mercurysmile
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since: 04-15-01, id: 59139
Author has written 61 stories for General, Song, and General.
I'm a high school senior who's trying to decide whether she should or should not pursue writing. I'd love any and all constructive criticism!

1. Moving Metaphors reviews
"I heard they just broke up yesterday." "I heard they got back together." "Can we stop talking in metaphor?" (slash.m.m)
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 915 - Reviews: 11 - Published: 5-5-03
2. Greener Grounds, Bluer Skies reviews
Don't be scared 'cause you're not something I'm willing to lose. I bet you find it in the last place you look. (slash, guys)
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,898 - Reviews: 7 - Published: 5-3-03
3. Snowflakes reviews
All snowflakes are special and individual-two third-grade boys forge a "best-friends-forever" bond when all their classmates shun them, and carry out their promise.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 718 - Reviews: 6 - Published: 12-2-02
4. Falling out of Love at This Volume reviews
"Let me turn my amps way up, so you can hear nothing"...a romance gone terribly sour, with a heartwrenching final goodbye.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 584 - Reviews: 4 - Published: 12-1-02
5. A Great Guitar Player reviews
What does it take to make a great guitar player? A younger brother witnesses his big brother's breakdown.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,114 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 11-20-02
6. balance reviews
A work in progress. A close friendship between two kids who are "through being cool" grows from a sandbox.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,091 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 11-13-02
7. star J reviews
Old friends on a riverbed, drawing in the sand. And truth is sometimes harder to hear than a pleasant lie.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,080 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 11-13-02
8. Becoming One Anything reviews
"Are they sleeping?" Two boarding-school boys talk late in the night. Slash.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,333 - Reviews: 11 - Published: 11-13-02
9. Elasticity reviews
As if they're bound by a cosmis rubber band, she bounces back every time she tries to leave: a tale of codependency.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,324 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8-14-02
10. Piano Talk reviews
During a rendezvous with a baby grand, young cousins discuss their (mostly crazy) family members and make an ingenue's promise.
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 908 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8-12-02
11. Think (stop) reviews
She is pieces; a woman wants to forget it all, and she hopes it will be different, because she doesn't want to be pieces. She wants to be whole.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,460 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 3-10-02
12. Power of the Art reviews
A girl gets dared to write a poem. She didn't think anyone would actually read it, but hey-who argues a happy ending?
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 977 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 2-18-02
13. Simple Beliefs reviews
Two guys and a girl live together. One guy and the girl have a few conversations in the wake of the other guy's decision to move out.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,557 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 2-9-02
14. Step Two: Arrival
Of best friends, boy and girl, New York, and a cross-country move. Everyone's smiling.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,850 - Published: 1-29-02
15. Seven Days of Deadly Sins reviews
Of dinners and beaches, car rides and hash browns: she could do better and he could do worse but why bother?
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,677 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 1-16-02
16. Blue Eyes on a Snow-Cloud Canvas reviews
A beginning mixed in with an ending mixed in with a lost chance that really wasn't lost at all-or a simple love story about a reconnection.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,857 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 1-15-02
17. American Girl reviews
Liberties are taken with a Tom Petty song and a girl, raised on promises, waits patiently for someone to fulfill his.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 605 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 12-28-01
18. Liberties reviews
A man finds himself compelled to participate in a strange ritual every night as his best friend looks on and laments as his friend ruins his life.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Drama/Mystery - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,506 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 12-18-01
19. Gradual Combustion reviews
She was a flame and I was just a moth that happened to chance its way within her path over and over again and then move away quickly before being burned.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,402 - Reviews: 4 - Published: 12-7-01
20. Imagination reviews
What comes of midnight of the beach: moonlight, questions, and extended vocabularies.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,050 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 12-3-01
21. Winter Wonderland reviews
A boy remembers one AM in the dark and the snow many years ago, and, in remembering that, remembers his first kiss.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,446 - Reviews: 14 - Published: 12-1-01
22. Over the Rainbow reviews
Cute. A high-school production of "The Wizard of Oz" impresses the audience-and awakens one boy's particular feelings for Dorothy..
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,397 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 12-1-01
23. Cloud Party reviews
Fuzzy pajamas and ice cream sundaes reignite a forgotten romance.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,107 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 11-11-01
24. Flying Saucers reviews
Six brothers lose a Frisbee, learn the hard way that mom's good china isn't the best substitute, and grow up more than they realize.
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,369 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 11-11-01
25. Hit or Miss reviews
"Have I waited too long/Have I found that someone?"
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 3,333 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 11-10-01
26. Dedication reviews
A guy finds a dedication to him from his best friend. Very fluffy.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,006 - Reviews: 4 - Published: 11-10-01
27. summer fading reviews
our own pyrotechnical acrobatics...
Poetry: General - Rated: K - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 75 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 11-10-01
28. Volume reviews
A moment of complete, perfect happiness.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,290 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 11-10-01
29. Suspension reviews
It doesn't seem like it's all going to be okay, and she could use a little morale, here.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 524 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 11-3-01
30. Closure
Now there's a ring and he's lost her again.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,070 - Published: 11-3-01
31. Last Chance reviews
I may not always know you, but I know I'll always love you.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 730 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 11-3-01
32. luminescence reviews
you gave me cloudless blue skies with the touch of a hand
Poetry: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 79 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 11-3-01
33. words reviews
his words are velvet; they are soft to the touch
Poetry: General - Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 72 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 11-3-01
34. rust reviews
is it cold in here...
Poetry: General - Rated: K - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 57 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 11-3-01
35. Brotherhood
It was different shades, different styles, different textures, but all of them had red hair, and they were undeniably brothers.
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 768 - Published: 10-6-01
36. Lipstick reviews
I'm still standing, in the wake of everything, but I don't know if I should wear the lipstick.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,542 - Reviews: 4 - Published: 9-1-01
37. Vanilla Ice reviews
"Don't break my heart again in the dairy aisle, Clarice." About the bonds of love and friendship and what it takes to break these bonds.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 6,989 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 8-27-01
38. Foreign Tongues reviews
The best I can offer you is something that is painful and not a lie.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,514 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8-26-01
39. Speed reviews
I sing with my eyes closed so I can't look at her.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,509 - Reviews: 6 - Published: 8-26-01
40. Parallel reviews
"See, Scotty, the thing is, you gotta savor them."
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,996 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 8-24-01
41. Full Tank reviews
Ice cream, gas money, and friendship: she's not as underappreciated as she thinks, sometimes.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,742 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 8-24-01
42. Sparkle and Fade reviews
It was charmed and glamorized, but they had to get out of there, and they had to do it together.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,652 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 8-24-01
43. Tailspin reviews
He's falling, been falling, but can she keep catching him?
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,094 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 8-24-01
44. Lightweight reviews
Little Lily Reider, through the eyes of a friend, isn't as weak as she seems.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance/Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,161 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 7-23-01
45. Suboral reviews
The things left unsaid between two best friends come out against their will on the last night they'll see each other before leaving for college.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,918 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 7-8-01
46. Sun Spots reviews
Two people just can't seem to go on without one another; codependence never seemed so sweet.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 493 - Reviews: 6 - Published: 7-8-01
47. Inconspicuous reviews
"The fastest way to succeed is to look as if you're playing by somebody else's rules, while quietly playing by your own." -Michael Konda
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Chapters: 1 - Words: 406 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 7-8-01
48. Unscripted reviews
What happens when the script you've carefully written falls away and you can't remember your lines? All comments appreciated!
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 2,713 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 6-16-01
49. Queen of the Jungle reviews
A short piece based on the word 'quest.' Very metaphorical.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 167 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 6-16-01
50. Cancerous reviews
Trapped, it will take everything to break free, but it is inarguably worth it.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 549 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 6-16-01
51. Dust to Dust reviews
Suicide Issues: What happens when you fail a friend?
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 952 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 5-30-01
52. Blank Slate reviews
"Maybe she'd be the only one left in the end, but then again, she was practically dead already."
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 421 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 5-30-01
53. Misconstrued reviews
"I don't think you like me much and I can't help but think think that I should care a lot more than I do."
Poetry: Song - Rated: K+ - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 362 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 5-13-01
54. Liberation reviews
Language. It's a little rough...about a friendship that has extended its welcome and implodes.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst/Humor - Chapters: 1 - Words: 459 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 5-13-01
55. Chills reviews
Better living through denial.
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Angst/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 0 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 5-12-01
56. Partly Cloudy reviews
Trying to fly and failing, trying to fall and failing, someone watches a friend stuck in the middle and struggling to go one way or the other.
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Angst/Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 0 - Reviews: 1 - Published: 5-12-01
57. Fear of Flying reviews
"Flying might be nice, but you've gotta land sometime."
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Angst/Romance - Chapters: 1 - Words: 0 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 5-12-01
58. Surrender reviews
Sometimes there's no stronger acid than one's own weakness.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,180 - Reviews: 4 - Published: 4-28-01
59. Keep Away » reviews
A girl, a catalyst, and the long journey to a breakdown.
Fiction: General - Rated: T - English - Humor/Angst - Chapters: 3 - Words: 32,654 - Reviews: 5 - Published: 4-16-01
60. X-Ray Vision reviews
Random ramblings of a mental hospital patient.
Fiction: General - Rated: K+ - English - Angst - Chapters: 1 - Words: 641 - Reviews: 9 - Published: 4-16-01
61. Variations on a Theme reviews
Three stories with the same first paragraph, but distinctly different endings.
Fiction: General - Rated: K - English - Drama - Chapters: 1 - Words: 1,511 - Reviews: 2 - Published: 4-16-01