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| Astarayl |
Author has written 41 stories for Life, General, Friendship, Love, and Nature. Blue-black backed sparrows, they fly so low.. | |||||||
1. Rope Burn reviewsThoughts on a loss, on a person, and attached regrets. Constructive criticisms appreciated.Complete - Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 296 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 11-10-07 - Published: 11-10-072. Chopin Ballade, No 2My second piece of musicpoetry, written 2 and a half years after the first, while playing Chopin. The measured sins pitch, moan, cry out deceptively. Constructive criticisms, please.Complete - Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 118 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 7-30-07 - Published: 7-30-073. Stars Lined UpFrustration with a situation finds a vent in moonless sky, full of stars. Constructive criticisms welcomed.Complete - Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - Romance/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 129 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 1-6-07 - Published: 1-6-074. Berries reviewsI realize when the cereal's gone, we're close to a new beginning. We sought prophecies in the berrystained milk residue.. con. crit. pleaseComplete - Friendship - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 109 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 12-23-06 - Published: 12-23-065. Seven Quarters the ScapegoatLove taps and stricken wishes bring to me down blanketlike comfort, but it’s a touch queasy. For like a rebellious nudge in the side, instinct worries. Let’s not run the same halfmile. Constructive criticisms please.Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - Drama/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 110 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 12-9-06 - Published: 12-9-066. Afterthought reviewsAnd the steps to our ambivalence never failed Did we tread cautiously, leaving tracks on the fire escape? It all happened a while back, strange that I should feel like looking back on it now. [con. crit. appreciated]Complete - Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - Drama/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 78 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 10-24-06 - Published: 10-24-067. Come Autumn reviewsFall makes me feel a certain way.. "here we are again / seasonal nostalgia / advent of the new epidemic" .. I haven't written in a while. This was strange.Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 100 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 9-30-06 - Published: 9-30-068. Lysander of the Cacophony reviewsLysander wants freedom from the tumult and the noise; he's tired of hearing- he wants to be deaf. "Withering hi-hat and drums exhaust hearing.. He wants out, he wants the quick way out.."General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Drama/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 139 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 5-11-06 - Published: 5-11-069. spider's seeking reviewslost in thought, a spider crawled down, and I came to a startling realization. I attempted to write this in haiku-like form.. {con. crit. please}General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 41 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 3-22-06 - Published: 3-22-0610. curbside reflection reviewssitting there, wishing for rain. tried something new- one big run-on of a sentence. "..imaginary devils let you know when the world’s gone and left you oh-so-alone.." [con. crit. much appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 73 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 3-19-06 - Published: 3-19-0611. Yestreen Story » reviewsSix parts of yesterday evening. The story of yestreen. [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 6 - Words: 420 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 3-14-06 - Published: 3-14-0612. Desperate Application reviewsI want some closure, some reason for the way you're acting towards me. "Your utter, blatant contempt twists, crimping- edges of a porcelain dish-..." {con. crit. please}Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - Angst/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 205 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 3-14-06 - Published: 3-14-0613. Promise of Fake Spring reviews"Promised springtime, I received- still- only winter.." {con. crit. appreciated}Love - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 169 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 2-26-06 - Published: 2-26-0614. Ignorant Refusal reviewsI refuse to believe anything in this moment. ... "As struggling for clearer understandings.. Overtook us and we felt.. I asked wonderful, imaginary questions, so curious.." [con. crit. please]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 89 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 2-13-06 - Published: 2-13-0615. One Time Afraid Today reviewsThe most painful fear is when you're afraid for someone you care for. When they're going to do something stupid and you are helpless to stop them. [con. crit. please]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 110 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 2-2-06 - Published: 2-2-0616. Joyride from Procrastination reviewsHow I despise my bad habit of procrastination. There are things I need to do. "Shake down this wild mess of debilitated time, and forget that it existed.. Reform this frightened, dispossessed sense of structure, sense of passing, movement, pace.." [con. cLife - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 126 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 1-10-06 - Published: 1-10-0617. Snowball reviewsShe threw a snowball of dead dreams into the lake. "As ashen blue waves hit hard, battering hopes of yesterday.. Her eyes saw, her skin felt, as the icy spray littered the snow, once so white.." [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 150 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 12-11-05 - Published: 12-11-0518. Nightingale reviews"So even if scissors left to die were placed in the nest of a nightingale.. they would be treasured." {con. crit. appreciated}Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 98 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 10-30-05 - Published: 10-30-0519. Intensity reviewsIt's impossibly hard to describe- that feeling within the eye contact.. it's intense and powerful, but not overwhelming.. "A lift of joyful bliss, euphoric mania.." {con. crit. appreciated}General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 182 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 10-9-05 - Published: 10-9-0520. Rapid Hope Lapse reviewsLapse. "Stolen laughter has a bitter feeling..." "Breathing out only works if you’re still breathing, It’s confusing to scream and have it feel like exhaling" [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 128 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 10-2-05 - Published: 10-2-0521. Beijing Thunderstorm reviewsWhile I was in Beijing, this beautiful thunderstorm hit.. "Sirens soar drunkenly, mingling with the eternal tapping of rain.." [con. crit. appreciated]Nature - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 146 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 10-2-05 - Published: 10-2-0522. Dancer reviewsShe dances, but she's unsure. "She dances, making pirouettes in the sand.." [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 84 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 10-2-05 - Published: 10-2-0523. Missed Opportunity reviewsI try so hard to speak those words, but somehow I can't. "There goes another missed opportunity." -con. crit. appreciatedGeneral - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 133 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 9-29-05 - Published: 9-29-0524. Shi Hai Sea of Stones reviewsI went to this 'tourist attraction' expecting just a bunch of rocks.. but the Shi Hai was somehow more awe-inspiring than that... [con. crit. appreciated]General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 76 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 9-28-05 - Published: 9-28-0525. Colors reviewsI want to know what color you really are. "You’ve hidden yourself in such a way, mixing your colors, painting your feathers.. so your honest self can go and fly away…" [con. crit appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 112 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-28-05 - Published: 9-28-0526. Sky Goddess reviewsClouds don't form shapes, they form goddesses. "Those wings she has- of silver-lined clouds have feathers of the finest cumulus silk.." [con. crit. appreciated]Nature - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 100 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-28-05 - Published: 9-28-0527. Wonderment reviewsThis sunrise is the essence of hope and new beginnings; of wonderment. "Every day is a new one; wonderment prevailing" [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 207 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-29-05 - Published: 8-29-0528. Realizations reviewsSometimes we all realize things too late... "You weren’t the only one with problems for fixing.." [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 334 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 8-6-05 - Published: 8-6-0529. All the While reviews"We can only just try to keep an eye on our castle in the sky. Are you dizzy? ‘Cause it’s spinning.." [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 174 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 7-28-05 - Published: 7-28-0530. Mistrusted reviewsThis frustrates me.. how people will conform and then lie to easily to belong.. "They are liars at ease.." - [con. crit. please]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 160 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 7-27-05 - Published: 7-27-0531. For Rain reviewsI just came in from the rain.. rollerblading. This was written with a minimum of editing- pure raw feeling. An ode to rain and being alive. (con. crit welcomed)Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 322 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 7-26-05 - Published: 7-26-0532. Pretty Words reviewsSometimes pretty words just aren't enough, you should have tried harder.. [con. crit. encouraged]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 161 - Reviews: 5 - Updated: 7-20-05 - Published: 7-20-0533. Would I? reviews"Could I gather together enough strength to rid myself of perception- which had slowly become distortion- and life.." [con. crit. appreciated]Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 276 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 6-21-05 - Published: 6-21-0534. Only Until the Theme Comes reviewsA description/celebration of the first seven minutes of Tchaikovsky's Violin Concerto in D- it's beautiful, if you can, listen to it. [con. crit. much appreciated]General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 183 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 6-18-05 - Published: 6-18-0535. Hate's Anniversary reviews"And this is my ode- my celebration of hate's anniversary" - a kind of sarcastic looking back on a situation... con. crit. much appreciatedLove - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 98 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 6-13-05 - Published: 6-13-0536. Jar of Love reviews"I put my love in a glass jar of the clearest blue, On the shelf- right beside your photograph" - a poem about my jar of love; con. crit. appreciatedLove - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 147 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 6-13-05 - Published: 6-13-0537. Woodwork reviewsDon't you sometimes wish that life had an eraser? Maybe things wouldn't have turned out this way.. (con. crit. please)Friendship - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 207 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 3-16-05 - Published: 3-16-0538. Salt Dance reviewsA poem about yesterday's snow..General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 73 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 3-15-05 - Published: 3-15-0539. Journey reviewsThe ultimate destination.. [con. crit plz]General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 277 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 1-28-05 - Published: 1-28-05
