|Reviews for But|
| Keree chapter 1 . 9/13/2009
This is really deep and I think that has good potinal and message for alot of people.
| Chasing Skylines chapter 1 . 4/25/2009
I liked the usage of "actually" in the first stanza. It shows the narrator's character, how she thinks happiness can only come out of love and affection; and then throughout the poem you show her hesitation to be too attached. The narrator's character was really realistic.
[i want to tell you hoe much you mean to me]
"Hoe" should be "how."
I liked how the last line was so simple, nothing fancy, just how she felt: scared.
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| May Elizabeth chapter 1 . 1/18/2009
I really loved this poem. It's how I feel now. Wanting to be with someone, but I won't allow it as much as I want it. -Sigh- . I try but I can't let it go. It sucks. Peace.
| lymli chapter 1 . 6/13/2008
everybody has fear to fall in love, but it's a nice feeling.
| iloveanimecartoons NLI chapter 1 . 2/26/2008
This was a very good piece. Life's 'buts' and love isn't immune to the list. This was very hearty in emotion and just plain reality. Having gone through similar emotions, I can relate. I enjoyed this very much!
| XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 1 . 1/22/2008
Very understandable. ITs ok be scared but don't stay hidden for to long. Great work!
| sweets555 chapter 1 . 12/16/2007
okay, so, i know exactly what you mean. and i love it. great job!
| pneumothorax chapter 1 . 5/29/2005
Clear message well presented, simply written. I prefer your haikus and shorter ones but, as a longer poem, it's still good.
Goal as paraphrasing makes me think. It's good.. though I already said that.
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/6/2005
¿where's the happy ground between lost & self?—
¿can there be a median in love's game?
when volition pushes body's limit,
it will complain right back with searing pain,
¿is that why love often can hurt so bad?
¿is there a line we should not ever cross?
¿for going past it is to lose our soul,—
& true love would never demand so much?
| Rocky G chapter 1 . 1/27/2005
Wow, I love how it captures the fear of falling in love. The risk is worth the chance to find true love always. Excellent work, it takes me back to old times before I found mine. :)
| myno chapter 1 . 1/7/2005
simple, and a rather different style from your recent poetry. As a point of interest, I scrolled to the bottom of your page today and have started to skim my way up- there's no way I can read them all, but i'm enjoying the journey through your old poems.
| A Face Worth Remembering chapter 1 . 1/1/2005
I really wish I had a boyfriend so I could ar least pretend like I know how that feels. But, wow. I like how you set it up.~Elli
| mizerable-girl chapter 1 . 12/29/2004
wow... this is deep... but sometimes, you have to take a risk, if you really love that person. or else you'll regret it every minute of your life(ok.. mybe not... im just exaggerating) that you just let that chance of love pass by
| PenguinsGoOOM chapter 1 . 12/7/2004
i rememeber wat this was like in middle school. everyonece in a while now. People are always scared of how other ppl are going to react to how they feel, so most people hide them inside. This is a great poem, good job!
| angel of sorrow n darkness chapter 1 . 9/26/2004
this is good and very relatable