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Hi, recently I've started to plan a story plot about a rich and perfect girl - Lynnette - who has got everything a girl could ever hope for, a boyfriend that loves her, great friends and popularity. Then one of her friends turns her back on her and suddenly starts backstabbing her with rumors, jokes and pranks that takes everything away from her. Her father gets fired and their family is suddenly poor, they can't afford to live in a huge house and Lynnette's private school, they move away into a smaller city and Lynnette is sent to a public school where everything is so crucial. Until she meets a friendly guy named Kyle that helps her get through her hard times while Lynnette reveals shocking secrets about her old friends that backstabbed her.

I'm just not sure if it's a good story, I guess I just want to ask: does it seem boring??

P.S. I would love to review your stories, just as long as it's appropriate. :)

11/16/2010 #1
thenutrunningthenuthouse

The plot idea is a good start, but the rich girl-becomes-poor-then-moves-to-poor-town is a little cliche. Of course, though, there are ways to tweak minor things and make it an original twist on the storyline. For instance, how poor is this new town? Or better, cause this is a real situation. I live in a relatively small, relatively wealthy town with a poorer area. But our public high school is a nightmare. Like, the kids apparently treat you like crap even if you ARE rich. Or you could have this new high school actually be ghetto, so there's an angle of fear in the high school experience. Or even just give Kyle some odd quirk about him.

I do like the idea of there being something beyond the surface of Lynnette's friend, so I think you're getting the idea.

Overall, even if you make none of these changes, I'll read it if you post it.

P.S. If you have time, I'd really appreciate a review for my newest story, Tailored. It's only got one chapter up.

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