Reviews for The Darkness
anoymous chapter 1 . 11/25/2004
Do you know the most horrible and joyous truth of the human heart? That the heart should heal, that it should forget its pain in the presence of joy and love. As you displayed in the first couple of stanzas, you were left in a cold, barren world of ice and darkness. But as the poem reached the second to last verse, you saw a glimmer and quote, "What joy love hath!" Now, I am not trying to undermine anything in your poem. It is quite appetizing, in fact!It is just that, I abhor my human heart, and wish to lose it. And your poem showed the humaness that I can never lose. My hat off to you, Lone Hawk.
AN chapter 1 . 10/28/2003
Dude...

Poems are not all about Images of Beauty and Nature Umi, there are other forms of Imagery

One more thing, its not very nice to say "this is one of your worst"

I accept constructive criticism, but thats just not nice.

-Green Yoshi the Pissed-
FuriKuriPillows chapter 1 . 10/28/2003
It's Umi again.

This one's is your worst, but still pretty good. It lacks the incredible imagery that you used in your other poems, and it sounds like it was written in your early days of writing. Hey, it's probably better than some stuff that I've got.

-Umi the Blue Haired
Anjeni Windsinger chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
Wow. Awesome work.

"Here I inhabit,

Here I will stay.

Here I will rot and,

Here I'll decay."

Those were my favorite, excellent lines. Keep writing!
PuddingPie chapter 1 . 6/11/2003
its not to bad. i like. do u think you could come and check out some of my poems?
Rhetorics chapter 1 . 5/30/2003
wooaahh...

I'm living alone

In my spiraling world,

Watch as it plummets,

How quickly it hurls.

I love that stanza! Spiraling world... lol, I don't know what I love about that so much but it's just so _ . Can I steal it? lol, jk. Good job!
Cindy Moon chapter 1 . 1/18/2003
Yet in the deepest darkness there is a light.

A wonderful poem...

One stanza stuck out to me however.

"No light shines before me

To guide me away

No guardian angel

To help he who strayed"

A contrast to previous works?
kawaii-kirei chapter 1 . 11/19/2002
Hm... I like the ryhming! You should write more! *o*
Odin1 chapter 1 . 11/19/2002
Simply great. Very good imagery and description. I like it a lot. Keep up the good work.