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Fantasy with elements of the real world. First and second chapters that I want feedback on. I'm aware of the grammatical mistakes and errors in logic (in terms of the timeline). Please focus on the plot/content in your critique.

Fiction: Fantasy - Rated: T - English - Fantasy/Supernatural - Chapters: 4 - Words: 14,613 - Updated: 1-25-13 - Published: 1-15-13