Reviews for Forgiven
Nai Nebel chapter 1 . 4/7/2004
This makes me think... especially of what I'm going through now. My girlfriend is a thousand miles away, and moving. I won't be able to talk to her for a while... just letters. And I'm afraid she'll find someone there... better as he's close, not far away like me.
Cyanotok chapter 1 . 8/8/2003
Hmm, interesting topic. Cheating sucks. And it hurts. Onto details of the poem.

If you left "those three words" up to the imagination of the reader, and if you didn't SAY that men's hand are calloused, I believe that you would have a better effect in the poem, and convey the same message in fewer words.

"Brevity is the soul of wit."
rosepetal1077 chapter 1 . 6/17/2003
oh dear... i dont know if this came from a real experiance but i really can relate
Ritina chapter 1 . 11/26/2002
*sniff sniff* WAAAAAAAH!
ReaDiNGS DaRK RoSe chapter 1 . 4/6/2002
this is whow i felt after i spilt with my boyf. oh well! Jaymi xxxx
Cait chapter 1 . 10/12/2001
Der...wink!