Well usually in every mystery movie or whatever... the female on the case usually falls for the male cop... e.g.: Murder by Numbers. That's the only one I can think of off the top of my head...

what about it seems cliched?

not to be vague or anything... but the whole idea seems like I've seen it somewhere....

[sorry I couldn't help more....]

Depending on how you pull it off it could be good. Murder by Numbers was an awesome movie/book. The romance aspect of it wasn't the main focus but it was there. If yours is the main focus (which it seems like it) try to make it unique somehow...either way people are going to read it, "cliches" are something people are used to and comfortable with because they know where it's headed and they aren't straying into unknown territories. Just make it cool and you're fine.

cliches" are something people are used to and comfortable with because they know where it's headed and they aren't straying into unknown territories.

Another valid point. Just try and add something different into the mix. Plot twists and all....

No...the romance isn't the main aspect, and it's not a 'murder mystery' because there isn't actually a murder...the cop is a loser who lives with his mother and used to bully the girl when she was alive, and can't handle the fact that he might have contributed to her death and the lead starts off just wanting to get back at her boyfriend for being in love with a lesbian...I was going more for black comedy than romance or murder mystery

That actually sounds good... not cliche really.

soo...the summaries are clearly giving people the wrong idea...I reeally suck at summaries

I might just cop out and do what I did with The Last Summer and stick in a quote...it would continue the theme

do you think it's appropriate to say 'balls' in a summary?

soo...the summaries are clearly giving people the wrong idea...I reeally suck at summaries

Yeah. I was totally thinking something different. But maybe it's a good thing. It's like You walk in expecting one thing, and BAM! Something totally different.

If you're having trouble, just use a particularly good quote from the first chapter.

do you think it's appropriate to say 'balls' in a summary?

Hell yeah, I did that before. No one complained or said anything...it grabbed their attention.

Hell yeah, I did that before. No one complained or said anything...it grabbed their attention.

If I saw "Balls" In a summary, I'd probably take a look.

Okay I'm thinking this one:

All I can think as he leads me to the police car is that Rex really shouldn’t have bet his left ball on the fact Jen Goodman committed suicide. It’s the best one.

*convulses*

All I can think as he leads me to the police car is that Rex really shouldn’t have bet his left ball on the fact Jen Goodman committed suicide. It’s the best one.

Yikes! And I'm not too fond of the victim's name, either.... (Reminds me of John Goodman...)

John Goodman was god in the Big Lebowski...

John Goodman

who's that?

In that context I think "nut" sounds better than "ball".

John Goodman was god in the Big Lebowski...

But that's no name for a woman to have!

[unless she's obscenely fat....]

But that's no name for a woman to have!

[unless she's obscenely fat....]

She's not...but I've called her Jen Goodman like a hundred times...it just fits in my head...I couldn't change it

nut is more american I think...I just think of walnuts

She's not...but I've called her Jen Goodman like a hundred times...it just fits in my head...I couldn't change it

John Goodman is a really fat actor in the states. It puts a bad image in my head....

Nut is more blunt sounding than ball.... ball just sounds "playful" in that context...

ball just sounds "playful" in that context...

that was bad.... It really gave me a horrid thought reading it: John goodman playing with his balls.

*Shudders*

mmm

Well I think I'm all sorted...I might change it to the full Jennifer, but apart from that I'm done...

thanks for the help :)

No prob. I maight even read it. Seems interesting.

Story sounds quite interesting. I wanna read it now.....write woman!!! Write!!!!! lol

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