Hello fellow fans of Yuri! Originally I posted this question on the 'Slashfiction' Forum. I had no idea, I thought it was just both Yuri and Yaoi.

Anyway, I need some critiquing on my Yuri/Shoujo Ai story. Also just if you're interested in these types of stories in general, but most of all I want someone to give me feedback and tell me about the story aspects or my writing style. Grammar mistakes if there is any? I need the critique on my work, to see where I might need to improve, I can never get enough.

Even if you're not a great critic or not even a critic at all, just tell me what you think of my story or if you like it.

http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2865080/1/Irish_Dreamer

Also if you want, you can discuss your opinions or just the story in general here if you want a lengthier conversation and you want to ask questions to me directly.

I'll read it within the week and give you some opinions. :)

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