Hello,

After a few years of college under my belt and a whole lot of English courses, I had a story spasm. I haven't seriously written a story for my own pleasure or Fictionpress in sometime (nearly two years) and have uploaded a single story and a continuous one that I intend on finishing by this winter's end.

If anyone would care to read the short story Fixed and the opening chapter of Finnesse (a title pun), I'd greatly appreciate some commentary. I think my writing has greatly improved with more education, and would now like to work on the story part of it. Criticism is especially appreciated, because while I wrote the beginning chapter of Finnesse in the span of an hour, non stop, it feels like it slowly plods on rereading.

I'd like to openly request some reviews, since F/F fiction is not so frequently trafficked as other genres. Thanks!

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