Alright, so, I'm writing a story, and the two main characters kissed... but I don't know what to write after it?
Here's the kiss:
We both look at each other, smiles pasted on our faces. I flush, glancing down at the ground underneath our hands. His hand moves to hold mine. His right holds my chin, gently shifting it to move my gaze back to him. "You don't need to be shy," He tells me, smiling, "You're obviously beautiful."
He leans slowly closet to me, staring into my eyes. I see the look he had when I first saw him. Pure admiration and respect. Love.
Envy smiles warmly, stroking my cheek with his thumb. He lifts from the seat of his feet for a short moment, to plant a quick, innocent kiss against my lips.
I watch him, unmoving, in shock and joy. I wait for a brief second as he moves away, blushing, before lifting from the seat of my own feet to wind my arms loosely around his neck and press my lips against his.
He slips backwards in the tanbark in surprise. I pull him forward lightly, sitting back. I smile slightly to myself as Envy begins to kiss me back; his arms lift to hold me, running his fingers through my hair.
I break away first after a few seconds, in need of breath. My hands slip from their grip on his neck, landing softly on my lap. He beams at me. I grin back at him, my heart pounding.
And that's where I got stuck. Help?11/19/2010 #1
So, I've never been kissed but I do have experience reading and writing kissing scenes. Kissing is a very intimate experience and people don't really act nonchalant after it happens. Have the guy fiddle with a piece of her hair or something else. If they have nervous habits, have them play into the scene. I really liked reading this scene, it makes me want to read your story. I hope my advice helped! You sound like a cool writer.9/25/2011 #2
If it helps, after my first kiss in real life we were silent for a few seconds, and then I asked how long he'd had feelings for me for, and why the hell did it take so long for him to do something about it :P9/30/2011 #3
|Forum Moderators: icedfaerie|
|Membership Length: 2+ years 1 year 6+ months 1 month 2+ weeks new member|