Gah! How many times do I have to tell you! I'm you're teacher, you are to call me Mr. Sanders! Show some respect!" Sanders shouted back.
"Blaaaaa," Kade stuck his tongue out from behind the door. Sanders shook from rage.
"You. Little. Brat…" He hissed, clenching his fist.
"What're you gonna do?" Kade smirked, "Can't do much with a door between us," Sanders gritted his teeth.
"Oh yeah!? I'll show you, you-!" He opened the door to get at Kade but as soon as he did the young man ducked through the opening and ran down the halls at full speed, leaving Sanders behind.
"Ha ha! Thanks for opening the door for me Sanders! You're a real nice guy!" Sanders stared open mouthed.
"W-what the…You delinquent! How dare you trick me! Come back here at once! Hey! You'll pay for this!" By the time he finished the sentence Kade was long gone, leaving Sanders to shake his fist at an empty hallway.
Kade lazily drummed his fingers on his desk as he leaned back in his chair. The teacher was giving a lecture about early American history, something Kade wasn't that interested in. His red eyes drifted over to the window. The ocean could clearly be seen from the second story. The beach, despite it being a school day, was still fairly crowded. He lazily watched the small forms of the people move around on the water's edge.
It's been pretty quite lately…
Suddenly he felt something vibrating in his pocket. His eyes narrowed slightly.
Already knowing who it was he took his phone out of his pocket and checked the message, something fairly easy to do in a high school.
Come to Anderzot HQ after your classes. Got something for you.
Sighing, he pocketed his phone.
Great… as if I don't get enough work already.
In the front of the class the teacher was pointing to something written on the board.
Still…I wonder what it is they 'got' for me.
The rest of the school day passed by quickly enough. Kade didn't really love school, but it wasn't bad either. It was a nice to have something normal in his life. As the final bell rang Kade gathered up his stuff and walked out of the gates of the school.
Kade found himself standing in front of what looked like an old warehouse. Its faded green paint was peeling and parts of its rusty roof were falling off. Walking past a bunch of large crates stacked around the building Kade reached a small side door. Next to it was something that looked totally out of place. It was a shiny metal box that was attached to the wall next to the door. A small red orb was stuck in the center.
Reaching into his pocket Kade took out a deep blue card with markings on it. He casually waved it in front of the red orb. It flashed green and a small click was heard. Placing the card back in his pocket and keeping his hand there, he opened the door.
The inside looked nothing like the outside. The walls were a nice blue color and the floor was carpeted. Tables were placed all around. There were at least a few dozen people sitting around them, most in their twenties. There was a large counter in the back, with various foods placed on it. The room was filled with the sound of talking and laughing.
Kade just stood there for a minute, watching as people bustled around the 'mess hall' as the people liked to call it.
"Hi Kade," A voice behind him said. Kade turned around.
"Oh, Jess," He smiled broadly, "How's it going?" He greeted. The girl, Jess, smiled in return.
"I'm good," She said as she brushed her short brown hair behind her head, "Are you looking for something,"
"Have you seen Frasier? He said he had something for me,"
"I think he's in his lab," She answered. Kade smiled.
"Okay thanks!" He called back to her as he jogged down a hall. Jess smiled and waved as he left. After a few minute of walking down different halls Kade stopped in front of a door. Not hesitating he threw it open.
"I'm here!" He exclaimed.
"God damn it Kade!" A man, no older than twenty five, shouted as he fell off his chair, surprised, "Don't you ever knock!?"
"No…" Kade said innocently, stepping into the room. Computers where everywhere, along with various other types of machinery. The floor was littered with wires, along with the man. The man sighed and got to his feet, brushing off his lab coat and running a hand through his red hair.
"You're gonna give me a heart attack one of these days. When I get old enough for stuff like that," He added.
"So…why'd you want to see me Frasier?" Kade asked.
"Always straight to the point with you, isn't it," Frasier sighed, "You got my message right?"
"Don't be a pain in the ass," Frasier hissed, "Anyway, I said I have something for you,"
"What did I just say about being a pain in the ass!?" Frasier exclaimed while Kade laughed. The man took a deep breath and let it out slowly.
"Why don't I just show you," He said, "Angie could you come in here please?" He said the last part more loudly. Kade cocked his head in confusion. A second later a second door in the lab opened up. A girl around Kade's age, though a little shorter than him, stepped into the room. Her blue eyes were slightly obstructed by her long blond hair. Frasier nodded at her.
"This is Angeline Amor," He said, "She's a transferee over from Europe. Angie, this is Kade Sky,"
"Hey" Kade smiled kindly, "How's it going?"
"It's nice to meet you," Angie said formally. Kade nodded, then looked over at Frasier.
"Wait I don't get it, you got me a girl?" Angie's eyes widened slightly in surprise and Frasier chocked on the drink he had decided to take.
"Kah! Kah! Kah! No! You idiot!" He coughed, "She's a Binder! She'll be your partner,"
You see…To get rid of a Ghost you need two people. The one who fight the Ghost and kills it is the Grim. However, you need a special person, called a Binder, to capture the soul of the Ghost.
When I said I was 'Kinda a Grim" Well…I didn't have a Binder…So I wasn't technically considered one…Feh…
Kade lowered his head slightly and his eye became dark. A moment passed before he suddenly turned around and walked toward the door. Frasier raised his hand.
"Ah, Kade wait!"
"No," Kade said darkly. Frasier gritted his teeth while Angie looked thoroughly confused.
"Kade, you won't be considered a full time Grim unless you have a Binder as a partner,"
"Whatever," Kade said, not turning around.
"You know I don't take partners," Kade said, "I can do the work on my own,"
"Damn it, when are you going to let this go? You know just as well as I do that killing a Ghost isn't enough, if you don't capture its soul it will just regenerate."
"Wait a second Mr. Frasier," Angie suddenly spoke up, "If he doesn't want to partner with me then that's fine,"
"B-but Angie-" Frasier started.
"Besides," She cut him off, she stared at Kade, who rose and eye brow, "…he looks weak anyway."
"Eh!?" Kade's eyes widened.
"I do not wish to be partnered with a Grim so young and inexperienced, if I'm to be stationed in this city, I want a partner who looks like they could at least walk around their own city without getting lost," Angie said calmly, crossing her arms.
"W-wha…" Kade said slowly.
"Huuhhhh…I knew it would turn out this way," Frasier sighed. Suddenly the computer near his desk started flashing and a low beeping could be heard.
"Hmm?" Frasier hummed as he sat in his chair and rolled over to his desk. He typed a few keys on the computer and his eyes narrowed slightly.
"Kade," Frasier said, spinning around, "Two Ghosts are appearing in that abandoned construction site a few miles from here. I'm assigning them to you," Kade's eyes darkened and he nodded.
"Fine," He said as he turned toward the door, "I'll show you I don't need a Binder to deal with those bastards," He tossed the door open and ran out in the hall. Frasier took a deep breath as he listened to his fading footsteps. Glancing at his computer screen once more he turned to Angie.
"Come on, we're going to follow him," Angie looked at him.
"Huh? But why I want to-?" Frasier smirked.
"Heh heh," He laughed, cutting her off, "I think you both underestimate each other. Come on, this will be good for you,"
"…" Angie looked unsure, but said nothing.
Kade slowly walked past the picketed fence surrounding the abandoned construction site. Night was falling and it was getting dark. Broken tools and equipment lay everywhere. The ground was covered in holes and piles of dirt. In the center of a lot lay an unfinished building frame, nothing more than steel beams.
Kade walked up to the steel contraption and looked around.
Well…I don't see anything…
He stared up at the frame of the building. A soft wind came and blew his hair a bit. His ears perked when he heard a sound. Like the sound of claws on metal. Suddenly something came flying at him. Kade jumped back just as something crashed into the ground in front of him. He covered his face with his arms as dirt flew everywhere.
"RAAAGH!" An inhuman scream came from the crater in the ground. Kade's eyes narrowed as a creature crawled out of the hole in the ground. It looked like a human man, except for its dull eyes and pale skin. Kade clenched his teeth when he saw the six pincer-like arms sprouting from its back.
Shit…It's already started going through the decomposition stage…
Something landed a dozen feet behind him. Kade turned his head slightly. Another Ghost stood behind him. Like the other one it looked humanoid, except for the reptilian tail coming out of its lower back.
Damn, these guys aren't gonna be as easy as regular Ghosts…
Kade stared forward, a smirk suddenly made its way onto his face.
This should be fun!
Kade punched his fists together, a slightly bloodthirsty look on his face.
"Alright you damn people eaters! You wanna die!? Well come on then!"
"RAAAWWHH!!" They both roared. Kade's smirk grew.
Some scientists have been saying recently that most humans today only use roughly two percent of what their brain is capable of.
If only two percent of our power is used. Just imagine… how much potential we have.
When a human comes in contact with a Ghost. Something happens to them. A part of them that has always lay dormant…Is unlocked.
The first Ghost suddenly rushed forward. Kade, not losing his smirk, dropped into a fighting stance.
And on that day…Eleven years ago…when my family was killed right in front of my eyes…
The Ghost lunged at him. Kade brought back his fist and launched it.
My power was unlocked.
His fist collided with the front of the Ghosts face. It was like the creature was shot from a cannon. It flew backwards, crashing into one of the steel beams. The metal bent under the impact and the Ghost screamed in pain, foam flying from its mouth. Kade smirked.
"Heh...What…is that all you've got?"
Frasier stepped into the abandoned construction site, Angie right behind him. He took a look around and smiled slightly, running a hand through his hair.
"Oh boy…would you look at that," The area was practically in ruins. There were multiple craters in the ground and most of the metal beams were broken or damaged in some way. The burning remains of a Ghost could be seen in the center of the site. Angie's eyes widened.
"W-what…is this?" She asked slowly.
"This…" Frasier said, motioning to the area, "Would be how Kade Sky fights. But I think it would be better if you see first-hand," He pointed to the top of the steel structure in the construction site. Two shapes could be seen standing at the top. One had a long tail and the other was standing calmly with his hands in his pockets.
"Hey," Kade smirked, "I can see my house from here," He said lightly. He adjusted his footing on the steel beam. The Ghost, standing a few feet away, snarled.
It suddenly shot its tail towards him. Kade jumped backwards to avoid it.
His foot slipped on the edge of the beam. He started to fall. Twisting around in the air he grabbed the edge. He sighed as he hung from the beam.
"Agh..That wasn't cool…" His eyes widened when something stood over him. The Ghost stood over him, its mouth drooling slightly.
"Raaaaawlll…"It growled. Kade gritted his teeth.
"Like hell I'm going to let you eat me," Pulling himself up slightly, he grabbed. The Ghost's eyes widened slightly as something grabbed onto its tail.
"See you at the bottom!" Kade smirked as he pulled on the tail. The Ghost was unprepared and slipped off the side.
"RRAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWHHHHHH!!!" it screamed as it fell four stories to the ground. The ground cracked and broke when it hit. It lay unmoving on the ground.
"That was close,"
Frasier smiled as he watched.
"Heh…that was close," He said, unknowingly mirroring Kade's words. Angie watched as Kade started making his way to the ground. Her face was a mixture of shock and confusion.
"He…he defeated two Ghosts in their early decomposition stages…and without even using his Soul Seeker," Frasier rose an eyebrow slightly.
"Hmm…you know about Soul Seekers?" He asked, mildly surprised. Angie looked at him.
"Of course. A Soul Seeker is a physical manifestation of a Grims powers. They are the weapons used to fight the Ghosts,"
"Well, you've done your homework," Frasier smirked. He turned back to watching Kade.
"Well, as to why Kade didn't use his…Well," His smile faded for a second, "He…doesn't really like using it much," Angie's eyes widened a bit but Frasier didn't look away from Kade.
Kade walked toward the mangled body of the Ghost. He stood over it with a dark expression on his face. The Ghost jerked its head slightly to stare at him with its dull eyes. Kade raised his foot, it hovered over the creatures head.
"Just die," He slammed his foot down.
Angie watched with wide eyes.
"I've…never seen anything like that before," She said in a low whisper. Frasier smirked.
"Don't look away just yet... It's not over,"
Kade walked away from the burning body, his head hung low. He saw Frasier and Angie standing over by the entrance. Ignoring them he walked over toward the closest exit.
He was only fifteen feet from it when he heard an explosion behind him. Kade's eyes widened and he spun around.
Green flames were spinning around one of the craters created during the fight. Black ash hung in the air inside the flames. Slowly they began to gather together, forming a humanoid shape in the flames. Kade's eyes widened.
"No way…" Suddenly something shot out of the flames toward him. Kade raised and crossed his arms just as one of the pincer arms from the first Ghost crashed down on top of him. The Ghost roared in his face, foam flying from its mouth. Kade gritted his teeth, his eyes wide. He jumped backwards, kicking the Ghost in the chest as he did so. He landed a dozen feet from the creature. He stared at it in shock.
What the hell! I've never seen a Ghost that can regenerate that quickly!
Suddenly he heard another explosion to the side. Kade turned his head. Green flames where circling the spot where he just killed the second Ghost. The young man clenched his fists.
As the second Ghost rose out of its ashes the first rushed towards Kade. It launched its pincers at him. Kade jumped into the air to avoid the attack, spinning around he landed behind the creature. He jumped forward and kicked the creature in the back. The Ghost went flying forward. But before Kade could lower his foot something slammed into his stomach.
"KYA!" He coughed as he flew backwards. He rolled on the ground before hitting one of the steel beams. After taking a few breaths he lifted himself to his feet. The second Ghost stood next to the first, flicking its tail around.
"…Damn…I'm screwed…." Kade cursed.
"I think this would be a good time for you to go and help him," Frasier told Angie, she turned to him.
"Me? But you-"
"I'm no Grim," Frasier cut her off, "But you, you're a Binder, no matter how many times Kade kills them, they'll just keep regenerating unless you do something about their souls,"
"I believe you can do it. Unless…" He glanced at her, "You think you're too weak…" She narrowed his eyes.
"I am not weak," She said determined. Frasier smirked.
"Good," Was all he said.
"Gaaahh!" Kade cried one of the Ghost's kicked him in the stomach. He flew backwards. Twisting around in the air he landed on his feet, sliding back a few feet on the dirt. The first Ghost gave him no more time. It dashed forward and jumped into the air, sending two of its pincers flying at him. Kade gritted his teeth. His arms were a blur as his hands latched onto the pincers. His arms shook as the Ghost tried to impale him. Kade kept the pincers at bay.
"You're pissing me off!" He shouted as he spun around, still holding onto the Ghost. He slammed the Ghost into the ground. It crashed into the earth, roaring in pain. Kade stood slightly slumped, breathing heavily. Suddenly he heard something behind him. He spun around, just in time to see the second Ghost about to fall on top of him.
"Eradico!" Someone shouted. A light blue ball suddenly crashed into the Ghost, sending it flying to the side, missing Kade. Kade's eyes widened and he turned to see what had happened. Angie stood a few dozen feet away, her right hand glowing slightly.
"You..?!" Kade said. Angie said nothing as she raised her hand, its glow intensifying.
"What are you doing! I said I don't work with partners!" Kade shouted.
"Oh shut up!" Angie finally said, "The only way this is going to end is if I end it."
"I said. SHUT. UP!" She raised her hand at him.
"Eradico!" A blue ball shot from her hand. Flying over Kade's head and slamming into the Ghost that was about to devour him. The Ghost cried out and flew backwards, slamming into the steel structure. It slumped to the ground, apparently unconscious. Kade, eyes wide, turned away from the creature and back to Angie, where his eyes got wider still.
The first Ghost was standing behind her, pincers ready to attack. Angie was apparently unaware. The demon raised its pincers, about to kill.
Reacting in a matter of milliseconds, Kade moved at a speed most humans couldn't even dream of moving at. He dashed toward Angie, reaching down and grabbing a thin old pipe that was lying on the ground. He jumped into the air.
The Ghost lunged, it's pincers about to impale the girl.
The Ghost flew backwards as the pipe collided with its body. It slammed into the earth. Kade landed on the ground behind Angie and jumped into the air again. He gripped the pipe and lunged it downwards. The end impaled the Ghost in the head, piercing straight through. The body immediately burst into flames. Kade hit the ground and immediately shouted at Angie.
"What are you waiting for!? Seal it now!" Angie's eyes widened.
"R-right!" She closed her eyes and raised her hand. The bracelet on her hands started glowing. The gems emitting a bright light. Taking a deep breath she chanted.
"Evanidus!" The green orb that had risen from the Ghost's ashes flew towards the jewels. The creature's soul screamed as it was being sucked in. With a small 'pop' the soul was sealed. Angie took a deep breath and opened her eyes.
"I…I did it…"
Frasier smirked lightly as he watched the girl.
So…Her album is the bracelet on her wrist…How interesting.
He looked over the two young Ghost hunters.
That Girl has got a lot of talent. Angie Amor. A aristocrat from Europe, trained from an early age to be a Binder. If she were to be partnered with someone like Kade…
Kade stood up straight and gripped the pipe in his hands. He was facing the steel structure. The second Ghost had just regained consciousness and was growling at the young man, its tail flickering around. Kade narrowed his eyes.
"…Angie, right?" He said, not looking at the girl. Angie turned towards him.
"When I kill this thing. Seal it fast, alright?" He said. She turned back to the Ghost.
"I was going to do that anyway," She said. Kade smirked lightly.
"Okay then," The Ghost suddenly threw back its head.
"RAAAAAAAAWWWWWWHHHHHH!!!!" It roared.
"Come on ugly! Let's see what you got!" Kade smirked. The demon pointed its tail at him. Kade held the pipe out in front of him. The Ghost dashed toward him. Kade slowly raised his pipe in the air. The Ghost was getting closer. The young man didn't move, he just watched it calmly. The Ghost roared, foam flying out of the corners of its mouth. Kade gripped his weapon.
"RAAAAWWHHHHH!!" The creature lunged at the boy. Kade narrowed his eyes.
"You're too weak!" He swung the pipe down. It crashed into the top of the Ghost head. Its neck broke instantly and its head was driven into the ground. The earth cracked and shattered as the body slammed into the ground. The pipe broke in half, the top half still lodged in the Ghost. The Ghost scream faded as it body slowly stopped moving. After wiggling for a few seconds it fell to the ground, unmoving
Kade stared forward, not moving. The construction site became silent. The only sound being the small breeze that blew through the area. The body of the ghost burst into flame, a green ball rising out its corpse. Kade heard Angie chant her spell.
"Evanidus," The demons soul sped past Kade, who didn't bother watching it. The young man stood up straight, still gripping the broken pipe in his hand. Taking a deep breath he looked up into the night sky as the wind gently blew his spiky hair. For a minute he just watched the stars as Angie finished the sealing.
He turned his head when he heard someone clapping slowly. Frasier stood leaning against the steel frame, smirking as he clapped.
"Well, That was quite a show! Very good, both of you did a wonderful job," Angie lowered her hand and looked over at Frasier.
"Angie, you have some real talent there. You're going to be a pretty good Binder one day, if you're not one already," Angie smiled slightly.
"And Kade," Frasier smirked again, "I haven't seen a fight like that since the last time I saw Reaper fight," Kade's face betrayed nothing. Chucking at the boy Frasier reached into his pocket.
"And with that…I'll gladly give you two these," He tossed an object to each of them. Kade caught it and glanced at it. The moon's light letting him see the wording on the badge.
Kade clenched his fingers around the object. He looked up when he heard someone step up to him. It was Angie.
"I…" She started, "I wanted to apologize for what I said earlier. I didn't even know you, and yet I was rude. I guess I just wanted to be partnered with someone strong." Kade rose an eyebrow at this and she hurriedly corrected herself, "Well, t-that I thought was strong, and I guess a little upset that someone didn't want to partner with me," She sputtered, "I…I'm sorry. You're not inexperienced, and you're obviously not weak." She held out her hand.
"I think…It'll be a pleasure to work with you …" Kade stared at her hand. He did nothing to take it. He glanced over at Frasier, he was still leaning against the beams, watching him coolly. He turned back to Angie, who had not moved. After a minute he hesitantly raised his hand and grasped hers.
"…Yeah…" He finally said, "You're not so bad yourself," His regular smile broke its way onto his face.
"It's nice to meet you, Angie Amor," She smiled.
"It's nice to meet you too, Kade Sky…"
Authors Note: Okay this is like the third story I've started in the past two months or so, and the other two didn't make it past chapter 1. But I'm gonna stick with this one because I really like the concept. It might be a bit confusing but its only chapter one right? Please Review!