Reviews for The Heir
zagato chapter 3 . 6/10/2004
this is an amazing story. please write more.
Xelena chapter 3 . 1/27/2003
Chapter 2: i would imagine so- they're kinda like the Worms in MIB. what exactly is Mawvi?

a miniature dragon? anyways, i like the gossip that the imps share- it's kinda interesting

that imps should gossip just like humans. but then again, why not?

i KNEW that drow was trouble- just the way she insinuated things... So, i wonder

if His Worship will ever know that it wasn't Lila's fault the baby died- that he was

murdered by the now dead drow.

why are Lila's clothes being cleaned? what does His Worship have planned?

at least Feino's nice to Lila- popping her shoulders back into place... and

explaining to her why she's still alive...

well, at least now Lila has some insight into why she's still suffering... *cough*

i mean, still living.

Chapter 3: it's start to clear up now- so Lila was kidnapped as a sacrifice to Feral- that

makes more sense then as to why she's treated so badly. and the force that held Pedra back

was probably Feral himself- if what Senya said was right. After all, the humans were once

Chosen. Corling-interesting name. oh, so she is an imp.

The imp's running a risk saying that- but she has intelligence behind the comment-

sense that the Dark Priest seems to be forgetting. Duh! next child- if he asks her if

she's willing to carry his child, then maybe she might say yes! hello- earth to His

Worship. poor Pedra's just stressed and so isn't thinking straight.

there we go- now he's thinking straight.

ooo- so now Lila gets treated well- the tables have turned. she's sleeping on a

canopy bed and has had a buffet and her clothes returned to her.

Bad Pedra... you have to be nice to her. and he likes what he sees. and he doesn't

have to worry about her waking up, because she starts sleep talking to him.

and once again, the women one up him. first the imp Mawvi, now the human princess.

both with common sense.

ah- and now we're getting somewhere. there's the two keys phrases:

"You have never shown me kindness or good."

"You are the last of your kind," Lila pointed out."

awww- poor baby... awwww- how sweet. he's really partly human, or rather, has human

emotions since humans were actually originally Chosen.
Kynria chapter 3 . 12/28/2002
i liked the way you made Pedragonov express emotion. you did that very well. please write more so i can find out what happens.
DominoDS chapter 2 . 12/25/2002
cow towing! LOL! Shauna would be happy to see that you put her word in there! And the popping the arms back into place. *shudder* ouchies. Great chapter, sorry I didn't leave a review for this one. Heh and I love the names to the imps *wink wink* I think the name I'll always remember from your original book would be Feino. Great chapter, promised I'd review :D
DominoDS chapter 3 . 12/24/2002
Great chapter, especially revealing the truth about Senya to Pendragonov finally. It's good that Lila has stopped being tortured too, poor girl. I love how you let him reveal some real emotions to her in the end. Great writing :D
Kynria chapter 2 . 12/19/2002
Very good and dark, i like. I wonder what he has planned for poor Lila. I hope to find out. Please update soon!
Xelena chapter 1 . 12/15/2002
You know what he reminds me of? a minotaur, specifically the

minotaur in King Minos labyrinth on Crete.

Poor Lila, she didn't do anything wrong, it's not her fault that he's

stupid, that his whole race really is stupid. and yet he's blaming her for

killing his heir, when he was all in the wrong. 1) he kidnapped her, 2) he

raped her 3) he starved her which probably stunted the growth of the child &

4) he's a demon and she's human.

Senya is quite sadistic & Pedragonov is quite stupid; i mean, if you breed

incestuously, your royal line becomes stupid, and if you kill the females, how

do you think you can breed at all? i mean, really. oops, Senya said the wrong


What to do about Lila? how about treating her nicely and feeding her

properly first if you even want her to be able to bear a semi-healthy child.

because torturing and starving her isn't going to allow her to carry a healthy

baby- i mean a mother can't carry a healthy baby to birth unless she's healthy

Fuu Hououji1 chapter 1 . 12/13/2002
Oooooooooh. Good, but creeeepy. Gave me shivers when I read it!
Guest chapter 1 . 12/12/2002
very good and dark, but it wasn't really explained who the other woman was? other than that very well written
Dave chapter 1 . 12/11/2002
Holy cow. Kind of messed up, but cool. Very dark.
Matthieu chapter 1 . 12/11/2002
A very good setting and plot, I'm interested in what happens next.
DominoDS chapter 1 . 12/11/2002
Hey, pretty dark and twisted but nice. You just made me shuttered when Lila's arms were torn from their sockets. I visualized it...-_-' caught an interest though. Nice job :)
cian chapter 1 . 12/11/2002
That's really good! I love it!