
Okay, so, this is a very paranoid poem about life, I guess. Sorta existentialist, I suspect, I can get very existential and it's from my point of view. It's a rewrite actually, used to just be a paragraph of prose- it's come a long way. I hope you enjoy it.
Rated: Fiction T - English - Words: 414 - Published: 10-05-12 - Status: Complete - id: 3063210
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Faces rush past me
As I journey through the
World, which tells me we're
Both moving and yet I feel
So still. Like I'm looking
Through a window, a prison's
One-way glass reversed—
You'd think it'd be a welcome
Break, to have the tables
Turned. But the opposite
Proves true as all your taunts
Fall on deaf ears and the
Novelty dies fast;
Makes you feel so very cursed.
Your conscience preaches
Optimism and
Convinces you to just
Sit back, relax, to
Enjoy the show and
For some time you are absorbed;
Become just another
Face, with some sentence
IDentity, and adopt
A valid pace and a
Hint of some normality.
But then video files start
Looping and audio invades
Your mind, whispers to you
Secrets from the writer's weary mind.
And the mysticism broken,
You return to reality.
Where you scratch the world
Into the walls,
Tired life falling away
And pooling on the floor,
As the patterns form
And coincide and
Balance oh, so delicately in
Disorganised Chaos.
Some people stand so still,
Departed from time,
Lost in woven walls of
Sight and sound— our
Subtle attentions,
Ignorant actions. They
Are so pretty to look at,
Because the snarling
Lion, the goring bull,
The tempting lover
Can never touch us.
They are like us, yet
So unlike us, but
Somehow they manage
To fit in. Their eyes
Are piercing, their eyes
Coercing, sweetly
Calling me in silence.
And I pour my heart out
To what seem like endless
Frontiers, with unknown
Suns and kingdoms to
Come and the lack of
Matter does not matter
Because it is enough,[RP1]
To see them fly, away.[SAG2]
But what happens to these
Silent listeners, these
Oh so trusted confidants?
Just because they're full of
Stillness does not make them
Statues, still[SAG3] . We do not see
The statues weeping,
We do not see the
Statues' tears, falling
Into limbo's chaos
Of forgotten thoughts;
Forgotten fears. The
Feelings we shower
Without a care, they
Erode, they destroy.
They cause disrepair
And make statues stare
At the world's shining
Ruins, the world's epic
Neglect, for the fact
That the little things
Are important, things
Like atoms, like words,
Periodicals[SAG4] ; surds.
The unknowable
Intangible grains
Of form, which are all
A statue can know.
[RP1]Do you think I should remove this comma?
[SAG2]I really like this sentence
[SAG3]Lovely alliteration halts us on the static meaning
Is it good that it halts?
[SAG4]It was a misspelling, it's periodicals
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