Michael

The weird (his sword, her flower) ones always bother me and the ones that are so graphic make me cringe.

I'd suggest writing a 'steamy' yet classy love scene so it doesn’t come off trashy or to fake.

My best advice, though, is to do research. Read other stories and take notes...it might be a good idea to write a scene and have another author here critique it. They'll be able to give you some good suggestions on what you should keep and what needs improvement.

Good luck!

I know of a lot of writers who simply pop one in, just because they think that it will attract more readers.

That said, if you are going to write one, make sure you know exactly what you're talking about. Try not to make it overly smutty, that's been done too many times to count. Yes, things CAN get smutty, over-the-top, etc, but some readers might get....bored.

I suggest that (if you have no experience on the matter), you read a few stories that have sex scenes included. What did you like about them? Why did you read these ones instead of other ones? Make a list of what you liked and what you didn't like. Everything should fall into place after that.

Words like "shaft", "piston", "**", "rod", "baby-maker", etc. sound more interesting than "sword".

mICHAEL

by Elizabeth Benedict. I bought it a long time ago and really enjoyed the read. I sometimes struggle with sex scenes, not so much writing them, but having to deal with what my family thinks.

Shameless plug: I have a semi-sex scene in my story Killing Memories (chp. 27). If anyone's willing, pleae check it out and leave me some reviews. I'm interested to see if I'm writing them well.

Cheers!!

:)T

Instead of describing the ravishing of breasts, use something like 'he dipped down to her chest' or something equally as impressionistic. its not hard to guess what he's doing. 'moving together' instead of 'pounding' haha...i mean, there are so many ways. i honestly think leaving more to the imagination is hotter.

"They moved together, blue diamonds on a green field."

(He's got blue diamonds in his skin, and her skin, of course, is green. Kind of odd, but I think the description just kind of works.)

I'm just generally not a fan of the sex scene, actually. It always seems to work better when the closed door actually turns into a fluttering curtain...which is still closed.

I recommend not using curse words when writing about passion. While I love vulgarity, there is a time and a place for everything. You can easily avoid words like "beaver cleaver, pork sword, dick, etc." There is no elegance there.

I suppose a general rule of sex descriptions should be to follow your character's personality. Does he/she talk flowery normally? Is the flow of your piece full of imagery and fluff description? Then your sex scene should be. I don't see flowery description around some hard-as-nails military man and his woman. But if you're writing Victorian lit... maybe so...

:)T

Yeah. I sort of think that sex scenes kill the romance of stories. But that's just a personal thing. I guess.

-Sally Can Wait

Yeah. I sort of think that sex scenes kill the romance of stories. But that's just a personal thing. I guess.

-Sally Can Wait

Here is the link to that specific chapter:

So Much To Learn

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/1978814/17/

Hope this helps.

(I myself am not a writer, but I know a steamy sex scene when I see it.)

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2271975/1/

Tips and suggestions for future reference would be greatly appreciated cause as I said, I've never written stuff like that before..

Also the most important thing about writing a sex scene is to remember it must flow. Sex is supposed to be smooth and poetic, so the sentences should flow and not have a lot of breaks which make the whole scene seem jerky and awkard . So tend to use a lot of conjunctions and commas, making long sentences instead of many small ones.

Emotions are also important as well. There are two people involved so you have to clearly write how each reacts to the contact. Sometimes I forget that. If the guy "runs his palm gently over the soft silky skin on her back" the writer must say next that she "shivered in response" or "moaned softly" or something like that to emphasize that there is communication between the two characters.

I write sex scenes, but I'm more of the type to have them put into outtakes. Some of the best sex scenes I've ever read are on a site called checkmated.com, which is a fanfiction site for Harry Potter. And a lot of the stories do outtakes, where a story is rated teen or whatever, but if it gets to a point where the characters are about to have sex, they do the '...' thing, and then move the entire sex scene into an entirely new story, so you have the option of reading it or not.

That example, So Much to Learn, posted by pili-pali exactly the type of love stories I can't read. It seems really insincere...which I hate. If they're all lovey dovey, then it should be exactly like that. And if it's sex for the sake of sex, then it should be completely detached emotionally.

I think writing sex scenes just takes practice. I mean writing the scenes, not.... Haha.... You get it.

In the associate website, fanfiction.net, I have posted a "Veronica Mars" story titled "Tribal Rites and Wrongs". It contains a scene in which she has sex with her dangerous jerk of a boyfriend Logan. I describe it this way:

{We went into each other's arms, and kissed heavily for a good amount of time. We sank onto his bed, still kissing heavily. Then I presented him with his hero’s reward, and he had me purring for hours.

While I lay there grinning, he said to me, "I love you Veronica."

He thrust and I purred.

"You're stunningly beautiful Veronica."

He thrust and I purred again.

"I think you're never more beautiful, than when I'm ** you."

When he said that, my ** became even more intense, and my purring turned to song.}

The term "hero's reward" is not a clumsy euphemism. It's part of the plot. Does any of what I've just quoted sound pornographic to any of you?

I seriously don't know how the people who write those romances they sell at the supermarket (you know, the ones that are basically written **) do it. I made the mistake of getting a book there once, because I thought it was, you know, an actual story and I really wanted something to read. It was... full of sex. And not just sex, but other stuff that was almost sex... if you get what I'm saying... I mean it wasn't tasteless, it was actually okay, but I'm just not huge on written **.

I have never actually tried to write a sex scene myself, but I know I'd have a lot of trouble. It's just not something I can see myself doing- it's weird.

I'm not sure who said it, but I totally agree, less is sometimes definitelymore. I don't need the detail of every little action. I can get the point of what happened, and I feel it is better to leave it up to the imagination, give the reader a general idea.

I have written a sort of sex scene before, and I did follow what I just wrote. I would feel uncomfortable adding all the dirty details, I prefer keeping things classy.

I agree with the "less is more" attitude.

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