What I mean by the Physiological action is, well, I'm not sure how to explain it, but pretty much induced Stolkholm Syndrome.

So, you want to write a kind of psychological thriller. The kind of thing that makes people think, 'this guy is weird, holy crap, is he really gonna do it, etc.' If so, I can probably give you a few pointers--I just need to comfirm that that's what you're doing.

First off, definitely make this guy weird. Not publicly weird, though, but definitely alone at his house weird. Make this freshman--girl, I presume--very wary of him, like she knows--or thinks--he's always undressing her with his eyes. A good tactic would be to have him approach her, not in a forward way about his obsession but more like a kind of greeting, to say hello, but he keeps going up to her. She slowly begins to become scared of him, thinking he might be a rapist or whatnot, then maybe one day while he's following her around he hears her talking to her friends about him, but in like a, "This guy is really creepy...I want to stay away from him...what does he think he's doing?" deal. Then he can either act upon it on her or slowly drive himself insane.

For a psychological thriller to live up to its name you must stay inside the persona of your main character at all times; wrap the reader around his mind. Don't switch out to others' perspectives. You can write it in 3rd or 1st person, but the latter would probably be more effective. Give him subtle things that make him strange, though he appears very normal. An obsession with tiny glass trinkets that he talks to, or some kind of odd ritual before he goes to bed. Tiny, tiny tidbits that accumulate into a crazed personality that are hidden from his stalkee for a while but then she begins to notice that he's a tad off.

I recommend 1st person. Write for him normally; he goes to work, he bowls, he has coffee with cream, no sugar. I hate to suggest it, even though it's just fiction, but having him do strange things to his or someone else's pet, be they harmful or something not inherently harmful like perhaps dressing it up or something weird, is a remarkably effective way of displaying 'offness'.

That's all I've got for now. If you posed a question or something I could probably help you with it.

Wolfie

I think you get the picture.

With some of the practice I've had from writting in 3rd person, I think I'm going to give it a whirl there and see how it turns out.

...Maybe you could read it before I post and tell me if it sucks or not? After I write it, of course...

I'd be glad to take a look at it. I can't guarantee a fast response, but once you're finished just mail it to me at kerriganishot699@cs.com.

Wolfie

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