Action-packed and mysterious as well. This is the best chapter so far. Keep it up!

(Ang galing-galing niyo pong magsulat. I hope na mai-publish ito, or maisa-anime. Magiging fan ako nito, pramis!)

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That was nice. The description was excellent, plus the action. I like it. There were times when i'm worried and then i'll go laughing my head out. Excellently written.

(Oh well, sorry if my reviews are crappy. I'm, well, totally flabbergasted!)

Tension has began. Trouble is brewing. Go Zero!

couldn't help but grin...Zero's attitude, so cool and so cute.

bakit pakiramdam ko may kung anong hiwagang bumabalot sa mga huling talata ng kabanatang ito? hehe, wala lang po...just a hunch...palagay ko, bagay si lineah at mignard...

-same-

well...what should i say? medyo mahirap gawan ng review ito kasi po ang iikli ng chapters niyo...

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nice description, but i guess this is a lil bit uneventful

nice foreword...

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I like the start of this. Prince Mingard is a good character. The descriptions of the people and places in this story are stunning

Very good start. I love the detail that you put into describing the city and the two camps. I could learn a lot from it.

Your story seems interesting so far... I'll read more some other time, but your details are great! I do look forward to more to see what the plot and storyline is (etc.).

Very nice setup you got going here. For some odd reason, something is pulling me to read this story. Maybe curiousity? Or maybe I want to check out how good you are and see if I am able to top it. I'm always like that, reading others and finding someway to top it off just like when I watch a movie and already thinking endless possiblity to top this story off. Maybe when I'm done reading this, I am able to help you to create sequels and side-stories with forgotten characters or characters you think you don't have time to develop. Anyways, I would love it for you to review my stories, but unfortunately, I deleted them all for more revision updates. I'm going to read this story since it pipped my interests greatly and review each and every chapter as I go. Actually, I like it when the chapters are long. One of my old stories only had 7 or 8 chapters but each were like above 20-30k words. So yeah... I stop talking now and go and read the story. Take Care.

Xin - Project Versus

Versus Infinity - Reaching Beyond Limits

Well, I must say that I'm really impressed with the among of work you put in this story. I too believe in planning the story through before submitting (at least with the more important events, unnecesarry in detail), that is why one of them is still yet to have even the first chapter uploaded.

I got quite intrigued and even visited the official website... I prefered not to read too much, to not spoil myself the story, but I must say that this Zero guy having a nickname "Dragonchild" just makes me recall my story, "Dragonblood" hehe.

I do have a piece of advice for you: although REALLY long chapters may be hard to go through, making chapters as short as this isn't a good idea either. For example this one is basically an info dumb. Just dry facts with no 'action' (and by action I don't mean fights). From my own experiance I can tell you that people don't like info dumbs (heck, those are the things that annoy me the most in even books), coz on my own example I can tell you that half of the information you gave in this chapter alone didn't stick in my head at all and sure I don't think it'll be that necesarry to understand the story (so there's two groups of bandits... basically I don't see much more info that would be needed in this case). The first chapter of my "Forgotten Sands" was an intro and I got complains that it wasn't necesarry to put this much info at the beginning.

My other advice to you is to make those chapter longer. If this is the length of a typical chapter, then I'd advice you put two chapters together to make one out of them. That way you might be able to avoid just info-dumping chapters and much more will happen during them (I can tell you that there's nothing more annoying then you waiting for a chapter and then receiving one that doesn't really push the story forward).

However this story seems interesting. I can't say a thing about plotwise or anything, but I have a good feeling about it. And with the number of reviews you've gotten for far I take it a lot of people found your story worth readin, so I'll stop by in the near future to read some more.

Good luck.

Okay, finally read it all! Took me a while...Eh.

Anyway, my main problem, because I always have one, is that you're story is too much like an anime or manga. At the same time, you've already stated that you were going for that effect so I can't blame you too much. No other real comments.

Shadowhound