I'm new and I've already got one story going on, it's called the Mercenary Academy and I'm working reall yahrd on it, only problem is I've only gotten 2 annonymous reviews, I just want some real fictionpress users to take a look at it and tell me if I'm doing anything wrong.

Here's the Link : http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2638030/1/The_Mercenary_Academy

i would give a summary but i suck at them, all I can tell you without embarassing myself is that the title is indeed cliched but the story isn't, so i would greatly appreciate anyone who would give a review, thanks.

I guess no one will pay attention even here unless I post a summary, I'll try but it won't be that great.

The story is set in the star system of Visinto and features multiple races and planets, it's a mix of sci-fi with fantasy since there is alot of magic involved.

The story revolves around Kaidan Solomon. He is an 18 year-old amnesiac who can't remember anything before the age of 15. He was found the City of Eternal Twilight by the king of the dark elves, Zane, and was taken in by him. Kaidan showed amazing ability to fight and learned the things Zane taught him very quickly, blood tests showed that he was half-elf; half hume and half dark elf. He lived there for 3 years, but he always felt like there was something he was supposed to do and he wanted to find out more about himself. So he decicded to go to the most multicultural place around, the Mercenary Academy. There he meets the other two main characters, Reymundo Santiago; a powerful Lycan who has lived for hundreds of years and wants to find something interesting to do and to develop his unique form of Lycan energy, he still appears as if he's 22; and Mystina Shuto, a human girl whose magical ability surpasses both the light elves and dark elves and who is desperately tring to figure out the mysterious "Project Aegis" that here mentor left behind before she disapeared.

That's the basic overview, like I said I'm not really good at summaries _.

Hey I will read your story sounds good too. Anyone wants to read mine to leave any suggestions or comments . Heres a little summary a young man named Richard (Ricky) is learning about his past life and learning more about his new life. Along the way he learns more about the curse (or gift) he has by making new allies, friends, and enemies. This is his story.

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