So i recently started a new story that is in the POV of an independent, opinionated teen vampire. She meets another vamp named Cherry and is invited to join her foster home. Once there she realizes that she was to change her ways in order to help others. It is the first story I've done in present tense, and I'm not sure if I like it. I looove the idea, but I don't think how I started it bring out the best of my writing ability. It starts off in a vampire bar. If anyone can read it that would help it's called Untitled for now. Also I need help with a title and any advice for starting sentences would help. thanks

Yeah I'd love to read it... I've been real busy lately I did NaNo so the entire of last month I've had to do stuff and this Tri at school has been uber hard but now I think that I'm good so I getting caught up on all of this junk.

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