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Violet Rose Y.
Topic: Luck Is a Curse
Summary: Basically it's about a girl, Holly who is very popular for dating Patrick 'The King of highschool' but isn't happy with him. She ends up changing herself to fit his needs even when she knows good and well he cheats on her. As much as she wants to leave him behind and gather up the life she had pre-Patrick, there are rules that stop her from that. Rules that include, no one dumps Patrick Stone. You wait until your time is up, and he has lost interest in you. He dumps you, not the other way around.

That is until Cassandra, a girl with an evil charm of her own, moves in and cathes the eye of Patrick. She's stubborn and rufuses to be only 'Patrick Stone's girl friend of the month' like Holly and all of the others who have dated Patrick. It doesn't take her long to figure out the code: Date patrick Stone, and gain untouchable popularity. But, some guys just don't change. While Holly is trying to run from high scool royalty as fast as she can, Cassandra runs toward it. In the end, one will regret their move.

This is a story ihave started on here. I swear it's good and I really need some feedback on it! :)

#1 Jul 23rd 2007, 1:39pm
Eyeimaged
I'm not sure about this story. It doesn't sound very interesting. I have an idea. The boy Patrick breaks Holly's heart. Then Cassandra moves in next door. She turns out to be a witch and helps Holly exact revenge on Patrick and all his friends. Cassandra takes things to far and Holly has to stop her.
#2 Oct 09th 2007, 3:23pm
LovesickAuthor
I actually think this is a really good idea. It's really dramatic, but not too full of cliches that its just another high school story. It's something a little out of the ordinary, so I really think it's a great idea and you should continue it.
#3 Jan 08th, 10:43pm
Fractured Illusion
I'm not sure about this story. It doesn't sound very interesting. I have an idea. The boy Patrick breaks Holly's heart. Then Cassandra moves in next door. She turns out to be a witch and helps Holly exact revenge on Patrick and all his friends. Cassandra takes things to far and Holly has to stop her.

How is that any better? :/ It's just the usual witch-revenge formula which equals boring.

I think the plot sounds interesting enough.

#4 Mar 09th, 8:04am

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