Still, I thought I would share some things I've learned.

If you post anything online you have handicapped yourself.

When you go to a publishing house they are going to buy serial rights. If you publish online you will have to tell them and will have to sell them second serial rights rather than first. This can cause trouble because why would they want to buy a story that anyone can read online? It goes with the rule that putting something online /is/ publishing it. Also, there's always a chance that someone will steal the storyline.

It doesn't mean that you can't post stories up for review and critique but I would recommend that you reserve your hard-worked stories for another medium. There are writing groups all over that place that can help and you won't have such a high risk of stealing.

This isn't to discourage your efforts I just thought I would share some information. I read "Everything To Know About Publishing" to learn about the entire system. I'd recommend it if you're seriously interested in becoming a published author. It's very useful.

Continue to practice. I'm sure you'll get there. In the meantime I'll try to get over to your story to read and review it.

-that one girl

Actually, the only reason I decided to post this particular story online is because I know I'm never going back to it. It was one of those high school things I moved on from years ago, one of those things I remember seeing as "amazing" when I was about 15 and could not help but wonder if it was as "amazing" as I had thought it was then. (Obviously not, but its not as bad as I had expected when I clicked back on it)

I figured that I had this old story I was never going to use, so I could post it up and get some critisism I could use for future stories (style tips and stuff I guess)

Thank you so much for taking time to look at it. :) It's GREATLY appreciated.

That would be a good reason to post it.

I'm posting work up like that, not so much high school themed, but ones that I know I won't get published. For the same reasons as well. =] I will try to give some honest and helpful critique since I think those are the most helpful (and it's what you're looking for).

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