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Author has written 61 stories for General, Song, and General. I'm a high school senior who's trying to decide whether she should or should not pursue writing. I'd love any and all constructive criticism! | |||||||||
1. Moving Metaphors reviews"I heard they just broke up yesterday." "I heard they got back together." "Can we stop talking in metaphor?" (slash.m.m)General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 834 - Reviews: 9 - Updated: 5-5-03 - Published: 5-5-032. Greener Grounds, Bluer Skies reviewsDon't be scared 'cause you're not something I'm willing to lose. I bet you find it in the last place you look. (slash, guys)General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,818 - Reviews: 6 - Updated: 5-3-03 - Published: 5-3-033. Snowflakes reviewsAll snowflakes are special and individual--two third-grade boys forge a "best-friends-forever" bond when all their classmates shun them, and carry out their promise.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 623 - Reviews: 6 - Updated: 12-2-02 - Published: 12-2-024. Falling out of Love at This Volume reviews"Let me turn my amps way up, so you can hear nothing"...a romance gone terribly sour, with a heartwrenching final goodbye.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 488 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 12-1-02 - Published: 12-1-025. A Great Guitar Player reviewsWhat does it take to make a great guitar player? A younger brother witnesses his big brother's breakdown.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,814 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 11-20-02 - Published: 11-20-026. balance reviewsA work in progress. A close friendship between two kids who are "through being cool" grows from a sandbox.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 933 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 11-13-02 - Published: 11-13-027. star J reviewsOld friends on a riverbed, drawing in the sand. And truth is sometimes harder to hear than a pleasant lie.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 928 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 11-13-02 - Published: 11-13-028. Becoming One Anything reviews"Are they sleeping?" Two boarding-school boys talk late in the night. Slash.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,246 - Reviews: 10 - Updated: 11-13-02 - Published: 11-13-029. Elasticity reviewsAs if they're bound by a cosmis rubber band, she bounces back every time she tries to leave: a tale of codependency.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,160 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-14-02 - Published: 8-14-0210. Piano Talk reviewsDuring a rendezvous with a baby grand, young cousins discuss their (mostly crazy) family members and make an ingenue's promise.General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 718 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-12-02 - Published: 8-12-0211. Think (stop) reviewsShe is pieces; a woman wants to forget it all, and she hopes it will be different, because she doesn't want to be pieces. She wants to be whole.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,072 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 3-10-02 - Published: 3-10-0212. Power of the Art reviewsA girl gets dared to write a poem. She didn't think anyone would actually read it, but hey-who argues a happy ending?General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 733 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 2-18-02 - Published: 2-18-0213. Simple Beliefs reviewsTwo guys and a girl live together. One guy and the girl have a few conversations in the wake of the other guy's decision to move out.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,227 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 2-9-02 - Published: 2-9-0214. Step Two: ArrivalOf best friends, boy and girl, New York, and a cross-country move. Everyone's smiling.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,533 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 1-29-02 - Published: 1-29-0215. Seven Days of Deadly Sins reviewsOf dinners and beaches, car rides and hash browns: she could do better and he could do worse but why bother?General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,220 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 1-16-02 - Published: 1-16-0216. Blue Eyes on a Snow-Cloud Canvas reviewsA beginning mixed in with an ending mixed in with a lost chance that really wasn't lost at all-or a simple love story about a reconnection.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,621 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 1-15-02 - Published: 1-15-0217. American Girl reviewsLiberties are taken with a Tom Petty song and a girl, raised on promises, waits patiently for someone to fulfill his.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 572 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 12-28-01 - Published: 12-28-0118. Liberties reviewsA man finds himself compelled to participate in a strange ritual every night as his best friend looks on and laments as his friend ruins his life.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Drama/Mystery - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,269 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 12-18-01 - Published: 12-18-0119. Gradual Combustion reviewsShe was a flame and I was just a moth that happened to chance its way within her path over and over again and then move away quickly before being burned.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,345 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 12-7-01 - Published: 12-7-0120. Imagination reviewsWhat comes of midnight of the beach: moonlight, questions, and extended vocabularies.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 840 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 12-3-01 - Published: 12-3-0121. Winter Wonderland reviewsA boy remembers one AM in the dark and the snow many years ago, and, in remembering that, remembers his first kiss.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,359 - Reviews: 14 - Updated: 12-1-01 - Published: 12-1-0122. Over the Rainbow reviewsCute. A high-school production of "The Wizard of Oz" impresses the audience-and awakens one boy's particular feelings for Dorothy..General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,238 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 12-1-01 - Published: 12-1-0123. Cloud Party reviewsFuzzy pajamas and ice cream sundaes reignite a forgotten romance.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 967 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 11-11-01 - Published: 11-11-0124. Flying Saucers reviewsSix brothers lose a Frisbee, learn the hard way that mom's good china isn't the best substitute, and grow up more than they realize.General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,031 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 11-11-01 - Published: 11-11-0125. Hit or Miss reviews"Have I waited too long/Have I found that someone?"General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 3,074 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 11-10-01 - Published: 11-10-0126. Dedication reviewsA guy finds a dedication to him from his best friend. Very fluffy.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,725 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 11-10-01 - Published: 11-10-0127. summer fading reviewsour own pyrotechnical acrobatics...General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 52 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 11-10-01 - Published: 11-10-0128. Volume reviewsA moment of complete, perfect happiness.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,223 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 11-10-01 - Published: 11-10-0129. Suspension reviewsIt doesn't seem like it's all going to be okay, and she could use a little morale, here.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 494 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 11-3-01 - Published: 11-3-0130. ClosureNow there's a ring and he's lost her again.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 954 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 11-3-01 - Published: 11-3-0131. Last Chance reviewsI may not always know you, but I know I'll always love you.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 653 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 11-3-01 - Published: 11-3-0132. luminescence reviewsyou gave me cloudless blue skies with the touch of a handGeneral - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 50 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 11-3-01 - Published: 11-3-0133. words reviewshis words are velvet; they are soft to the touchGeneral - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 45 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 11-3-01 - Published: 11-3-0134. rust reviewsis it cold in here...General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 44 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 11-3-01 - Published: 11-3-0135. BrotherhoodIt was different shades, different styles, different textures, but all of them had red hair, and they were undeniably brothers.General - Fiction Rated: K - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 732 - Reviews: 0 - Updated: 10-6-01 - Published: 10-6-0136. Lipstick reviewsI'm still standing, in the wake of everything, but I don't know if I should wear the lipstick.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,411 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 9-1-01 - Published: 9-1-0137. Vanilla Ice reviews"Don't break my heart again in the dairy aisle, Clarice." About the bonds of love and friendship and what it takes to break these bonds.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 6,287 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 8-27-01 - Published: 8-27-0138. Foreign Tongues reviewsThe best I can offer you is something that is painful and not a lie.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,344 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-26-01 - Published: 8-26-0139. Speed reviewsI sing with my eyes closed so I can't look at her.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,331 - Reviews: 6 - Updated: 8-26-01 - Published: 8-26-0140. Parallel reviews"See, Scotty, the thing is, you gotta savor them."General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,682 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 8-24-01 - Published: 8-24-0141. Full Tank reviewsIce cream, gas money, and friendship: she's not as underappreciated as she thinks, sometimes.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,367 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 8-24-01 - Published: 8-24-0142. Sparkle and Fade reviewsIt was charmed and glamorized, but they had to get out of there, and they had to do it together.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,216 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 8-24-01 - Published: 8-24-0143. Tailspin reviewsHe's falling, been falling, but can she keep catching him?General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 988 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 8-24-01 - Published: 8-24-0144. Lightweight reviewsLittle Lily Reider, through the eyes of a friend, isn't as weak as she seems.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,077 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 7-23-01 - Published: 7-23-0145. Suboral reviewsThe things left unsaid between two best friends come out against their will on the last night they'll see each other before leaving for college.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,657 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 7-8-01 - Published: 7-8-0146. Sun Spots reviewsTwo people just can't seem to go on without one another; codependence never seemed so sweet.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 452 - Reviews: 6 - Updated: 7-8-01 - Published: 7-8-0147. Inconspicuous reviews"The fastest way to succeed is to look as if you're playing by somebody else's rules, while quietly playing by your own." -Michael KondaGeneral - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General - Chapters: 1 - Words: 386 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 7-8-01 - Published: 7-8-0148. Unscripted reviewsWhat happens when the script you've carefully written falls away and you can't remember your lines? All comments appreciated!!General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,497 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 6-16-01 - Published: 6-16-0149. Queen of the Jungle reviewsA short piece based on the word 'quest.' Very metaphorical.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 161 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 6-16-01 - Published: 6-16-0150. Cancerous reviewsTrapped, it will take everything to break free, but it is inarguably worth it.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 520 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 6-16-01 - Published: 6-16-0151. Dust to Dust reviewsSuicide Issues: What happens when you fail a friend?General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 846 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 5-30-01 - Published: 5-30-0152. Blank Slate reviews"Maybe she'd be the only one left in the end, but then again, she was practically dead already."General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 393 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 5-30-01 - Published: 5-30-0153. Misconstrued reviews"I don't think you like me much and I can't help but think think that I should care a lot more than I do."Song - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - General/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 283 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 5-13-01 - Published: 5-13-0154. Liberation reviewsLanguage. It's a little rough...about a friendship that has extended its welcome and implodes.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst/Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 378 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 5-13-01 - Published: 5-13-0155. Chills reviewsBetter living through denial.General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Angst/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 630 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 5-12-01 - Published: 5-12-0156. Partly Cloudy reviewsTrying to fly and failing, trying to fall and failing, someone watches a friend stuck in the middle and struggling to go one way or the other.General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Angst/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 530 - Reviews: 1 - Updated: 5-12-01 - Published: 5-12-0157. Fear of Flying reviews"Flying might be nice, but you've gotta land sometime."General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,036 - Reviews: 3 - Updated: 5-12-01 - Published: 5-12-0158. Surrender reviewsSometimes there's no stronger acid than one's own weakness.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,055 - Reviews: 4 - Updated: 4-28-01 - Published: 4-28-0159. Keep Away » reviewsA girl, a catalyst, and the long journey to a breakdown.General - Fiction Rated: T - English - Humor/Angst - Chapters: 3 - Words: 26,512 - Reviews: 5 - Updated: 4-16-01 - Published: 4-16-0160. X-Ray Vision reviewsRandom ramblings of a mental hospital patient.General - Fiction Rated: K+ - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 612 - Reviews: 9 - Updated: 4-16-01 - Published: 4-16-0161. Variations on a Theme reviewsThree stories with the same first paragraph, but distinctly different endings.General - Fiction Rated: K - English - Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,317 - Reviews: 2 - Updated: 4-16-01 - Published: 4-16-01
