|Reviews for Humans|
| aurias chapter 1 . 1/21/2003
The rhythm for some parts of the poem runs smoothly and for others, it was kind of not in sync. Try to keep the sentences about the same length, reading will be smoother. Alternatively, you can have 1 long and 1 short for certain emphasis. For example, in a stanza, you can have long, short, long, short.
Kind of a pessimistic poem. I also see some link with sleeping beauty and even on how chinese ladies chose their husbands long ago! Interesting!
| Robs chapter 1 . 1/19/2003
A little long...but still good.