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Will Sachiksy
Topic: Worst Piece
I am starting to hate my poem "A Long Forgotten Kingdom." It has almost the same tone and quality as an emo poem.

What do you think is your worst piece on here, and why?

#1 Apr 16th 2007, 5:42pm
Ivory Taint
There’s a three-way tie. I tried to narrow it down, but I couldn’t. -shrug-

No Longer Escaping: It has no eloquence and is far too simple in its language. I could have been much more creative with the wording. Parts of it are weak with no color and most of it sounds as if it were written by a five-year old. Each stanza sounds like it belongs in a different poem and nothing seems to fit, which distracts from the story a bit.

Let Me Listen: It doesn’t flow and isn’t in meter, which sounds awkward due to the rhyming. The word choice is abysmal and certain words sound like they were just randomly squeezed in to sound better. Also, I hate the rhyme scheme—not sure, why I used it.

The Love We Know is Not as Strong: The wording is off, also damaging the meter—it doesn’t flow well. And it’s too simply written. And I should have used a different rhyme scheme. And the message didn’t come across as I hoped it would—it’s very scattered and doesn’t connect, making it pointless.

So, yeah… This makes me want to edit everything. :p

#2 Apr 19th 2007, 8:52pm
LadyWhen
Ha, I have only one thing posted on here, and I think it's the worst out of stuff I've done. I like the concept, but in my eagerness to get it on here I rushed the thing and made it confusing. I could've incorporated the information I had in there into a proper story, but noooo, I had to try to make an "introductory story." Yuck.
#3 Jun 10th 2007, 1:19pm
Will Sachiksy
I understand. I had an idea to write a collection of stories about the "Noble Foxes of Elwood," but I started by trying to write the introduction and just got bored. I also understand the desire to make a clear introduction; you don't want a million people asking "But what does this mean?" or "Who is this guy?" or "Wait, where are the characters?"

I hope you eventually put up the stories related to your introduction.

I like the concept, but in my eagerness to get it on here I rushed the thing and made it confusing.

I hate when I post a story and then find out there were typos in that copy afterwards. Or that I should have rewritten a paragraph to reduce the awkwardness.

#4 Jun 12th 2007, 1:35pm
Miriam Doyle
Ye gods, I have loads of things I wrote that I hate. In particular, I hate my song Life Is A Matter of Fact, which I cringe at whenever I read because it sounds too emo, has no actual meaning, and I always get the sounds and images of a bunch of guys yelling, strobe lights blaring and random electric guitar things, becuase that's exactly what I was thinking about when I wrote it. So. A bunch of crap, basically.

There are some poems in my collection Realms of the Ethereal which I hate, because they seem completely pointless or don't read properly. And there are bits in my story Oculus Exanimus that sound either too emo, or not powerful enough to send the message. I could go on and on, but I'd end up depressing myself at my crapness.

#5 Jun 17th 2007, 2:06pm
EmeraldsAndPearls33
Well, I like a couple of my poems, but in general my least favorite is "Apocalypse" Um, just by the title, can you say pseudo-emo? The poem was more happy-person-on-an-emo-day therapy than actual poetry, as a couple other poems of mine are. I should post some of my newer stuff from creative writing class when I get a chance.

I can tell you what my very worst piece in general is: my very first story. It's on fanfiction.net, and I wrote it when I was twelve. It's laughably cliché and painfully out-of-character, and I blush in embarrassment every time I read it, but I've left it on there as a reminder of how much I've grown in my writing.

Good thread!

Em

#6 Jan 12th, 9:44pm
Fractured Illusion
Wow, a self-bashing place? Wonderful! I shall now revive this thread *does CPR*

I don't have many stories. In fact, only two, but I really hate my first one-shot with a burning passion. It's filled with so many mistakes (adverbs, unnecessarily flowing language, said-bookism etc etc). My other story is pretty much the same except its not completed yet so it still has hope, heh.

I actually dislike my first one-shot so much I don't even want to edit it anymore. I'd delete it if it wasn't for all the wonderful concrit I was given, and I don't want to lose it. Thus I am forced to bear with its presence.

Of course, this story is nothing compared to what I have written earlier, haha. But let's forget about that...

>.>

<.<

#7 Mar 28th, 7:59pm

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