This is the place to come if you want reviews for a poem, and the review type is "depth", aka more substance and more constructive.

For Review Game rules and some fun facts, go to "Read this first!".

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Moving on, this is the basic structure of the Review Game:

Person 1 says: Review "My Lucky Dream"!

Person 2 says: Ok, I reviewed "My Lucky Dream", ch 1 . So can the next person please review "Stereotypes" or "Window"?

Person 3 says: Done (I did "Window", chapter 4), so can the next person review "Stranger"? Thanks.

This means the first one to post here doesn't have to review another person. Aka, first to come gets a freebie. So, hurry!

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For Poem Depth, your review needs to fulfill these requirements, otherwise you will not be seen as someone who has fulfilled their obligation and you can thus not participate.

REVIEW REQUIREMENTS:

Choose at least four of these and comment upon with at least two sentences. In other words: A minimum of 8 sentences total is required. Comments like "That was totally cool, update!" or "I want to read more" does not constitute as a sentence that is to be counted, in this case.

Also, each sentence must comment on something different in the area. For example, 'I really enjoyed the piece. I thought it was very enjoyable' does not count as two sentences. "I really enjoyed the piece. It was enjoyable because I could relate to the characters' is acceptable.

-Flow (ie, did it feel "chunky" and without much connection? A sloppy delivery? Easy to follow? How so?)

-Descriptions/images (Were the descriptions and images in the piece well done? Were they too common descriptions? Did they hit spot on? Effective? Dull? How so? Did the writer use symbolism, personification, etc. well)

-Word choice (were the word choices blending well together? Were some parts too intelligent while others too common? Could some words be replaced by others for more strength in the delivering of a point? How so?)

-Enjoyment (did you like it/dislike it? How did you feel reading this? Bored? Why? Was the direction the poem went for appreciated by you? How so?)

-Subject (what did you think about the main subject of the poem? Could you even interpret it? Was the obtuse nature appreciated? Did you like how straight forward it was? Clichéd? Didn't bring any original points? Suggestions on improvement? How so?)

-Word Play (How did the writer use alliteration, assonance, consonance, onomatopoeia, etc. in the piece?)

-Tone (How was the writer's attitude or the mood of the poem? Did it influence your response to the piece? Was it expected or original?)

-Rhythm (Was there a definite rhythm? Was it jarring, or was it smooth? Did it enhance the poem, or did it detract from it?)

-Punctuation and grammar (Were there any grammartical or spelling errors? Did the writer use incorrect punctuation/grammar intentionally? If so, did it work well?)

-Technical Aspects (Did the writer use syntax, enjabment or repetition effectively?)

-Form (Was there a set rhyme scheme or poem category? If so, did the writer follow them well and did it work in the piece? Were the stanzas organized well?)

-Other (were you hooked? Anything you felt was left out from the other comments? Perhaps summing up all the good and bad points and closing it up with some final thoughts?)

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REVIEW TEMPLATE

Here is a suggested way to format your review in order make sure it fits the qualifications.

[Area 1 from above] = Two sentences about this

[Area 2 from above] = Two sentences about this

[Area 3 from above] = Two sentences about this

[Area 4 from above] = Two sentences about this

Please remember that you do not need to make your review in this structure. It can be one flowing text, like how you usually review, and after writing what you had to say, compare with the requirements and see if you fulfilled them. Otherwise, just add what is "missing". No need to be so formal unless you don't want to. And remember that flaming is prohibited.

LET THE GAMES BEGIN!

"even if i scream," please... :)

-Lefty

Would someone please review 'Promise Me'. It's not long or complicated, and I dont need a complicated in-depth review, just for someone to read it.

Thanks all!

X--hime1221

"a self tour" or "even if i scream" please! :)

-Lefty

(i hope I am using this posting board right.. my first time :))

I'd like some feedback on The NonEpitaph thanks:)

Sweet Saccharine, anyone? Much appreciated.

If somebody would like to review Moonlight that would be excellent, or any other poem on my page really. I'm not picky.

Could someone take a look at either Did I mention? or Rewind, Slow Motion

Technical and content suggestions are much appreciated.

Could someone please review... Overtime.. My most recent piece thanks

I wanted to leave more, but I guess it'll have to do... sorry, panties. I guess It's me now, unless boss lady wants to say something...

Review Sweet Saccharine if you please.

You are allowed to review anyone who is participating in the game.

Though, next time you make an off topic post, please take consideration for Rule 12 in the Read This First! topic.

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Sweet Saccharine by Otseis is still up

I is sawwy.... I think my brain stopped registering the rules halfway through.. lol

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Sweet Saccharine by Otseis is still up

I would appreciate it if someone would review Overtime or Harmless... they're both two (very similar) chapters... The second one is thew editted version, but if you wanna look at both id love you forever and ever...

I'd love it if someone took a look at either Cato as a Prank or Portraiture.

Something Higher if you please...

I'd love it if someone took a look at The Feminine Mystique at Midnight. It is more of a prose poem than anything else and I'd like to get some more feedback on it. If you're not up to that, then either Rear Window or Cato as a Prank.

Deep Waters

Sorry, Karnipa, but I was just wondering, isn't Deep Waters a prose, not poem? You may be in the wrong section here. Hope that helps

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sorry, mods. I'm not sure who is up for reviewing now...

-Lefty

Could someone read Little Vampires for me?

Or if you're not really into cutting undertones, perhaps I'll See You Again? I'll see you again is more of a song really, by the way.

Could someone give "Authenticity" (http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2231621/1/Authenticity) a little love? Thanks~!

Will someone please read and review any of my poems.

Again, Magnus, your review do not fill the review requirements. Read the first post if you wish to play.

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It's My Prince by simpleplan13

Any poem from my page please? =) Thanks!

~silv3rdr34ms

Could someone do Pretending?

Or any other of my more recent poems would be apreciated.

Could someone give me some (much needed) feedback on This Bubble of a World?

It will be GREATLY appreciated.

Please review http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2429064/1/Mirrored

*Off Topic*

Don't know how you kids just make the name of the piece appear, but I am jealous.

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Could someone do Burned or I'm Not Charlie

*Off Topic*

To put the title in the link, you do [s:NumberID:Title]

The number ID is in the url of your story, after "s/" and before the chapter number.

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Please review Hidden_Meaning

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I read through the rules, but I'm not sure if it's okay if I'm already reviewing again. If so, consider it a free-bee; it was a harder one for me to critique because of the shorter length.

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ive asked that question before.. yes you can review again

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Hidden Meaning by JA Madison is up next

Now I've also done Hidden Meaning.

If someone could look at either The Feminine Mystique at Midnight or Cato as a Prank that would be much appreciated. The former is poetic prose but I'm in the midst of an edit and not sure what's really working or what's not.

Thanks muchly.

Could someone review sadness?

...It's 2 chapters.. the second is a rewrite, but if you take the time to read them both and compare them I promise you a nonRG review

Could someone take a look at This Bubble of a World, please?

Would someone review "Laundry Days" for me? (I'm not afraid of concrit, so have at it!)

(P.S.: Where did the link function go? I don't see it...)

Please review Beauty_and_Compassion

_American Sonnet anyone?

Matches?

thanks!

-artificial destiny

People! This is DEPTH! Read the requirements for how to fulfill your review. FOUR different areas must be commented upon with at least two sentences.

If you don't fulfill such things, you won't be able to participate and I won't count you as a participant.

Please put more effort into this category. I want RG Depth to withhold the minimum standard.

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Neither artificial destiny nor Marilyn Manson of literature fulfilled the criteria.

This means J.A. Madison is up, with his poem Beauty and Compassion .

Could someone review Maybes please?

Can the next player review This Bubble of a World please? Thanks! =)

Could someone please take a look at The Feminine Mystique At Midnight or we can count millennia and still love the same.

Mayhem In The Midwest (http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2471937/1/), please. And tear it apart. I like its base concept, but it needs so so so much work.

Please review Night

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