This is a story that I wrote for my brother - he made it up, I typed it out. He's only ten, so don't tell me the plot sucks or anything. Just tell me how I did with the writing and if you enjoyed it!

Please review, for my brother as well as for me!

Don't Rain on Me

I'm cold, and I'm alone. Please help me.

I've searched for hours, but it's no use in this pouring rain. My friend; he's lost. He's only a baby - just four years old! - and he definitely shouldn't be out on his own. My mother - she'll be worrying like mad. He's like a son to her. My brother.

Bonnie, please. Help me - I'm scared.

It'd be easier if he was bigger. If he was tall, I'd be able to see him anywhere he went and he'd never get lost. But I've never met anyone so tiny.
His hair is soft and cut short, 'cause I know he hates it long. He has big brown eyes that make you wanna melt, and his smile is the cutest little thing ever. He's never messy, so it's not like I could just follow the trail of mud. Besides, the rain would've washed it away. Damn rain.

Bonnie?

The wind is blowing so harshly that I'm starting to think he's been blown away. It nearly happened once. Mother told us not to go out, but we didn't listen. We just wanted to play.
And then the wind came.
The poor thing was swept off his feet and right into a lake, and he had to cling on to a branch with all his strength while I went to get my mother. But I'm not with him now, he's all alone.

"Luke?" I yell, frightened beyond measure. I might be close, or I might be miles off. It's too hard to tell with this roaring wind. Luke's always been quiet and I used to love that about him. Little voice for a little guy. Now, I'm starting to rethink my judgement.
Big voice is always better, especially for the little guy.

"Luke!" I call again, pushing every bit of energy I can into the shout. I've begun to realise that this is a bad idea. I should not have come out alone - mother would want to help me. I'll go get her.

"Bonnie..."

I stop, slowly turning around as I hear a faint little voice from one of the bushes. Why did I not check there? But I am only young myself, it wouldn't be fair to blame me. I creep along the path leading to the hedge quietly, and pause right before the opening.
"Luke..?" I whisper hesitantly, which is stupid. The wind is howling louder than ever.

"Bonnie!" I hear an excited little yelp, and two seconds later I'm pinned on my back to the pavement. I open my eyes, trying to make them focus. In front of me I've got a brown haired monster, completely messy and drenched. I give a soft, relieved laugh. Then I frown and push him off me; he slides easily onto the hard ground.

"Luke! If you ever do that to me ever again, I swear-"

"You said 'ever' twice," Luke giggles. I scowl a little, but when I hear my mini-speech replay in my head, I join him.

"Luke, I'm serious," I tell him, between breaths. "You've had me, mother and all my brothers and sisters worried. You could have been killed!"
Luke's face takes on a hurt expression, which makes him look like an adorable little angel.

"I wouldn't have been killed. I've got you to protect me," he smiles up at me. I pretend to think about that, "of course," I finally come out with. "Forever." I add. This makes Luke grin, and I can tell he is going to say something big.

"I love you." Upon hearing this, I nearly cry. He's never said that before in his whole entire life. Not to anyone. It's hard for him to make friends, and his parents died when he was born, so he lives with us.

"I love you too Luke."

I am a sucker for happy endings. Plus, this is a children's story :P

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