I would suggest you change the structure of the poem. There are lots of commas where you really don't need them, a few places missing commas where they could be used, that sort of thing. Also, you really don't need to limit yourself to the four lines per stanza rule. A lot of these lines could mesh right into each other and I would say this might be a more enjoyable read if placed all in one block.

Great twist on the ending!

This is amazing! I love it, it has so muching meaning. Pob hwyl!

-Tanzy

could have added this eh? To the poems I mean. Oh but I bet it will be lovely. I love the song you are coming up with. It's beautiful!

Wow, pretty gorry but still good

Interesting twist at the end. In verse 6 is it him in a true state of evil or you? I guess it takes evil to destroy evil.