Reviews for Broken
Simoriah Tyler chapter 1 . 6/22/2003
In your author's note at the beginning, you said:

"May I suggest that if you DO feel this way, you seek medical attention - it's really not healthy... "

And yet YOU felt this way when you wrote the thing. Not unlike when you said "How can her parents help if they don't know it's going on", is it?

Yes, I know you're gunna tell me to shut up.
Simoriah Girl of Summer chapter 1 . 5/30/2003
Wow...sometimes I kinda feel like that, I'm good at confusing people...and I'm rarely seen by anyone that doesn't already look for me in the morning at school (then they just think I'm in a closet with my friend, the guy I use to like...)...and there's plenty of times when I find I'm not really needed...or wanted around for that matter...and as for the 'wrods will never hurt me' thing, I tried to make it true, but the guy I use to like more or less broke that into millions of tiny pieces...but I can say that I'm at least a little influential, though not in any major ways...and because of the guy I use to like, I'm probably never going to try to find someone to love at least for a very long time, if ever...but you don't have to worry about me, the music I listen to keeps me from thinking like that most of the time...I think it's cool how I could kinda relate to parts of that...
Nevermore Forevermore chapter 1 . 5/27/2003
How sad! nice job, though.
The Mushroom Fairy chapter 1 . 5/2/2003
Oh, this is, again, TRUTH incarnate. You're so talented... You will do great things in your life. If only everyone could be so honest and see life in such a clear light...

The end, about a woman being ripped from the narrator's life, also touched something in me. Total strangers, but I see you and I have a lot in common.

Great work. So truthful, so beautiful, so painful. Kudos.
Cassie Parris chapter 1 . 10/28/2002
Good heavens you write LONG poems. you seem to like to write in blank verse, in a extremely immence amount of...stanzas...but i LIKE it. there is nothing wrong with a little blank verse to start my day...or yours. have you ever considered lyrical know...the stuff that rhymes and has a beat? it can be quite challenging...but i tell's mighty fun. because THEN, you can turn it into a songy-poo. and AYYY! you could become famous, and like...uh...damn...brain fart...