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Author has written 11 stories for General, Friendship, and Life. DISCLAIMER: I HAVE THE TENDENCY TO RAMBLE! Lindsay-15-female-libra Some of my poems sound very dark. I believe myself to be a generally optimistic person and when I don't feel that way that is when I write. I usually don't write when I'm really happy, only really sad. So I don't want anyone getting the idea that I'm this miserable, moping person. Lol. I accept criticism, but it needs a reason. It's ok if you don't like it of course, I want to hear how I can improve because it does no one good to just say that something is awful. And if so could you tell me which line(s) need work? ha, I sound like an English teacher...And if I have any spelling or grammar errors let me know too! :) .......... , . - . - , _ , ....... I cannot cut and paste regular pictures in here, but here are some links to the pictures that are in my poems: This was at the top of my poem SPINNING: http://www.fotosearch.com/IMG311/01031020/ And this one was on the bottom (it's the third picture of the lighthouse): http://www.azfotos.com/countries_worldwide/europe/denmark/denmark.htm This was at the bottom of SHADOWS: http://www.dennisflood.com/photos/gallery/sausage_lake/large/sausage_lake_3-Shadows.jpg And this is one of my favorite pictures that was under ALTERED PERCEPTION: http://images.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://ew2.lysator.liu.se/pic/art/a/d/adorelai/rose.jpg&imgrefurl=http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/art/a/d/adorelai/rose.jpg.html&h=534&w=400&sz=24&tbnid=sW1xe9EOMWgJ:&tbnh=128&tbnw=96&prev=/images3Fq3Dpurple2Brose26hl3Den26lr3D&oi=imagesr&start=1 My writing style does not rhyme, but I appreciate and admire those who do, because mine never comes out that way. My poems always come out as long strings of emotion and sometimes I have to habit to repeat things with synonyms, so sorry if I do that. My poems do not have a whole lot of structure as you can see by the lack of periods, but as a reviewer of SHADOWS was saying 'Poetry isn't about structure, it's about feeling.' My favorite bands are My Chemical Romance and Badly Drawn Boy, rather opposites which I find funny. Badly Drawn Boy is a nice English band. They did the music for About A Boy with Hugh Grant. | |||||||
1. Drifters reviewsSimple metaphor of when people drift apart (Actually tried to rhyme this time, may be a bit rough, Correct me in my flow.)Friendship - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 246 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 5-1-06 - Published: 5-1-062. Helpless to Your Suffering reviewsYou're so far away, out of my grasp. Without help. (Short, R&R please)Friendship - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 95 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 3-31-06 - Published: 3-31-063. Bored of Life reviews" 'Live in the present," but what if the present isn't good enough' short and concise poem (odd for me! lol)Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 220 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 12-2-05 - Published: 12-2-054. TATTOO reviewsSick with bitter disgust, monotony, and loathing. It grinds into your skin like a tattoo.Life - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 124 - Reviews: 8 - Updated: 9-6-05 - Published: 9-6-055. I'M READY TO MOVE ON reviewsTo begin with a fresh outlook on lifeLife - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 149 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 9-4-05 - Published: 9-4-056. I WISH I COULD TELL YOU reviewsStarts off as about my mother, finishes about my friends. 'When I hurt inside and am acting like a bitch, that’s just because it hurts inside because of what happened last night and how I can’t tell you'Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 557 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-2-05 - Published: 9-2-057. IF ONLY reviewsIs the suffering of being right worth being miserable?General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 187 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 8-31-05 - Published: 8-31-058. I STILL WANT YOU reviewsThe horror of it burns inside like a furnace that aches my bones and soul, but I still want you.Friendship - Fiction Rated: K - English - General/Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 264 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 8-22-05 - Published: 8-22-059. ALTERED PERCEPTION reviewsI want to rip the impermeable veil from your eyes to reveal your splendor.Friendship - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 105 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-12-05 - Published: 8-12-05
