What kind of fighting style are you doing? Swords, magic, guns, fistfights....?

Being able to write with satisfactory (for the author, I mean) detail does take a little time. You get better as you go along, but for the time being, try focusing on details, and what they feel/look like. You know what I mean. Put yourself in their position, and see if you can imagine what it feels like. The more vivid, the better. And also, using things like Thesaurus.com helps to find the right words. Don't worry, it'll come in time. I'm still learning, and I don't think I'll ever stop, same with anybody.

Do you have one specific plot without anything else going on? This could be the cause.

Hawk

(If you're still looking) Pink Lemonade had a point. The single best way to get 'detail' into an action sequence is to just take it one step at a time. Don't concentrate on the whole ten-mile-long car-chase scene; concentrate on the first part. What's it feel like to stand beside the car? What's the car feel like (new, old, rough, smooth, clean, dirty)? Is it hot? Cold? Windy? Still? City? Urban? Noisy? Quiet? A line that struck me years back was simply the notation that the man in question was in such a quiet place that he could hear the heat bugs singing as he wiped sweat from his face. That's the easy way of getting simple, make-it-feel-real detail into your scene. Frankly, detail like that makes a story succeed for me far more than knowing the exact make and model of the pistol he carries, the car he drives, or the underwear his moll's wearing. Make me feel what he's feeling as he goes into this action sequence, and my imagination will fill in any holes that yours leaves open.

Put yourself there. Imagine yourself standing in that situation. What all are you seeing, hearing, feeling, smelling, even tasting? Molecular detail? Not necessary. Living detail? Always a good thing. In all honesty, with detail in the background and environment, even a short chapter will feel that little bit longer.

Davey

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