Reviews for While you sleep |
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![]() ![]() I did a random search and chose your story on a whim. I really could relate to the text and the style, and the emotions felt genuine. I sincerely cannot find anything outstandingly incorrect about this piece. Thanks for the read. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG I love this so far, I can't wait to read the rest. I relate to it a whole freakin' bunch, I did the exact same thing thinking the same things except it was at her house. Is this a true story? |
![]() ![]() awz, it's so sweet! You have a true talent for writing romance, keep it up :) |
![]() ![]() This is a lovely story. I like the way it flows and it's well-written. My only complaint (grammar freak that I am) is that you don't do possessives correctly. For instance: "Jacobs hard-on" Should be, "Jacob's hard-on." Not a big thing, but an import thing. Aside from that, the story was beautiful. |
![]() ![]() ![]() that TotaLLY ROCKED. It was fucking brilliant. So sweet, so perfect, so sad... |
![]() ![]() The end of this story sorta reminds me of two people I know. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome keep writing I love it. Does it refer to any petrsonal experiences? Kinda hits close to the makr for me. Keep writing please! Laters! ~Sammy PLUR |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked this story, are you going to write any more? Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. This was really good. So honest, so brutally pure... So open. Exellent set-up. |
![]() ![]() thats beautiful. its so well written, i was almost there, and amusing too... what else have you written, i want to read it! |