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Author has written 41 stories for Love, General, Politics, Life, War, Religion, Friendship, Spiritual, and General. I created this page or whatever it is to gather advice for my poetry. I'm 16 years old and have been writing poetry for about six months now. I'd appriciate any sort of advice you can give me on my writing, especially since I have never learned anything about poetry, and just write what comes to me. "The real universe is always one step beyond logic" -Frank Herbert "In vain shall a poet seek the mother of the songswithin his heart." -Khalil Gibran "Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky. We fell them down and turn them into paper that we may record our emptiness." -Khalil Gibran "But as, in ethics, evil is a consequence of good, so, in fact, out of joy is sorrow born. Either the memory of past bliss is the anguish of today, or the agonies which have their origin in the ecstasies which might have been." -Edgar Allen Poe | |||||||
1. The Bloody Dollar reviewsA story about the dangers of extreme capitalism.Complete - General - Fiction Rated: T - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 476 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 12-5-06 - Published: 12-5-062. ToxicityNAComplete - Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 48 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 11-28-06 - Published: 11-28-063. Old Genocide reviewsAnother poem about the Rwandan Genocide. Done as an assignment English, it had to be in the same format as the poem Old Ironsides. CRITICAL REVIEWS are welcome, seeing as this is for a large grade...Life - Fiction Rated: T - English - Tragedy/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 103 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 10-21-06 - Published: 10-21-064. Whiteout reviewsA poem about the Rwandan Genocide.Complete - War - Fiction Rated: K - English - Tragedy/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 36 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 10-21-06 - Published: 10-21-065. Redemption? reviewsR&R, please.Complete - Religion - Fiction Rated: K - English - Spiritual/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 42 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 10-21-06 - Published: 10-21-066. Cold Reality reviewsIgnorance is bliss. Please R&R.Love - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 47 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 10-11-06 - Published: 10-11-067. King of FoolsKind of about how people follow whoever is willing to lead them.Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 51 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 10-11-06 - Published: 10-11-068. Romance reviewsA poem about love. Please R&RLove - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 53 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 10-11-06 - Published: 10-11-069. Elegant reviewsAbout a girl who sells herself to those she cannot have, and plays the ones who would bring her happiness. Kudos, Jamie.Love - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 34 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 10-8-06 - Published: 10-8-0610. The Benevolent reviewsSomewhat inspired by a visit to Tiananmen Square.Politics - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 42 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 10-4-06 - Published: 10-4-0611. Repungent Reality reviewsWhen deep down you know something's true, but the truth still hits you like a brick. I know this poem's crap, but it was just something I needed to get out.Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 51 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-30-06 - Published: 9-30-0612. Golden Amber reviewsA poem about golden amber eyes.Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 46 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 9-27-06 - Published: 9-27-0613. The Broken Prophet reviewsThis is a sister story to "The Bloody Crux". This one was much harder though, since I know little to nothing about life in the Middle East... Ah well, ignorance is a curable disease. R&R, please.Spiritual - Fiction Rated: T - English - Spiritual/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 415 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-21-06 - Published: 9-21-0614. The Bloody Crux reviewsOkay, this is my first foray into the world of story writing. Please let me know what you think, and I'd greatly appriciate any advice, flames or otherwise.Spiritual - Fiction Rated: T - English - Spiritual/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 308 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-21-06 - Published: 9-20-0615. Paper Skin reviewsAbout how people try to hide their falsehoods and shortcomings in pretty packaging.Religion - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 38 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-19-06 - Published: 9-19-0616. Beautiful Darkness reviewsThis poem is for all you people out there who wonder how you'll ever make it. Just know our sins will make us stronger.Religion - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry/Spiritual - Chapters: 1 - Words: 66 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 9-12-06 - Published: 9-12-0617. Lifeless Emotive reviewsWhat do you become when you can't feel anymore? Well, other then the target of other's pity...Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 62 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 9-10-06 - Published: 9-10-0618. March Ignorant reviewsMarch ignorant, or don't march at all... How can one proclaim enlightenment, yet blindly follow? Warning: Not for religious extremists.Religion - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 48 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-9-06 - Published: 9-9-0619. ObeisanceA poem about forced conformity, I suppose.Politics - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 85 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 9-9-06 - Published: 9-9-0620. Void reviewsLife - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 36 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 9-8-06 - Published: 9-8-0621. Sacrifice reviewsWhen you condemn your soul for your loved one's happiness.Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 52 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-3-06 - Published: 9-3-0622. Thrice Damned reviews1+1+1= hateLove - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 50 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 9-3-06 - Published: 9-3-0623. Scar Tissue reviewsPretty self-explanatory.Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 24 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-3-06 - Published: 9-3-0624. Crucible reviewsA poem for anyone who's ever been in love with a person, but unable to express their feelings.Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 41 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 9-3-06 - Published: 9-3-0625. The Lord of the Dance reviewsAbout how Christians have had a tendancy throughout history to persecute those who are even mildly different.Religion - Fiction Rated: T - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 54 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-29-06 - Published: 8-29-0626. Cracked reviewsLife - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 58 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-29-06 - Published: 8-29-0627. Tripartite Unanimity reviewsJust to clear it up, Tripartite Unanimity basically means a union of three seperate parts. A seeming contradiction. Or is it?Religion - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 49 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-24-06 - Published: 8-24-0628. Forgotten reviewsFor anyone whose ever felt left behind.Friendship - Fiction Rated: K - English - Poetry - Chapters: 1 - Words: 42 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 8-24-06 - Published: 8-24-0629. Halo reviewsA poem dedicted to the old men who use the young men and women of their countries to fight their battles.War - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 76 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-24-06 - Published: 8-24-0630. GreedA poem about the driving force in people's lives.Religion - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 32 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 8-23-06 - Published: 8-23-0631. Sheperd of Men reviewsThis poem has two meanings. One is about humanity's fear of death. The other I'll leave to you to discover.Religion - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 35 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-22-06 - Published: 8-22-0632. A Perfect Circle reviewsA poem about domestic abuse.Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Poetry/Tragedy - Chapters: 1 - Words: 52 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-22-06 - Published: 8-22-0633. The Garbage ManA somewhat rotten poem.Life - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst/Horror - Chapters: 1 - Words: 48 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 8-16-06 - Published: 8-16-0634. Holistic Incarceration reviewsA poem about the most powerful prison the human mind can create.Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 43 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-15-06 - Published: 8-15-0635. Brothers in Arms reviewsThis poem is not meant to offend any soldiers or those who might associate with them. It's just my opinion.War - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 61 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-13-06 - Published: 8-13-0636. Incongruent Existence reviewsA poem about the seemingly inconsistent truths of life.Life - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 72 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-13-06 - Published: 8-13-0637. Dual Desires reviewsThis poem's about the dangers of too much free thought... But who would want it any other way?Life - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 65 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-12-06 - Published: 8-12-0638. Choices of Compulsion reviewsThis is a poem about people who claim free will but in reality have none.Politics - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 91 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-12-06 - Published: 8-12-0639. Iron Convention reviewsThis poem is aimed at politicians and the games they play. And of course, the people who play along...Politics - Fiction Rated: T - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 76 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-8-06 - Published: 8-8-0640. Irony reviewsI don't really like this poem at all. It was a school assignment, which might have something to do with it. But everyone I've talked to has said it's really good, so that's why I posted it. if you can figure out what I'm talking about, you get a gold starGeneral - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 297 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-7-06 - Published: 8-7-0641. Vision of Perfection reviewsThis poem is about that one person that everyone seems to look for but can never seem to find.Love - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 108 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-7-06 - Published: 8-7-06
