sup dude u like rule!

yo story like rocks!

That was AWESOME! Great Job!

The concept of your story is cool, but the style of how you wrote it is hideous. For example; after someone says something, there is *supposed* to be a line break. It looks like you just crammed everything together on one thing. Split the important things, like your planets, and characters into a different chapter also, it's confusing to read.

This is so cool! Keep writing