BETA-READING

Hello all~! I am looking for work that I can beta-read. I believe myself to be an amazing editor and reviser, and can certainly catch many an error. I excel in locating and helping with grammatical errors and awkward sentences, and am strong in helping with plot and style. Weakness include leniency in allowing a free-form story flow and...well, you get the point. I am also sometimes whimsical. In any case, I'm a strong beta-reader—PICK ME~!

What has better control features than FictionPress, allows me to put "shota-kun" in the web-address, and has a really lame copyright notice? MY WEBSITE! It is currently hosting my novel, chapters one through three of which are delivered in a customizeable format. Enjoy as you read in HTML, Microsoft Office Word, or PDF format! Hai:

http://www.freewebs.com/shota-kun/

(NOTE): This author recommends that, when visiting SHOTA-kun™, you have Mozilla Firefox 3.0 installed, with an appropriate ad-blocking program. Because it is hosted freely, it is bombarded with advertisements, and I really don't think you want a really obnoxious, blinking advertisement adorning your screen.

Name: Bradly
Gender: non-existent (genderless or androgynous)
Sex: male
Orientation: non-heterosexual
Body type: slender; slim
My type: emos! —Drool—
Date of Birth: Wednesday, 07 July 1993
Height: five feet and seven inches
Hair: auburn, with brown underneath
Eyes: copper
Writing style: ...whimsical? Depressively whimsical?
Favourite food: pizza =D
Favourite depression-killer: CHOCOLATE, with ice cream as a very close second
Favourite colour: blue
Favourite ice cream flavour: ...vanilla?
Favourite pronoun: thou
Favourite verb: sketchify
Favourite genre of fiction: science fiction
Favourite genre of fanfiction: "The Covenant", slashed ReidxTyler

Bradly gives his opinion on the on-line facilitation of romance.

Is it not sad that we have begun to replace "love" with "on-line love"? Simply-put, teenagers are using the Internet as a way to go ahead and meet each other. I've friends who actually call themselves a couple without ever meeting face-to-face. In my opinion, there is some thought that needs to be done. Whilst I will not say that it is completely wrong, I will say that the Internet's helping needs to be watched. One of the problems is the use of the word "love" without a face-to-face meet, without years of knowledge, without exploring every crevice of the other's mind. What we must know is that, people, Internet dating can be disaterous. Fall in "love" with somebody whom you can't see and you're basically screwed. Is it alright to use the Internet to meet people offline with whom you can then have a relationship? Absolutely. But the idea of having relationships completely over the web is just a little far-fetched, don't you think? It's just silly for two people to go ahead and think they know each other when, in truth, no, they do not. It needs to be taken carefully, and I do not recommend it.

Bradly gives his opinion on boys.

Ergh. Interesting time of the morning to go on this rant, I s'pose. Now, I'm going to go ahead and use the word "stupid" throughout this fourth-rant; however, the thing to which that word actually refers is a mix of a lot of negative qualities. In fact, I guess the word "stupid" is what I use to sum-up my feelings in this rant. Basically, boys are all-around not bad, though they do have several quirks and interesting detractions. For example, they lack sensativity. Not all of them, mind you; however, many of them are simply incapable of understanding certiain situations.

I say, "Jeff's an asshole."

Trent says, "Then quit talking to him?"

I say, "It's not that simple. It's like, 'Quit talking with Dylan.' It doesn't work like that." Perhaps you all understand. In addition to being as asshole himself, Jeff would probably not understand the concept of talking with somebody dispite a staunch negative quality. Just because Jeff is not nice does not mean I will quit liking him. Not to mention, boys just seem to be stupid in the realm of making things seem all better. For some reason, boys seem to know what's up, when somebody is hurt emotionally, but cannot see the plain-as-day way to go ahead and avoid or even remedy it. If you don't like like somebody, USE THE PHRASE, "I'm not interested." Playing a game of, "No, no, I like you, it's just EXCUSE>" is not FUN.

In ADDITION, have you ever found a male that will understand simple concepts? It's like, all the females in the world will be able to understand the idea of running into perfume so it doesn't clump, or of not saying this and that because it's hurtful and NOT just "a joke", but MALES cannot get it. It pisses me off...a lot.

AND the things that they say are just SO out there. It's like, okay, I showed a particular boy whom I like and who hurt me a lot the poems he inspired. They were MAJORLY angsty. All he says is, "Why do I have a feeling I inspired one or two?" BECAUSE YOU DID YOU DID YOU DID. Gaah. And, saying that means you recognize the hurt but are unwilling to do anything about it, except to blatantly STATE that you recognize the hurt. —Smashes face into wall—

Perhaps they are bearable, though. I mean, they can sometimes be really nice and cute. When they do have their moments, and when you can see what they're actually thinking, well, I think those times make it all worth it. —Sigh— Whatever.~

Hello, my name is Bradly!~ I'm amazing...or at least, that is what I tell myself to go to sleep at night. Though Ariel will tell you that I'm quite good, I'm not, and I hope that if you read my things, you will perhaps be a little kind to me. If anything, I want to keep my pride and dignity...in some fashion...somehow.

I am a Junior in high school. See, that means that I'm a ninth-grader, because my school (Phillips Academy) is only a little whack. My school assigns more work than your high school, trust me, there is absolutely no arguing this point. I get about three to five hours of sleep per night, and have vury little time to spend on any writing during the school year; however, as you can tell from my FictionPress site, I'm getting along nicely this summer.

I love biology—in my class, which is with the most difficult teacher in the biology department, I received the highest quiz average and an extremely high grade. Thus, next year, I will take AP chemistry. Plus, I'm relatively good with Spanish, so I'm taking accelerated Spanish next year. Yea, I'm a smart cookie. =D

My mother tells me that my writing is "fucking deep" and my grandmother tells me that it's "quite good". "Dreams" is the title of the novel on which I am currently working. The first few chapters are posted below for your reading pleasure, or pain, you be the judge.

At the moment, I seem to be more interested in poetry and Kingdom Hearts than writing! I've hit a bit of a block, but I swear, chapter four will focus on the relationship Mike and Nick previously had, on Nick's parents, and a bit on "The Game"—you will get to see first hand what it is doing to Renner (the name of the high school and of the town).

Hmm...something that came to mind is the fact that this setting is not so definite. See, this is a small town (I tried to drop those clues, you damned lazy readers) that works with traditional rules. Whilst there are a few businesses and such, as well as a rather large high school, any person who makes a lot of money goes to the capitol to do so. There is a clinic, but it doesn't have a very large ER capacity. No, they do not speak with Western accents; they speak with General American. Do some reading: you may get some clue as to where Renner is, and perhaps even on which capitol it relies (there are only fifty-one of them!).

Okay, random insertion, but REVIEW! Dude, apparently, I've had seven differnet visitors to the first chapter of "Dreams", and someone even favourite'd it, but there are no new reviews! Goddamnit—I've no clue what I'm doing unless you tell me where I fall. Or what I'm doing right. Or, y'know what? You could even start a rant about popcorn in your review, as long as you mentioned anything about the story! THAR. I GAVE YOU PERMISSION.

~Bradly~
P.S. – If you think Nick is cute, wait until you meet Mike~! You will absolutely love that child. No, not as much as Nick loves him, but definitely close. Oh, and I like Lexis, though my friend Margot doesn't. If you ever review, please make a comment on her? Pretty please?
P.P.S. – Jesse Matheson is absolutely amazing. When you find a blonde, emo Australian who is hotter than he, you come to me.Yea...have a nice day with thoughts of him in your mind...please, no drool.

Author's Note: Because these contribute to word-count lies on the site, I will put all of my Author's Notes from "Dreams" HUR. If you didn't read my page because you don't like me, well, that's not my fault. So, Nick is absolutely cute. That blondie is one of my favourie creations...EVER! Though, Lexis is the greatest. Just...there is absolutely NO compare. Oh, I do apologize if there seems to be sexual tension between Nick and Lexis...could that be intended? Teehee~. Please have fun reading.
Author's Second Note: I tend to use British spelling conventions in my writing, which is why it may seem to be a bit..."fancy-schmancy" sounding. I apologize to those who don't like the stylistic injection "whilst" or the serial comma. Please attempt to bear through it with me?
Author's Third Note: Hmm...chapter three seems a bit rushed. I'm glad that we finally got to introduce the game! And something that's important to me is keeping the chapters relatively the same length, and I'm definitely accomplishing that at the moment. Feel proud of me! I absolutely LOVE the way in which Lêará was presented...along with Daniel. Does anybody else get the feeling that she's a neglectful bastard who pulled in her husband? Wait until you learn where "Smote" came from. Am I evil? :3 Yea...Seggy-kun told me that my story is extremely depressing...as did another reviewer...I think I like it that way at the moment. It's like...a great way to put angst in there. Trust me, though: come the second half of Book I, you will all get to see some great moments.

Things slated for revision:

Lexis' rant — When she rants to Chief Krink, she is speaking too analytically and conveniently for the story.
Nick's rant — When Nick speaks at the end of Chapter One, he is not making much sense.
The Journal Entry — At the beginning of Chapter Two, the journal entry is too analytical.

A special note on Chief Krink's seeming intimidation of Nick:

This is completely intended. I do not care how unrealistic it seems: it is CRUCIAL to the plot and will therefore remain there. I do not care how much you protest and dislike how it seems a seventy-five-year-old cop would never be scared of a sixteen-year-old kid; this will make sense come Book II. Just shush-up.

Dates: A total of thirty chapters are deadlined for Thursday, 25 December 2008 by 11:59:59 p.m. Revisions of all thirty chapters are slated to go up by Thursday, 01 January 2009 by 11:59:59 p.m. Thanks to all those who read, and I hope I can be of quick service to you and to myself.