|Reviews for Disqualified|
| kif chapter 5 . 12/16/2002
Ooh, interesting story so far. Your writing style is a tad repetative, especially since you have a whole bunch of sentences along the lines of "Exhaling, I focused on the smoke swirling up and disappearing into nothing," if you get what I mean. Too many of the same sort of sentence is a tad dull.
And one thing bothered me...
“Crawling in the dark. I know them.”
"Crawling in the dark is a Hoobastank song...sorry to nitpick, I'm just a really HUGE Incubus fan. You can ignore me if you like. P
Anyhoo...nice work, please continue.
| Alchera chapter 4 . 11/22/2002
Aack! What happens next? Hurry up and write more! It was good and I liked it. By the way, I like you pen name too. VERY much so.
| Bienfoy chapter 1 . 11/22/2002
i just read all of this, it's great!you've got the emotion down so well. a really brill idea, too:D
| Mackenzie Anderson chapter 2 . 11/4/2002
Hrm... very well done for the start of this story. You've got me intrigued-I'd like to see what happens with Jo and Clair. Your writing style is good-clear and concise, to the point. Hope to see more soon.