This is so sweet! I hope your girlfriend understood what an amazing boyfriend she had before it was too late. I hope she knows there are girls out there who would kill for a boyfriend as devoted as you.

Best wishes to you and your girlfriend, and to your brother and his girlfriend. May you always find your way to happiness, even through the toughest times.

Thankyou for being living proof that decent guys who can express themselves are not an extinct race. I hope things worked out between you and your girlfriend, even though this is several years after the fact, so whatever happened is already well and truly happened.

On the other hand, this "hidden meaning" you mentioned in your author note... sorry to break it to you, but it was about as hidden as a red beach ball on a white bedsheet.;)

All in all though, a sweet gesture..

Erisah

Oh! *jumps up and down* *applauds* :) This is awesome! So bittersweet and sad somehow, but then the end has a really big impact, and then the fact that it's for your girlfriend who seems to have the same paranoia as I, makes it much more than a simple poem...amazing! Hope things work out with you and your girlfriend and do write more poems like these! Love, Mia

aww. i have nothing to say but "Aaww". the poem was cliche... cliche but sweet. don't worry... your girlfriend's just insecure... she'll get over it. all of us females do. how u too hav a great relationship... hehe.

your work is the definition of . This poem really touches one's heart...great job!
Ps: please r&r my poem and story!

*sniff* It's so beautiful... *sob* I LOVE YOU.

oh my god, that was so utterly incredible. first off, let me say that i love fantasy fairtales and such. but it was the end that got me. i mean, seriously *CHILLS*. the second to last stanza was an absolutely genius transition (loved the line "or is the knight his life to lose?") ~ such a brilliant way to bring the reader into it! and in the last stanza, the capital letters were a great move: they really actually put PRESSURE on the reader to make a decision; i mean, i truly felt like i was boxed into a corner and someone had a knife at my neck and was telling me to make a life or death decision . . . it was great. :P so, SO good . . . can't even begin to say how much i like it. a grand accomplishment indeed! much kudos to you, and i hope everything worked out between you guys!

BOOM BOOM! tee hee _

WRITE MORE PLEASE!

your to sweet...i love your poem..please post more

Wow... that was... wonderful... I loved everything about it! The rhyme, the rythm, the words, the story... everything. Really awesome job.