hey... pretty good good good beginging! where this story gunna go?

*stare*

DESCRIPTIONS, DESCRIPTIONS! gah, love EVERYTHING you've written! im just *hung* there and clinging on the edge, trying to scrabble for more, heh

there must be more?

.okay, ill shut up, keh.x_X

very intriguing, do continue )

Great start! very imaginative, and descriptive.

Very good... you have to write the next chapter! *hint, hint!*

This is really interesting. You've got a good writing style and I like it. This is good, I can't wait until you get more chapters up!