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Post your stories here for others to read. Especially if your a newbie, you can put up your stories here. Enjoy!

#1 Oct 17th 2006, 6:57pm

M.R.Sanner

Hi I would really appreciate it if some would take a gander at my Story Frog's , Warts & Kisses .

short summary : It's a twisted remake of the frog prince that has more to deal with parellel dimensions tehn evil witches .

#2 Oct 18th 2006, 6:11am

Take-Me-Down

I would love it if someone would check out my story 'Lullaby of the Dead' and leave me a review or two. I really want some feedback on it.

#3 Oct 18th 2006, 8:01am

lightpaladin

Um...yeah, I would really like some reviews/opinions/criticism on my story, entitled "Angel of Chaos". It would really help me out here.

#4 Oct 18th 2006, 8:11am

Take-Me-Down

I'll go check it out for you. I don't have anything else planned for today. I'm really good at giving people critism on their stories. Not that mean kind but the kind that actually helps you see where it is you need to work on your story. Well, I'm off! Look for a review from me soon.

P.S. You don't have to return the favor if you don't want to.

#5 Oct 18th 2006, 8:17am

Violet Marx

Ok, I'm not actually recommending a story, but a person. But she's got some wonderful things up! And if you ask her, she might review your stuff. She's very helpful, too.

It's drippingdreams. (no period.) Just look her up in the search.

#6 Oct 18th 2006, 9:07am

Artem D

Just wondering if anyone would be interested in readin my story-in-progress: The Days Before The Last.

#7 Oct 18th 2006, 2:38pm

Take-Me-Down

I'll read it for you.

#8 Oct 18th 2006, 3:30pm

xbluxmoonx

Interesting! I'll definitely look up all your guyz' stories soon. Unfortunately, I've got this homework piling up. lol. :-D

#9 Oct 18th 2006, 4:33pm

xbluxmoonx

Hiya, peeps!

I'm having a bit of trouble here. I'm not sure what category I should put my story, Prey, in. I'm not sure whether to put it under fantasy, thriller or horror. It's about vampires, murder, suspense, some romance, but I'm still not sure. Can anyone give me some ideas as to which category it might go good under? Thank You!

#10 Oct 18th 2006, 9:21pm

Fyryth

Greetings, all. I might as well jump on the bandwagon. I'd really appreciate it if someone could review my story Exiled Sin. Just please don't comment on the small chapters haha! I have to log off now, but when I get back on, I'll take a peek at some of the other stories mentioned here.

#11 Oct 19th 2006, 4:47am

Take-Me-Down

Fantasy or Supernatural would fit it fine. Just whichever you think is best really. I'd stick mine under Supernatural if it was modern day and Fantasy if it was set in my own world. Just my opinion of course. Good luck with choosing.

#12 Oct 19th 2006, 4:49am

xbluxmoonx

Thank yas! :-D

#13 Oct 19th 2006, 3:31pm

lightpaladin

I'd actually like to recommend a fantasy author here on fictionpress. Her name is Mya von Dor and she writes excellent, EXCELLENT fantasy stories. Check her out sometime!

#14 Oct 19th 2006, 4:24pm

Bitter Irony

I suggest Fiore Chnudth's "The Midnight Globe" to anyone who wants a really interesting fantasy read. Also, The Mumbling Sage's "Knight of the Unicron" is absolutely amazing.

#15 Oct 19th 2006, 6:17pm

K. Francesco

I would like anyone who wishes to have a thorough critique of their story send me an email. Why am I requesting this instead of simply going to those who wish a critique? I have found that my comments are often stronger than what the author wished. I can tear a story apart and give you advice, but I don't wish to go where I am not wanted.

So, if you want an honest appraisal (and no, I am not so callous as to not praise you for what you've done well), send an email to beyondexpectations@soon.com and I will do my best to give your work a serious once-over.

Kat

#16 Oct 20th 2006, 1:55pm

Ink-Mouse

Hiiiii!!!!! Okay, one, I'd like some feed back on my story: The Heir

I'm not all that good with summaries, but maybe some one would like to check it out. Elves, dragons, and such are included

Also, I'd like to recomend my FAVORITE story! It's called Esalno. once again not summarising it for the same reason (and I can't copy and paste it 'cause me computer is freaked up)

#17 Oct 20th 2006, 4:34pm

StoryJunkie

I'm working on this project for a while. I started a fan fic a year or two ago, and it inspired me to create an entire world with its mages, kings, monks, dragons and spells. So I wrote it down as "Dance of Fire" Although I completed it, (there are harrowing warnings for younger more impressionable readers), I felt that I rushed the ending, so I started on "The Monastery" since the characters seemed to have taken me over. It's about a giant spell that was cast, a long lost people, a tragic war that claimed many lives, and a lurking evil ambition that thirsts for power. If you check it out, I hope that you like it. It's kind of romantic. I'd appreciate any suggestions to help it along, and I'm not afraid of flaming insults or just a "Liked it". Thanks .

btw, fyi, I just don't like horror vampire elements in the fantasy section. I don't know why. It really bothers me, and if something is classified as fantasy when it has werewolves and vampires in it, I will tell them to re-classify it. Sorry. Just they way I am.

#18 Oct 20th 2006, 7:11pm

Brother Andyn

Hey

I was wondering if anyone would like to read my two stories:

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2255304/1/

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2255306/1/

I really, really need reviews, especially from female readers. All reviews are massively appreiciated!

Andy

#19 Oct 20th 2006, 7:29pm

xbluxmoonx

Kewl, thanks so much. so, fantasy out, eh? k, well, i was thinking thriller or horror, but i'm not sure if my story is even that horrific. i mainly consider it a suspense kind of story and stuff. lol. thanks for the input, ppls. anyhoo, i'll definitely try and check out your guyz' stories, but unforunately, i'm gonna be busy all week. gr, but i will be back sooner or later. lol. :-)

xbluxmoonx

#20 Oct 20th 2006, 8:31pm . Edited Nov 12th 2006, 9:03pm

diamond-dust08

hey guys, i'm gonna check your stories out and leave a review (especially if it's fantasy-themed; i'm such a sucker for it). although be warned, when i give a review it's mostly CCs that not all can stomach, so if you don't want, just tell me.

but since i'm just one person and i don't have all the time in the world, i may not be able to do it immediately after this, but i'll be bookmarking you just in case.

anyone want a review? drop me a line on my profile page, and maybe give me a review while you're at it.

xbluxmoonx, you rock for making this forum. see ya guys.

~DD

#21 Oct 21st 2006, 2:22am

Elevator

I'm a bit review deprived, so if anyone wants to review anything of mine, feel free.

#22 Oct 21st 2006, 11:24am

Alora The Sleepy

I was wondering if any one might review my story entitled "The Shadow Keeper"?

I know that it's very long, but if you could just read the prologue and the first chapter I'd be happy. And I am aware that it is a very long prologue aswell.

It's just I'm working on it for a competition and I'd like some feedback. A lot of people have said the beginning of the prologue doesn't draw you in. If someone could tell me why or how I can fix it, I'd be so grateful.

Please and thanks.

#23 Oct 21st 2006, 5:22pm

Shadow Whirlwind

Hey everyone! Umm, I haven't really updated my stories in a while, but I was wondering if you could tell me what you think. Any criticisms I mean... On "Destiny" and "Quest of Zyrith"

#24 Oct 21st 2006, 7:03pm

DDK

I don't have serious projects up at the moment, but I do have a fun little dollop of silliness that might serve as a nice read. :3 If anyone would like review The Unfortunate Incident Of The Lantern In The Attic, go on ahead. It would make me happy. xD

#25 Oct 21st 2006, 7:07pm

raegunonaplane

'Cynical Life and Death' is my fantasy/supernatural story. :D It starts off very quickly and so far it's kinda keeping anyone who reads it in the dark, but eventually it will reveal all. xD Yaay. Snort.

#26 Oct 21st 2006, 11:35pm

Chris Taylor

I posted a story a while ago that I haven't updated yet, Fyre Eyed. It's nowhere near completion yet, but if I were to summarize it, it's a story where under a different point of view, the hero and the villain could be considered their opposites. Although it doesn't look like that at all right now, that's the way it'll turn out eventually, right now it's just the Prelude. Constructive Criticism is very welcome, encouraged even more.

I'll read some of the stories already listed when I'm finished work.

#27 Oct 22nd 2006, 6:59am

xbluxmoonx

I really should be doing hw right now, but I was wondering if ppl could check out my story :) It would be so awesome cause I need input. lol. I'm hoping to publish it one day, but I'm not sure if it's even that great. It's called Prey. heh, anyhoo, I'll be back definitely to check out your guys' stories and all, but i think algebra2 won't leave me alone right now. gah! k, thank ya's, peeps! :-D

xbluxmoonx

#28 Oct 22nd 2006, 1:10pm

Heatless Flame

Just a few stories that I like and that everyone should check out and maybe leave a review? By the way, the top one is my current story. Yeah, anyway...

1.Three Elements in Alique: Heroic Villain, by Heatless Flame

2.The Future of Fantasy 1 & 2 by Ryoma90

3.Cruelty, Malice, and Freedom, by Dawnella

4.Paladin, by Casey Drake

5.Legacy of the Newborn Trilogy, by Isildur254

I'd thank you heartily to review any, and wil review in return if you review mine!

~Heatless Flame

#29 Oct 22nd 2006, 5:16pm

Kazu.Shinn.Jz.

Please read and review my stories

here is the link to my profile

http://www.fictionpress.com/~kazushinnjz

my current stories:

Hidden Identities: The Darkness Within

Project EROS: The Battle for supremacy begins

#30 Oct 22nd 2006, 9:24pm

Violet Marx

Hey, I'd be really pleased if you could read my poem Trey. No one has reviewed it and I don't think it's all that bad.

#31 Oct 23rd 2006, 4:22pm

JDSandara

Hiya, peeps!

That's the same exact problem I always had. I saw someone replied that if it's set in modern day it fits Supernatural better the problem is mine is modern day but that's not the only time it's set in.

Anyway, sounds like I should go off and read your story xbluxmoonx, since mine's also about vampires, murder, suspense, and a lot of romance, plus magic, conspiracies, and a bunch more. If anyone's interested it's called Leaving the Light.

Leaving the Light

#32 Oct 23rd 2006, 8:26pm

Enigmatic Margaret

Well I have just posted a story called, "Insignificant enough to Kill."

If anyone is interested check it out.

Just go through my profile I guess.

Check out my other work if you like... well laters.

#33 Oct 24th 2006, 12:40am

Alteng

Well, I am really pushing to get folks to read and review my story "Bane of Rendsberg Part I" since I have just recently rewrote it. I kind of wonder if the original was not the better of the two versions. I woudl really like to know how it comes over as far as the characters and the action.

#34 Oct 24th 2006, 5:40am

Goddess Aurora

I would like someone to read my story "The Legend of Aurora", and give me some comments. Thanks a lot. =)

Summary: Two girls, who share the same face, live in two different worlds. They have been dreaming of each other until...

#35 Oct 24th 2006, 11:52am . Edited Oct 24th 2006, 7:34pm

Patricia Louise

I'd like a few people to read the following stories of mine...if you would....

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2231834/1/

The above is one called The Christmas Princess. It's only got the prologue right now, but I plan to add more soon.

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/1997964/1/

This one is called Black Diamond Sphere. It's just the sort of story I've done for fun, and I really enjoy writing for it. I'd appreciate your thoughts.

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2001231/1/

This one is called Avalon: Continuing On. It's about what happened after the death of King Arthur.

#36 Oct 24th 2006, 11:57am

Du Edoc'sil

hey, im newish here, and i was just wondering if someone wouldn't mind taking a look at my story Sorcere: http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2254010/1/

its kind of long but dont let that discourage you, and also feel free to give plenty of constructive critisim, i need it. thanks a lot

#37 Oct 24th 2006, 1:48pm

Artofwriting

A whole New World:

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2264538/1/

-About a boy that goes to a magic school (sounds like Harry Potter but it's NOT like Harry Potter).

The Era of Sin:

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2264479/1/

-Set in another world. Sin, a magical man of a old mystic race called Ancients, is killing innocent people to feed on their power, and get stronger. A group of heroes set of to stop him.

#38 Oct 24th 2006, 5:06pm

Alora The Sleepy

I would really appreciate it if someone would read my story 'The Shadow Keeper':

There are many worlds. Two of which are the human world and the fairy world. When Marcel finds her way from the fairy world, Neria, into the human world, Eos, all hell is unleashed. Two humans, who had never before met, must travel together to find the great sorcerer Gideon to restore light to the now black world. The journey is not as simple as it seems, for they must travel unsensed by the Shadow Keeper and poor Kalya must deal with the death of her mother, her best friend joining the Shadows and telling the father who doesn't know she exists that she is his daughter.

A story of magic, romance and pure evil.

Please read and review, even if you don't like it.

Alora

#39 Oct 25th 2006, 1:07am

SadisticZephyr

My piece "The Isle of Forgiveness" marks my first timid steps into the genre of fantasy. To be honest, i'm not too sure if it could TRULY be classed as fantasy instead of just another strange fic of mine, so I'd appreciate if anybody would review it. \

Sincere thanks,

-S_Z

#40 Oct 25th 2006, 5:45am

Zodia

Can someone read my story "The Lost One" please? It's actually done, but very few people have commented on it. I hope none will be daunted by the 50 chapters too. Technically, the story is 13 chapters long. For this place, I just broke it up cause most of the chapters were very long. Hehe, the story is 331 pages typed. lol. Oh, I am still editing it too, so can you just critique the content rather than the grammar please? Thanks alot!!

#41 Oct 25th 2006, 6:42pm

D L Dzioba

Much love for anyone who reviews my story Thirteen Moons Over The Gate! http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2264077/1/ It's the only serious peice I have up right now. The other piece I have, The Damsel In Distress, is just for laughs.

#42 Oct 25th 2006, 8:38pm

Lord Genserick

My story, is about the seven sin's (which in my story i've come to call them Waerloga's.)

These are the seven key angels who fought in that ancient struggle with lucifer to defeat

god. However, after being defeated they were cast out into the world, (or the one ive created.)

to tempt the people further (now by the seven deadly sin's themselves.)

However the the angels in god command were sent to the seven ancient churches of christ,

Esmirna, Laodicea, Sardis, Pergamus, Efese, Tiatria, and Filadel. There the angels revealed to the

priest's the task god had given them. Seven priest's had been chosen to become god's most powerfull

weapons in fighting of Satan.

The seven appointed priest's would become the Seven Virtues themselves.\

These seven chosen were named the:

Seven Seraphs...

Story link here:http://www.fictionpress.com/secure/live_preview.php?storyid=2257693&chapter=1

#43 Oct 27th 2006, 10:41am

Camelot4551

Hey everyone!! I'd really like it if someone would R&R my 2 fantasy stories that are here!!!

Caston: Fight for the Throne

Caston: A Kingdom's Birth

I'm almost finished with Fight for the Throne and it's not really long, so if anyone would R&R that'd be awesome!!!!

#44 Oct 27th 2006, 11:04am

Kayla Christine

Hi! I was just wondering if anyone would like to read my story, Chasing Princes. It's sort of a Cinderella Remake, only not really. See it has a LOT of other fairytales mixed in,and Talia (the main character) is not your typical Cinderella. She's witty and sarcastic and she abosolutely hates most guys. Unfortunately for her, she is soon stuck with the most irrating of them all, pretending to be looking for a prince who doesn't want to be found.

I'm sorry I suck at summaries, But I hope you'll read anyways!! And please review as well!!

#45 Oct 29th 2006, 10:14am

zoogarama

If someone could take a look at my story A Journey's End and review it, that would be greatly appreciated. It isn't finished however I plan on continuing it and adding more to the plot.

#46 Oct 30th 2006, 4:57pm

kamikai bomber

My story, Shudico Defenders, is still a working process, but I would love to hear what others think. I would really appreciated any feedback I get, whether it's harsh or pleasant

#47 Oct 31st 2006, 8:46am

Delandred

Hi, could someone read The Betrayal and give me some feedback please. I've had some reviews already that have been good, im rewriting it now, only the prologue is up ,but I wanted to make sure that there were no other mistakes. I return all reviews.

#48 Nov 05th 2006, 12:50pm

W.F.J. Hammar

I've just posted a story called The Five, it's a working title, it's about a kingdom that is under the rule of a malevolent king. In the story a priestess named Julana is telling the kingdom of her visions of the Five, a group of heros that are going to possiblly save the kingdom and it's people. I started writing the first part, but I'm not going to post it until I finish writing.

#49 Nov 07th 2006, 2:33pm

Thyme Willowbrook

I'm currently focusing on a particular novel that I would love critique on. My goal is to start searching for a publishing agent as soon as it's finished, but I want it to be as perfect as possible before then.

Title: Legacy

Status: 9 chapters; work in progress

Summary:

Magic pendants. Realms of eternal night. Fallen angels. And humans with tails. Did I mention the world is flat? KC's life just got interesting. She holds the key that locks all this madness together.

#50 Nov 09th 2006, 7:23am

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