Nicely done. Very powerful.

Uhmhmhm...

Breathe, just breathe...oh, those poor angsty and woeful queer boys, boohoo,and the troubles of their forbidden love...sobsobsob.

No. Don't you fucking see that you're just making the boundries of gay and straight bigger, you're making it worse.

Concentration on the lips, ugh its just plain old nasty, who the fuck wants to think about big chapped puckered lips?

This was bollocks.

Overall grade: D

I liked this. It was so tragic! *cries* I thought it was amusing: it has 622 words, that's my anniversary with my girlfriend! _ 6/22 (June 22). It was a great fic. Great job!

I liked this. It was so tragic! *cries* I thought it was amusing: it has 622 words, that's my anniversary with my girlfriend! _ 6/22 (June 22). It was a great fic. Great job!

i liked this. it's ambiguous, maybe a bit too much for my liking. it's very short, and naturally i think short stories are dangerous. there's always something that the author might have left out. i think you did convey what you wanted to convey, but i would like to know more than you tell me.

i like the want, the pleasure, and then the pain sequence. but i did not cry. should i have? i normally would, but you did not manage to grip me quickly and hold me for that long.

nonetheless, i liked it.

aw that was a sad little fic but rather poignant. Although i was rather confused at who was narrating but near the end i realised that it was the same guy throughout. All in all a rather moving piece, well done.

So short, so sweet, so deppressing. Lovely work. It's vague, yet intriguing. I love how it only shows only a few snapshots, yet it's very powerful.

Well written. Great depiction, especially without really havning to depict anything. Thats one of my favorite ways to present an are your own characters certainly, though, and not just whoever in some fanfic if I were to make a relation I would say it reminds me of Vanyel and Tylendel from TheLastHeraldMage trilogy by Mercedes Lackey. By chance have you ever read any of her works?

Oh, wow, this was beautiful. I noticed a couple typos but didn't pay them much attention as this short, lovely story more than covers them. With one word, you have truly said so much.

aww...that's so cute, but very sad. bittersweet. luv it!

Ooh, I like it. Especially the end.

... Thats so sad... my goodness... its terribly sweet. I really enjoy this. Well done.

I throughly loved my imagination too!Brilliant

WOW! :) I was in depression and somehow that cheered me up. It was beautiful. It kinda reminded me of Freddy and Zach from School of Rock. I love it!;)

Breathtaking... I dont know how else to describe it.